Dour Man
Who will help him save himself?30 total reviews
Comment from ameen786
Hi Karenina, this is a great presentation; black/white picture enhances the hidden darkness that you so astutely reflect in the poem; thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hi Karenina, this is a great presentation; black/white picture enhances the hidden darkness that you so astutely reflect in the poem; thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thanks. I thought black/white fit the theme more appropriately as well. It's a long dark road, this addiction illness....and no one can bring the person to help but himself.
Karenina
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Karenina!
The subject matter of your verse is very serious. And yet, it speaks the truth for many individuals living in our society today. And not just adults; young people as well! I witnessed anger and depression and sadly, addiction, everyday I taught. But, as you state in your author's notes, "there is always a door, a key..."
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hello Karenina!
The subject matter of your verse is very serious. And yet, it speaks the truth for many individuals living in our society today. And not just adults; young people as well! I witnessed anger and depression and sadly, addiction, everyday I taught. But, as you state in your author's notes, "there is always a door, a key..."
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I've learned the hard way I cannot change those I love...I can only cease to enable and be there for support if and when they realize they have an issue that requires professional help.... Tough love is tough on both sides! Thank you.
Karenina
Comment from MelB
Hi Karenina, you've painted the picture well of the devastation and turmoil addictions and other things cause. It truly puts the person using them in a prison.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Hi Karenina, you've painted the picture well of the devastation and turmoil addictions and other things cause. It truly puts the person using them in a prison.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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If they are not caught they are in a prison of their own making...never free from their next fix or next drink....I can show them the door to help, but I can't make them walk through. It is a societal nightmare!
Thanks, Karenina
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So true!
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(smile)
Comment from Pamusart
I enjoyed this poem. Depressing but only to illustrate that you have to do something about it and ask for help. The end is hopeful. By stating what is done when you give up in the last verse, you imply that if something is done in time, your soul will be saved. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I enjoyed this poem. Depressing but only to illustrate that you have to do something about it and ask for help. The end is hopeful. By stating what is done when you give up in the last verse, you imply that if something is done in time, your soul will be saved. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Well, yes, although I was not the Dour Man I loved him and hoped in vain my efforts could change him...it took personal insight and counseling to accept I can only change myself and how I respond to him...he has to search and open the door....
Thank you!
Karenina
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written thoughts provoking poem. We don't always realize what another person goes through. They smile and keep a front of happiness in front of others but deep within themselves they have many troubles they are fighting.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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A very well-written thoughts provoking poem. We don't always realize what another person goes through. They smile and keep a front of happiness in front of others but deep within themselves they have many troubles they are fighting.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thank you for hi u r insightful and encouraging comments. I look forward to returning your kindness with a review tonight!
Karenina
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Many people can't forgive themselves and this becomes a weight and a burden, causing unrest in your soul. Very appropriate drawing. Black and white drawing verses color was a very well chosen picture to depict the message in the poem. Very good piece.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Many people can't forgive themselves and this becomes a weight and a burden, causing unrest in your soul. Very appropriate drawing. Black and white drawing verses color was a very well chosen picture to depict the message in the poem. Very good piece.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thank you...I thought black and white was appropriate as well. Thank you also for your insightful comments. I will be returning a review promptly!
Karenina
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My pleasure
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Thanks...I pray they follow the light....
Karenina
Comment from Katie Solis
That was a very good poem. I enjoyed how you used you and yours through out the work, having the reader shape the read through their own experiences. Good job.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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That was a very good poem. I enjoyed how you used you and yours through out the work, having the reader shape the read through their own experiences. Good job.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thanks....I think with rare exception each of us knows a troubled soul, each of us faces our limits...for before we can help, the person entangled in drugs or alcohol or whatever it is has to acknowledge his need and be open to change.
Karenina
Comment from Ricky1024
Hello and good day Dear.
As your first yo me you get a gift?
A nice Sixer but Warning!!!!
You must work hard for more!
Now listen closely...
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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Hello and good day Dear.
As your first yo me you get a gift?
A nice Sixer but Warning!!!!
You must work hard for more!
Now listen closely...
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Dr Ricky 1024.Later today.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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Blushing here. I'm not sure I'm deserving of a six...but coming from one I have quickly come to respect it hold a special meaning. I likely lucked out with "no grammar issues" although I do try to keep my verse well punctuated and presented with some thought! I'll keep working....look at the bar you've set! Thank you so much....
God Bless,
Karenina
Comment from l.raven
HI Karenina, the problem is they have to want to turn the knob...my son is a alcoholic...but he seems to want to stay there right now...all I can do is be there when he needs me...and help but not enable...sigh...and I pray...very well written sweet girl...perfect picture...I love your poem you...love Linda xxoo
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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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HI Karenina, the problem is they have to want to turn the knob...my son is a alcoholic...but he seems to want to stay there right now...all I can do is be there when he needs me...and help but not enable...sigh...and I pray...very well written sweet girl...perfect picture...I love your poem you...love Linda xxoo
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Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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Ah, been there felt that... Not my son, but two other loved ones, one addicted to alcohol and the other going down the Oxycontin rabbit hole with no interest in getting clean. I think, actually, that is what inspired this poem...observing the hell these men and women descend into and truly accepting in my soul that I cannot save them. I can love them...I can show them the path to the door a thousand times....but, you and I know all we can do is not enable them and be there if they see the light....
My prayers for your son. May he find twelve healthy steps!
Thank you so much....
Karenina
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my prayers to your loved ones as well...I tried to talk to my son...but it made it worse...now I just hug him when I see him...he lives on the next block over...and we don't see much of each other...I just pray and wait...all in Gods time...sigh...sooooooo welcome you...love xxoo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This poem made the hairs stand up on my neck, very expressive and perfect metaphors to describe depression, dispair and those unpleasant feeling all may experience at sometime in our life. Love the word 'gravid'. Well chosen words in this very talented write, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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This poem made the hairs stand up on my neck, very expressive and perfect metaphors to describe depression, dispair and those unpleasant feeling all may experience at sometime in our life. Love the word 'gravid'. Well chosen words in this very talented write, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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Thank you....as an RN I've seem my share of those lost to themselves...
Many different reasons, every one a heartbreaker...
I've found even to sit silently beside someone so burdened can let them know someone notices, someone cares....
Your review is too kind! Thank you....
Karenina
