Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Marv;
I love the characters you've created for this story. I think it is a good idea to pair an older detective with a younger one. With someone to show them the ropes, the newer detective can learn so much and become better at the job.

I read these two parts out of order, and now I have a better understanding of George.

Thank you for sharing,

~patty~

 Comment Written 20-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Mar-2018

Thanks again for reviewing my humble murder mystery.
I'm glad you love the characters in it. In addition to pairing older and younger characters, I also like to pair female and male characters.
I enjoy sharing my writing with you anytime.
Marv

Comment from beizanten

Excellent

An interesting and intriguing background summary you easily capture my interest. An interesting plotline. Characters emotion flow well bringing them and the story to life. Overall a very good story. Keep up the great work!

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018

I appreciate your many positive comments.
Thanks for the five stars.
Please ignore any references to my book, Loophole. FS throws that in, no matter how much I try to avoid it.
Sorry it took me so long to reply.
Marv

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

I like the premise of your detective story. Some of my favorite shows on the TV are detective shows. Love Morse, all prickly but he has great taste in music. Your dialogue is very realistic. I think the only thing I noticed was some proper paragraph breaks. Thanks for the entertaining read, Ana.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018

I'm glad you like the premise of my first murder mystery. You were entertained. That's the main thing.
I appreciate your dialogue comment very much.
Please continue with this story.
Thanks for the five stars.
Marv

Comment from emptypage

Excellent

I started writing my review and, POOF! It was gone.

I'm so glad to see another mystery writer to love. And so far, I really do love only one other.... on Fanstory. So, yeah, great write, and I'm going to fan you!

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018

I'm glad to be the only other mystery writer you follow. This is my first attempt in this genre, so I'm feeling very fortunate.
Thanks for the compliments.
How many chapters have you read?
Marv

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

Hi, Marv -
good story.
looking forward to seeing how you solve this case, super sleuth!
You definitely have my curiosity up.
However, I don't get the picture of the mosquito (or fly?)
Am sure you have a "Calloway Clue."
pome lover

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018

Thank you, Muse.
I can't wait to read the last two chapters.
Thanks for the five stars.
I might drop the fly and put it in another book.
Marv

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Sterling and Rose Anne add some intrigue here, and this part of the story seems to focus on Sterling and his thoughts about speaking to the employees and the relatives as well as wondering who put the coat over the body. It seems like Sterling and Rose Anne becoming all kissy after such a tragedy seems a bit out of place. Maybe they aren't innocent parties. This portion does pique the interest. I'm always a fan of mysteries. Great work with this. judi

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018

What a pleasing review! You have the take on this chapter that I had in mind.
Thanks for the compliments. I do hope you'll stay with me.
Marv

reply by judiverse on 11-Mar-2018

You're very welcome. I'll keep in touch. judi

reply by the author on 11-Mar-2018

Thanks, Judi. That's nice to know.
Marv

reply by judiverse on 11-Mar-2018

You're quite welcome. judi