Dour Man
Who will help him save himself?30 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
I think isolation is one of the most crippling of traits. It keeps us boxed in and not happy joining in life with others. You've expressed it well here. I see you are from Massachusetts--so am I. Marilyn
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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I think isolation is one of the most crippling of traits. It keeps us boxed in and not happy joining in life with others. You've expressed it well here. I see you are from Massachusetts--so am I. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Thank you for this review fellow MA resident! I am from Western Mass close enough to Amherst to visit Emily's grave each season.
A pilgrimage for me.
I agree...
Addiction becomes the center of their universe
And when they most need healthy people around they detest the thought anyone or anything might come between them and their high....
It is a tough love enough every sense!
Thank you,
Karenina
Comment from zekeziemann
A very good use of words to describe a desperate depressed soul. This is where religion comes in...at least for me. Well done,
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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A very good use of words to describe a desperate depressed soul. This is where religion comes in...at least for me. Well done,
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thank you! I agree. I can not make my loved one change...but I can pray. My lived one, when he acknowledges he has a problem larger than himself must accept their higher power!
Karenina
Comment from A. Willow Bends
You did it! You wrote about someone I used to know! And you did it far better than I could have done it myself. This is done well, unique, real, creative. Great job!
Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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You did it! You wrote about someone I used to know! And you did it far better than I could have done it myself. This is done well, unique, real, creative. Great job!
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Oh I am sorry..
I know "him" as well....
It is a tough ride.
Karenina
Comment from cailinraine8
Vividly expressed portrayal of the pain that can torture inside our own heads, if nowhere else. Yes there is always a key, one being forgiveness of not only others, but self. It is a sobering thought to think of how many people are locked into their own prisons. I like the presentation of this.... words and photo. Good work.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Vividly expressed portrayal of the pain that can torture inside our own heads, if nowhere else. Yes there is always a key, one being forgiveness of not only others, but self. It is a sobering thought to think of how many people are locked into their own prisons. I like the presentation of this.... words and photo. Good work.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Having dearly loved several friends and family members and watching the ravages of Oxy , alcohol, some combination of both....I learned through counseling to ask myself "Do you own this product problem?"
I had to Let go and let God......and only then did I begin to realize he who is addicted can alone open the door to recovery....
Thanks,
Karenina
Comment from Pantygynt
Written in non rhyming couplets of iambic pentameters the whole piece can be schemed ab, ab, cd, ce, ce and the metre ceases to have any glitches if "smile", and "howl" are pronounced as two syllable words -- smi-ul and how-ul. since there are many who do pronounce them that way I wouldn't want to shange a thing with this.
For those who do feel locked in it is of little help to know that there is a door and a key. The sufferer needs to know where.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Written in non rhyming couplets of iambic pentameters the whole piece can be schemed ab, ab, cd, ce, ce and the metre ceases to have any glitches if "smile", and "howl" are pronounced as two syllable words -- smi-ul and how-ul. since there are many who do pronounce them that way I wouldn't want to shange a thing with this.
For those who do feel locked in it is of little help to know that there is a door and a key. The sufferer needs to know where.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Guilty as charged on my smile and howl "two count"----hope my poetic license hand' t expired! (Smile)--thank you SO much!
Karenina
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I have a very open mind on syllables, holding them to be units of sound and therefore dependent on an individual's pronunciation. I am frequently at odds with dictionaries over this and you know -- frankly I don't give a damn. Lol.
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You are my kind of poet!
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That is nice to know.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
Your verse speaks of a man isolated by his feelings and living in his own hell.
This is well told and described with your well chosen words.
Well done and thank you for sharing this verse with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Your verse speaks of a man isolated by his feelings and living in his own hell.
This is well told and described with your well chosen words.
Well done and thank you for sharing this verse with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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So many suffering in the shadow of addiction! They must, however, reach a point where they are ready to heal. I lived hard and could not change, in the end, anything but my own behavior. Thank you!
Karenina
Comment from Kingsrookviii
This poem id exceptionally great. I suffer from depression, myself. I can promise you that this hits the spot in so many ways. I know that addiction, anger and depression are all hand in hand, problematic and fluid fuel for one another. This is a powerful message and the picture supports the content, perfectly so. Great work. Bruce.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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This poem id exceptionally great. I suffer from depression, myself. I can promise you that this hits the spot in so many ways. I know that addiction, anger and depression are all hand in hand, problematic and fluid fuel for one another. This is a powerful message and the picture supports the content, perfectly so. Great work. Bruce.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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It is an evil triad...hard to d I select and be treated for...but it can happen, with faith and realization help is needed.
Thank you.
Karenina
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Another lovely poem from your pen, or in this case, keyboard. I think the picture suits the mood of your write, and I learned a new word, gravid. I like it. I jot new words down to use in my stories. I have had friends that I've watched wrestle an addiction. Some won and some lost the fight. It is such a sad waste when you see someone with potential, brought low from substance abuse. Nice poem, thanks, Ana.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Another lovely poem from your pen, or in this case, keyboard. I think the picture suits the mood of your write, and I learned a new word, gravid. I like it. I jot new words down to use in my stories. I have had friends that I've watched wrestle an addiction. Some won and some lost the fight. It is such a sad waste when you see someone with potential, brought low from substance abuse. Nice poem, thanks, Ana.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018
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Thanks. You know how it is... You get away from writing for awhile and wonder if the muse forgot your number? I've been puttering on a very small poet site and really wanted to jump in the deep end here so your encouragement really means a lot. Thanks!
Karenina
Comment from sunnilicious
Great perspective presented. Good presentation of picture and poem. The irony. Personal hells can occur, but the key is to find a way to happiness. This is a good poem. Nice work :)
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Great perspective presented. Good presentation of picture and poem. The irony. Personal hells can occur, but the key is to find a way to happiness. This is a good poem. Nice work :)
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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I agree...and the addict has to find his or her way...believe me I tried to take responsibility and it doesn't (sadly) work that way.....good news is there IS a way out....but first the person involved has to accept that he/she is helpless and willing to
take responsibility for getting clean. Thanks so much for reviewing!
Karenina
Comment from RGstar
Your final couplet sums it up...a living hell, yet, in your notes I like the fact that there is always a key.
Good couplets that define your theme.
Well done.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Your final couplet sums it up...a living hell, yet, in your notes I like the fact that there is always a key.
Good couplets that define your theme.
Well done.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 12-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much..a living hell indeed, and rare is the family not affected somehow by someone with an addiction....I learned the long and hard way that no amount of begging would change him--as they say, the only one we can control is ourselves!
Karenina
