Comment from Beck Fenton

Excellent

Zard is learning what we all face as we age and you have brought us right next to him. This is a great introduction to a prankster wizard who has a mean streak. I can't help hoping that he fails at being a thief. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2018

Zard does the right thing at the end of the story.
thanks for reading and your good wishes.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

A fine introduction to your character here. Sounds like a fun story for younger readers.

You have an errant full stop / period at the very end which needs deleted.

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

will check it. thanks
Katharine - pome lover

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

This work would have children as it's obvious target audience, but it was still fun to read as an adult, and I like the concept of stealing words, and 'Homosapien' is a good word to use to get this idea across. And a word that children may not know, so it would improve their vocabulary. Nice picture with the write, and I loved your ending, by jingo, haha, thanks, Ana.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2018

thanks, Ana. There are words throughout to get kids thinking. Glad you liked this small part, and I appreciate your kind review.