The Bottom Flannel Sheet
Comparison between life and the bottom sheet12 total reviews
Comment from Badger_29
A very good example of something that red kind of like a story but turned into a poem I guess you would call that Pros. A very nice metaphor for jumbled thoughts waking up under the bottom plow sheet twisting and turning trying to make some sense of it all heck of a way to start your day. Lovely well written and all of your writing has a lot of meaning for me as I see a lot of parallels and comparisons we have a lot in common such a pleasure and honor to write with you here.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
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A very good example of something that red kind of like a story but turned into a poem I guess you would call that Pros. A very nice metaphor for jumbled thoughts waking up under the bottom plow sheet twisting and turning trying to make some sense of it all heck of a way to start your day. Lovely well written and all of your writing has a lot of meaning for me as I see a lot of parallels and comparisons we have a lot in common such a pleasure and honor to write with you here.
Blessings,
Brother Badger
Comment Written 04-Jun-2018
Comment from nartoonla
An amusing little piece with a truthful touch, story. Yes, at times we struggle and hard indeed to make it where others have perhaps fought less. But in the end the one that struggles has more of a human heart he, or she is already on top.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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An amusing little piece with a truthful touch, story. Yes, at times we struggle and hard indeed to make it where others have perhaps fought less. But in the end the one that struggles has more of a human heart he, or she is already on top.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2018
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Thank you for your supportive review. You affirmed one of my intents when you related it to life.
Comment from Beck Fenton
Ah, the struggles that Vermonter's know only too well. Flannel sheets in winter AND flannel P.J.'s.
Those who keep shifting eventually do rise to the top. Great metaphor for the struggles to get where we want to be.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Ah, the struggles that Vermonter's know only too well. Flannel sheets in winter AND flannel P.J.'s.
Those who keep shifting eventually do rise to the top. Great metaphor for the struggles to get where we want to be.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Oh, yes, flannel sheets & flannel PJ's & velour socks...it made me laugh to read this. Thank you for your amusing review. I'm glad you enjoyed this.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Meaning of Life' writing prompt.
Well told and a good explanation of the jumbled nature of life. Sometimes it just can't be explained.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Meaning of Life' writing prompt.
Well told and a good explanation of the jumbled nature of life. Sometimes it just can't be explained.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your positive review. One of my intents is to draw the reader in to think about the meaning of my work and you affirmed this.
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Yep happens all the time once you think you got one thing figured out something else comes up you always in the mix I can truly relate to this scenario thank you for sharing I love you pastel colors and that bedroom is cozy and very soft colors and dainty. I guess that emphasizes your flannel sheets. Good job.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Yep happens all the time once you think you got one thing figured out something else comes up you always in the mix I can truly relate to this scenario thank you for sharing I love you pastel colors and that bedroom is cozy and very soft colors and dainty. I guess that emphasizes your flannel sheets. Good job.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Thank you for affirming one of my intents, to draw the reader in so they begin to make correlations with their own experience and at the same enjoy the writing. Thank you also for the compliments on the visual aspect. At least we'll be struggling in pastels...lol
Comment from BeasPeas
I like your sheet analogy. I wondered how or who would be under the bottom sheet, but I think it can be very confining under there as we would struggle to get on top--as in life. A stunning image to accompany your poem. Marilyn
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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I like your sheet analogy. I wondered how or who would be under the bottom sheet, but I think it can be very confining under there as we would struggle to get on top--as in life. A stunning image to accompany your poem. Marilyn
Comment Written 26-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. One of my intents is to get people to wonder and see the analogy in their life. You have affirmed my intent.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Love the sheet analogy and the idea of wiggle to get ahead. Like the line, "top of the bottom." I bet many readers can relate to that feeling. A great choice for the meaning of life poem. Good luck to you.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Love the sheet analogy and the idea of wiggle to get ahead. Like the line, "top of the bottom." I bet many readers can relate to that feeling. A great choice for the meaning of life poem. Good luck to you.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your expression of appreciation of my intent to amuse my readers. It helps to be amused when wiggling out of a difficult situation.
Comment from Marisela Contona
This is very good your comparison of life struggles being compared to getting tied up in bedsheets. It is a lot like life no, matter how much we try its never 100 percent comfort in our lives.
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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This is very good your comparison of life struggles being compared to getting tied up in bedsheets. It is a lot like life no, matter how much we try its never 100 percent comfort in our lives.
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Comment Written 25-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your confirming review. Life certainly has its twists and turns.
Comment from meeshu
I really like this a lot. this is a difficult rhyme scheme to master. you have done it very well, it reads nicely. love the idea of the petty struggles that become all-consuming in life. conjures up Steinbeck for me.....thanx...meeshu
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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I really like this a lot. this is a difficult rhyme scheme to master. you have done it very well, it reads nicely. love the idea of the petty struggles that become all-consuming in life. conjures up Steinbeck for me.....thanx...meeshu
Comment Written 25-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Steinbeck is one of my all-time favorites. I'm honored to bring his literature to your reference of my poetry. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much and it drew you in to think more about life.
Comment from Katya
Oh, this is really fun. Nice control of the sound and meter too. Not exactly what one would call deep, but the light touch is often the best. A good response to the writing prompt. Smiles!
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Oh, this is really fun. Nice control of the sound and meter too. Not exactly what one would call deep, but the light touch is often the best. A good response to the writing prompt. Smiles!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Once again I am enjoying your enthusiasm. Thank you for your expression of appreciation of my work.