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Police Report

A fantasy about smart phones

16 total reviews 
Comment from Larissa B
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Giving you six stars because you are engaging and funny. No critiques, just praise. I love your dialogue and the progression of this story. I see this won third place in a contest. Congratulations.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2018

reply by the author on 22-Apr-2018
    Thank you very much. Yes, and I appreciate all the responses, especially those like yours. You give me the energy and desire to continue. Again, thank you. I am humbled.
reply by Larissa B on 22-Apr-2018
    welcome:)
Comment from cupa tea
Excellent
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Lol I got the idea it was a COMPUTER when you said playing with their buttons...That's a good story...You did a wonderful job telling it to us, the reader...

Good Luck~

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
    Thank you very much.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Excellent
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My you had my attention and almost believing Sami made up story until I read what she said about her age
"I don't know, but I'm not ten-years old yet."
"cause how could a child at that age make the story true.
Gert

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
    Thank you for your remarks.
reply by Gert sherwood on 25-Mar-2018
    You are welcome Henry King
    Gert
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
    Thank you
reply by Gert sherwood on 25-Mar-2018
    You are welcome Henry King
    Gert
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
reply by Gert sherwood on 25-Mar-2018
    Hope to see you later.
    Gert
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
    Thank you, yep all fiction. A reviewer suggested, I try to make Sami's dialog more childlike. I have tested it, but it's not workable yet.
Comment from Katya
Excellent
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Nice, drew me in. I had a sense of the occasion. If you do further revising, you might prune a bit. I can't say where, but I had a sense that it was a shade over-wordy in spots. And you might make a little more of the cop business at the end. Just sayin'. Its a good story as it stands.

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
    Thank you very much. This has been the most fun I have had writing fiction. The recommendations are wonderfully disparate from one end of line to the other.
Comment from Beck Fenton
Excellent
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Reality blurs with fantastic. Smartphones and Alexa laughing at random moments make a writer's dreams come true! Yikes! Good luck!

 Comment Written 24-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 24-Mar-2018
    Thank you very much.
Comment from Artasylum
Excellent
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Loved this... it sucked me into a very fast roller coaster ride. What a great read this is. I can't wait to find out what happens... Great job and I am truly looking forward to your next entry. Love the twist.

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
    Thank you for your inspiring comments.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Excellent
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This speaks about missing father's smart phone at son's residence; everything happened like they were duped by the phone, report appears false and avoided, since perpetrator was unknown; well written, well done; good luck with the contest. B A CHANGE INSPIRER-WRITER--DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
    Thank you very much.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Excellent
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I think this is a good entry for the Sentence writing prompt.
Your story of a man being falsely accused is interesting and well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
    Thank you very much.
Comment from w.j.debi
Excellent
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AI technology is increasing everyday. Love the personification of the cell phone in your story. So Sami was upset about being left behind and decided to play tricks on her owner. Now how do the police prosecute for a false report? Thanks for the notes explaining the inspiration for the story.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 23-Mar-2018
    You are welcome. I presented the story over a year ago as an exercise. I used my name, the response was hilarious. Several thought it was real until I sprung the end on them.
Comment from Wetbelly01
Excellent
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Wow!... What a cool and unusual piece!
They don't call them 'smartphones' for nothing...
Didn't come across any 'glitches' along the way...
MY compliments... Well Done!

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2018

reply by the author on 22-Mar-2018
    Thank you for your encouraging words and all the bright stars.
reply by Wetbelly01 on 22-Mar-2018
    You're very welcome!