Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

You painted a good picture of your character. Giving him both good and bad traits, of which most of us are composed. Check out this suggestion:
Why does his father (reacts) with anger when asked about his family in Italy?
Think you need to drop the (s)

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018

Thanks for the catch, I will edit and thanks for the read.

Comment from moonsunrise

Excellent

I enjoyed reading the story about your father and wonder what secret he will discover about hiss dad once in Italy. His two different personalities you reveal quite well - well liked yet can be devious. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thanks for your kind words. I hope to publish the book by September and that is where the secret is told.

reply by moonsunrise on 09-Mar-2018

What suspense. Best wishes!

reply by the author on 10-Mar-2018

Thank you.

reply by moonsunrise on 22-Mar-2018

Great. Best of luck!

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

You do a great job of describing this child, who we find out in author's notes is actually your father at a young age.

I think you are able to be objective in your description, which is often hard to do with someone you know as intimately as a parent.

Sounds like a good book in the making.

Good luck in the contest, and with the novel,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

Thanks for your read and your comments. Much appreciated.