Paper Dolls and Toy Soldiers
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "A Love Poem to You"selections for seal submission
9 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Well Mav I do believe you've captured the essence of love perfectly in a most unique to qualities of love, predator at first and then when the urgency ebbs the rhythm of a beautiful dance and poetry remains.
The drum beat that of hearts without fear, without holding back.
And of course love never dies or fades when there are poems to write.
A fantastic entry to the contest so I wish you the best of luck. :)
Ange
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
  |
Well Mav I do believe you've captured the essence of love perfectly in a most unique to qualities of love, predator at first and then when the urgency ebbs the rhythm of a beautiful dance and poetry remains.
The drum beat that of hearts without fear, without holding back.
And of course love never dies or fades when there are poems to write.
A fantastic entry to the contest so I wish you the best of luck. :)
Ange
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2018
-
This is a gorgeous review, Ange. I'm pleased you understood this totally. Urgency never seems to ebb with me, probably why I always end up alone. HAHAHA! No worries about the contest, they don't like this style. CRITICS. LOL Thanks so much, you're way to kind. Mav
Comment from nordicgirl
Wowed!!! I guess I won't complain too much. This was worth the wait. Sexy stuff, Michael, and then beautifully romantic and wise too. Some great words here. More, cannot. Hehehe. NG
 |
Wowed!!! I guess I won't complain too much. This was worth the wait. Sexy stuff, Michael, and then beautifully romantic and wise too. Some great words here. More, cannot. Hehehe. NG
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
Comment from Elizabeth Brown
I like this very much. It's very deep and thought provoking and one has to read it two or three times but it gets better each time. Some brilliant vocabulary and lovely prose. The picture is very good, and complements the poem.
|
I like this very much. It's very deep and thought provoking and one has to read it two or three times but it gets better each time. Some brilliant vocabulary and lovely prose. The picture is very good, and complements the poem.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Love Poem writing prompt.
Your story of passionate love is clear in your verse.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
|
I think this is a good entry for the Love Poem writing prompt.
Your story of passionate love is clear in your verse.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Michael;
I wish I had a six for you, my friend. The beauty of this poem struck me full force. There is a depth of emotion within the lines that comes full circle. I think my favorite part was: "to death"
isn't considered
in its consequence
at times like these
Yes, so many folks struggle with 'til death' concept.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
|
Hi, Michael;
I wish I had a six for you, my friend. The beauty of this poem struck me full force. There is a depth of emotion within the lines that comes full circle. I think my favorite part was: "to death"
isn't considered
in its consequence
at times like these
Yes, so many folks struggle with 'til death' concept.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
Comment from Pamusart
This is a good entry for the contest. Your last few lines about love never dying as long as there are poems to write. About a third of the posts here are religious. About half are love poems. That does not leave much for anything else. Maybe the love poems are also only a third. Nicely rhymed easy to follow. "love has no fear
of the dark
it glows with eyes closed". That is my favorite part. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
|
This is a good entry for the contest. Your last few lines about love never dying as long as there are poems to write. About a third of the posts here are religious. About half are love poems. That does not leave much for anything else. Maybe the love poems are also only a third. Nicely rhymed easy to follow. "love has no fear
of the dark
it glows with eyes closed". That is my favorite part. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, I gladly give these stars for this poem and think I got a bargain. What beautiful writing. One line seems to flow down to another. The only thing I wish is that I'd written it. Great ending and the whole poem has a very sensual feel.
Thanks very much for sharing such beautiful verse, Ana.
|
Hello, I gladly give these stars for this poem and think I got a bargain. What beautiful writing. One line seems to flow down to another. The only thing I wish is that I'd written it. Great ending and the whole poem has a very sensual feel.
Thanks very much for sharing such beautiful verse, Ana.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Love the last line and there has been great mileage in love poems for poets and love is one of those emotions that can tear down the monarchy or rip the soul out of a country, lift to the highest cloud or bury us underground, great words here, love Dolly x
|
Love the last line and there has been great mileage in love poems for poets and love is one of those emotions that can tear down the monarchy or rip the soul out of a country, lift to the highest cloud or bury us underground, great words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018
Comment from karenina
Loved this! Sensual and passionate free verse that shows heart and depth and does not fall into the trap of showing too much....allowing the reader, then, to fill in their own fantasy blanks!
Karenina
|
Loved this! Sensual and passionate free verse that shows heart and depth and does not fall into the trap of showing too much....allowing the reader, then, to fill in their own fantasy blanks!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Mar-2018