Skippin' the Obits
Knock on the door contest.19 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Oh-oh! Maybe he shouldn't sleep there tonight. Lol. Great storytelling, JoAnn. Loved the dialectal speech and the humor. Yes, those obits are part of the paper we miss. At least, we can hunt the internet if we think someone might have passed on before us. Congratulations on your win!!
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Oh-oh! Maybe he shouldn't sleep there tonight. Lol. Great storytelling, JoAnn. Loved the dialectal speech and the humor. Yes, those obits are part of the paper we miss. At least, we can hunt the internet if we think someone might have passed on before us. Congratulations on your win!!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2018
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Thanks so much!
Comment from karenina
Yes! A spooky tale told with wit and with an ending twist that just made me howl....
not howl like a bedeviled ghost by the way...don't want you thinkin' I'm yet another obit scammer looking for a free lie, er obit that shines like the full moon we both so love!
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Yes! A spooky tale told with wit and with an ending twist that just made me howl....
not howl like a bedeviled ghost by the way...don't want you thinkin' I'm yet another obit scammer looking for a free lie, er obit that shines like the full moon we both so love!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2018
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Haha. Thanks much for your enjoyable review. So glad u enjoyed.
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I did....clever write!---Karenina
Comment from Dawn Munro
Love, love, LOVE this! My only nit is a few misplaced commas, but woman, this rocks! I see how it won the contest - the story is a winner all round, the vernacular setting the scene perfectly. Six-worthy, if I only had one!
no comma before "one of these days"
no comma after "fantastic"
not needed after "swing" & "funerals" & "arrhythmias"
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Love, love, LOVE this! My only nit is a few misplaced commas, but woman, this rocks! I see how it won the contest - the story is a winner all round, the vernacular setting the scene perfectly. Six-worthy, if I only had one!
no comma before "one of these days"
no comma after "fantastic"
not needed after "swing" & "funerals" & "arrhythmias"
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much-your virtual 6 is every bit as valuable to me as the real thing! Let me know about those commas if u get time-they are my enemy, it seems. LOL.
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Updated your review.
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Thanks much!
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You're welcome.
Comment from jenintorre
Just read this story and I am blown away by it. Such good writing and congratulations on winning the compeition, so well deserved. It is so atmospheric. Love Jen.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Just read this story and I am blown away by it. Such good writing and congratulations on winning the compeition, so well deserved. It is so atmospheric. Love Jen.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much for your thoughtful comments and the wonderful green star!!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Mistydawn
Congratulations on your win. I definitely can see why it would. It's well-written, very descriptive drew me in from the start. The characters thoughts, actions, moved the plot along nicely. The muddy footprints at the end was a nice touch.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Congratulations on your win. I definitely can see why it would. It's well-written, very descriptive drew me in from the start. The characters thoughts, actions, moved the plot along nicely. The muddy footprints at the end was a nice touch.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Thanks much! Appreciate you reading.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A great little entry for the competition and congratulations on the win too. Nice ending with the muddy prints.
there are hard feelins' - the apostrophe here is for the missing 'g' in the contraction so should be - feelin's.
I'd be likein' to wear for eternity - likin'?
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Hi there,
A great little entry for the competition and congratulations on the win too. Nice ending with the muddy prints.
there are hard feelins' - the apostrophe here is for the missing 'g' in the contraction so should be - feelin's.
I'd be likein' to wear for eternity - likin'?
Comment Written 25-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Thanks much Will check those out.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Of course your protagonist knows why there's muddy footprints outside his door, Anonymous Author. He just don't wanna admit Ole' Sam really paid him a visit and that it wasn't all just a dream.
But WE know, don't we?
Excellent.
You got my vote!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Of course your protagonist knows why there's muddy footprints outside his door, Anonymous Author. He just don't wanna admit Ole' Sam really paid him a visit and that it wasn't all just a dream.
But WE know, don't we?
Excellent.
You got my vote!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much, my friend. I am honored and I thank you for the vote!
Comment from Katya
Oh, this is WONDERFUL! Great character very well drawn, credible and interesting stream of thought, accurate dialect, vivid description, appropriate details nicely drawn, nice touch of mystery at the end. Yes yes yes.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Oh, this is WONDERFUL! Great character very well drawn, credible and interesting stream of thought, accurate dialect, vivid description, appropriate details nicely drawn, nice touch of mystery at the end. Yes yes yes.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much for your encouraging review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Maybe the meeting with Sam is the real part and now is the dream. A philosopher once said, "I dreamed I was a butterfly dreaming I was a man. Now, I' not sure."
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Maybe the meeting with Sam is the real part and now is the dream. A philosopher once said, "I dreamed I was a butterfly dreaming I was a man. Now, I' not sure."
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Oh, I like that. Food for thought, indeed. Thanks much for the enjoyable and kind review.
Comment from Beck Fenton
Ah! Was it a dream? I'm a believer so I like to think Sam was giving the author a heads up six feet down! Good unusual take on the prompt. Good luck with the contest, and sweeping the mud from your doorstep!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Ah! Was it a dream? I'm a believer so I like to think Sam was giving the author a heads up six feet down! Good unusual take on the prompt. Good luck with the contest, and sweeping the mud from your doorstep!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2018
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Ha-thanks much!!