Attitude Adjustment Needed
2nd Place Winner: Diamante Contest Entry40 total reviews
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Very ingenious too much for my mind but I like it. I think you did an excellent job with the pyramid effect and with the wording of Apathy. And with that added picture with the description of Apathy I think it adds a little extra touch to your presentation. Very good job, something I never would have thought of.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Very ingenious too much for my mind but I like it. I think you did an excellent job with the pyramid effect and with the wording of Apathy. And with that added picture with the description of Apathy I think it adds a little extra touch to your presentation. Very good job, something I never would have thought of.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2018
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Hello Mary,
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review. The diamante is not everyone's favorite form and is a bit trickier than most people realize. The sixth line is the stumbling block for most writers as the two words utilized must be synonyms of the final word - not just descriptive words that a person can feel when feeling compassion, for example.
Thank you again!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Apathy and compassion (and everything that comes between them)...there couldn't be two words that contrast more in meaning than these.
Love/Hate.
Night/Day.
Right/Wrong
Live/Die...these combinations are fine but used far too commonly in poems such as these. It's nice to read something a bit deeper and interesting for a change.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Apathy and compassion (and everything that comes between them)...there couldn't be two words that contrast more in meaning than these.
Love/Hate.
Night/Day.
Right/Wrong
Live/Die...these combinations are fine but used far too commonly in poems such as these. It's nice to read something a bit deeper and interesting for a change.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Dean!
Twice in one day!
Thank you ever so much for stopping by and enjoying my diamante. It's not a favorite format for many writers, but I find it challenging and rewarding...when and if it works...
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You're more than welcome.
~Dean :)
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Diane, this is a great example for a Diamanté poem. You have chosen two very good opposite words - Apathy v Compassion to make a strong entry. I can see why it won first place. Well done. ~DD
Slight typo here - "jaded disinter(e)st..."
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Diane, this is a great example for a Diamanté poem. You have chosen two very good opposite words - Apathy v Compassion to make a strong entry. I can see why it won first place. Well done. ~DD
Slight typo here - "jaded disinter(e)st..."
Comment Written 25-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Holy Toledo!
Thank you so much for catching that spelling glitch. I am definitely going to blame it on computer gremlins as my "perfect" set of eyes read and re-read this diamante so many times they lost count! :)
It hasn't won anything yet...that I know of...but thank you for the best wishes!
Thank you for the excellent review and rating; diamantes are not everyone's favorite, but they are challenging and rewarding to pen!
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Any time...ol?eagle eye is watching :-) ~DD
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Love it!
I definitely could use a new pair of eyes! My eyesight is abysmal!
Comment from jusylee72
Extremely well done, This is a hard form yet you seemed to ease into it and it is fascinating how it changes from sad to wonderful. Very talented, Well thought out.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Extremely well done, This is a hard form yet you seemed to ease into it and it is fascinating how it changes from sad to wonderful. Very talented, Well thought out.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Much appreciation for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
Thank you!
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, an interesting write, familiar in description and justified in hopeful conclusion - fully compliant with the prompt and informative notes, which I found enlightening. Thank you for including them. I wish you much luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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In my opinion, an interesting write, familiar in description and justified in hopeful conclusion - fully compliant with the prompt and informative notes, which I found enlightening. Thank you for including them. I wish you much luck in the contest...
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello evesayshi!
Thank you for our excellent rating and complimentary review!
Diamantes often get slammed for being non-poetic. A tad bit unfair... as they do test the poet's ability on a number of levels: word choice, creativity, and being able to get a message across in a prescribed manner. And they are short! :)
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You are very welcome indeed...Eve
Comment from Zue65
Diamante is an interesting poetic form and the author did rise up to the challenge of writing one. Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Diamante is an interesting poetic form and the author did rise up to the challenge of writing one. Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Comment from His Grayness
Wishing I had the sixth star to thank this author for this fine lesson on this unique poetic style! I found the artwork and coloration to be very well done in capturing the reader into the emotion of this work which itself seemed to be perfect from my point of view! My thanks for a lovely poetry lesson! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Wishing I had the sixth star to thank this author for this fine lesson on this unique poetic style! I found the artwork and coloration to be very well done in capturing the reader into the emotion of this work which itself seemed to be perfect from my point of view! My thanks for a lovely poetry lesson! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
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Hello Vance!
What a complimentary review!
Thank you very much!
Glad you enjoyed!
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Nice work and thank you indeed! Vance
Comment from karenina
You wrote an excellent poem, you've made an important point...you've correctly juxtaposed compassion and apathy and I applaud you for all of this and more....
That being said I HATE this form for ME.....it is a "thing" with me that writing it
gives me three weeks of writer's block and a fever (kidding)---
HENCE I appreciate anyone who can write it with skill and make it work! (It'll just never happen for me, I know)
Smile....
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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You wrote an excellent poem, you've made an important point...you've correctly juxtaposed compassion and apathy and I applaud you for all of this and more....
That being said I HATE this form for ME.....it is a "thing" with me that writing it
gives me three weeks of writer's block and a fever (kidding)---
HENCE I appreciate anyone who can write it with skill and make it work! (It'll just never happen for me, I know)
Smile....
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hah Karenina!
Thank you for your excellent rating and review! I feel about sonnets the way you feel about diamantes. But I just keep plugging along; cannot allow myself to become apathetic... :) :)
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Me too! I try in spite of my frustration! One of these days it'll click!
Karenina
Comment from Twinsissy
Wow!!
what a strong and energetic grasp of feeling
for the word which, in itself, says so much.
Apathy is without, or void, of caring;
your use of the adjectives to describe this
are so accurate
and one that can be related to.
I read it several times, and felt
both its meaning and power.
thanks
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Wow!!
what a strong and energetic grasp of feeling
for the word which, in itself, says so much.
Apathy is without, or void, of caring;
your use of the adjectives to describe this
are so accurate
and one that can be related to.
I read it several times, and felt
both its meaning and power.
thanks
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Twinsissy!
So pleased you appreciate my diamante.
I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review!
Comment from Marge Setzer
A beautifully constructed contrast poem. The two nouns were clearly the antitheisis of each other and your choice of adjectives and "ing' words building to the fourth line and then doing the same thing in reverse were well chosen. The diamande is visually perfect for the theme as it mimics the building of the negative factor and the gradual segue into the positive attitude. Nicely done. Marge
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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A beautifully constructed contrast poem. The two nouns were clearly the antitheisis of each other and your choice of adjectives and "ing' words building to the fourth line and then doing the same thing in reverse were well chosen. The diamande is visually perfect for the theme as it mimics the building of the negative factor and the gradual segue into the positive attitude. Nicely done. Marge
Comment Written 23-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
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Hello Marge!
I am thrilled that you appreciated my diamante = not everyone's favorite form; that is for certain!
Thank you for your exceptional rating and complimentary review!
