Get to the Point
My daughter and I hear devastating news.8 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is well written. I cannot imagine the heartbreak of receiving such news. The story is listed as fiction, but the author's note seems to indicate the opposite. I am so sorry for your loss. Blessings, Marilyn
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
This is well written. I cannot imagine the heartbreak of receiving such news. The story is listed as fiction, but the author's note seems to indicate the opposite. I am so sorry for your loss. Blessings, Marilyn
Comment Written 15-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2018
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It's based in reality, but the conversation took years to develop. My Lisa was a warrior. Thank you, Marilyn, I appreciate you.
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Writer such a true to life situation, that Lisa was in. But I'm glad portrayed Lisa with faith and hope with all the odds of this Lupus disease against her.
Writer I love the way you made it real obvious that Lisa was the only that had faith to believe that she could beat the odds that the Dr. gave her of living m 3 yrs. Writer thank you for such a realistic life situation story. Having faith goes a long ways.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
Writer such a true to life situation, that Lisa was in. But I'm glad portrayed Lisa with faith and hope with all the odds of this Lupus disease against her.
Writer I love the way you made it real obvious that Lisa was the only that had faith to believe that she could beat the odds that the Dr. gave her of living m 3 yrs. Writer thank you for such a realistic life situation story. Having faith goes a long ways.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much, Mary. I appreciate your comments and the stars.
Comment from Spitfire
insight notes. this inspirational story is well-written.
you build up to the climax mixing narration with meaningful dialogue.
nice metaphor;The pieces of the diseases were laid out in my mind, a jigsaw with different puzzles all jumbled together in the box. The sorting took longer than the tests results.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
insight notes. this inspirational story is well-written.
you build up to the climax mixing narration with meaningful dialogue.
nice metaphor;The pieces of the diseases were laid out in my mind, a jigsaw with different puzzles all jumbled together in the box. The sorting took longer than the tests results.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your comments and the stars. I appreciate both.
Comment from oliver818
That's a hell of a story. It's enough to bring a tear to your eye. That poor mother, I don't know what I'd do in that situation. Thanks for sharing this beautiful story and best of luck with the competition
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
That's a hell of a story. It's enough to bring a tear to your eye. That poor mother, I don't know what I'd do in that situation. Thanks for sharing this beautiful story and best of luck with the competition
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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Thank you for your comments and stars. I appreciate them both.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the 'Reaction's writing prompt.
Well written, well said. I thought until the end that it was Mom who was sick. I'm sure that was your intent. It worked.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
This is a good entry for the 'Reaction's writing prompt.
Well written, well said. I thought until the end that it was Mom who was sick. I'm sure that was your intent. It worked.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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Thank you as always for your kind comments and stars.
Comment from RodG
This is a very good response to this contest prompt. Although your introductory paragraph seems a bit overwritten, you do set the scene and introduce mother and daughter well. What works best is the CONTRASTING REACTIONS of mother and daughter. Lisa wants all the facts and vows she will beat this thing, whereas Mom can barely voice her reaction, her sorrow. I also like how most of Mom's reaction is interior monolog, her thoughts voiced only to the reader.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
This is a very good response to this contest prompt. Although your introductory paragraph seems a bit overwritten, you do set the scene and introduce mother and daughter well. What works best is the CONTRASTING REACTIONS of mother and daughter. Lisa wants all the facts and vows she will beat this thing, whereas Mom can barely voice her reaction, her sorrow. I also like how most of Mom's reaction is interior monolog, her thoughts voiced only to the reader.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the comments and stars. I appreciate both.
Comment from jenintorre
This story is in tbe fiction category but I suspect that it is true. If it is my heart goes out to you. It made me cry. I can't think of anything more horrendus. I wish you good luck in he
Competition. Blessings. Jen.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
This story is in tbe fiction category but I suspect that it is true. If it is my heart goes out to you. It made me cry. I can't think of anything more horrendus. I wish you good luck in he
Competition. Blessings. Jen.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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It is true. Or close enough. She managed to live six years. Thanks.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a heart wrenching story that you have written. You aptly described how both the patient and family respond to such drastic news. Well done on sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
This is a heart wrenching story that you have written. You aptly described how both the patient and family respond to such drastic news. Well done on sharing this with us.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018
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Reality is always easier to write about than actually live through. My Lisa lasted six years. Thanks for reading and the comments. It seems when I share my grief the burden lightens. Funny how that goes.