Contest Entry
Contest entry.12 total reviews
Comment from Cedar
I completely agree with you. If someone wants to commit mass murder and guns were not available, they would find some other way.
You have my vote. Good luck in the contest...Bill
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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I completely agree with you. If someone wants to commit mass murder and guns were not available, they would find some other way.
You have my vote. Good luck in the contest...Bill
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I truly appreciate your comments and good luck wishes.
Comment from Bill Schott
This three-line poem on guns, Contest Entry, follows the rules(sort of), uses a 5-7-5 format, and restates the popular adage that essentially states that 'guns don't kill people; people kill people'. Whether your title follows the rules or not is probably debatable.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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This three-line poem on guns, Contest Entry, follows the rules(sort of), uses a 5-7-5 format, and restates the popular adage that essentially states that 'guns don't kill people; people kill people'. Whether your title follows the rules or not is probably debatable.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for reviewing and I really appreciate your comments. When I first submitted I had a review that pointed out the rules of the contest rather than direct comments regarding the poem, when I reread the contest, I felt it was more appropriate to change the title etc. For me it was more of a matter of voicing a concern rather than winning but if I did then great. Again thank you.
Comment from Katie Solis
Good job meeting and choosing the five-seven-five format for your entry. Good job expressing your views in such a short piece. Good luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Good job meeting and choosing the five-seven-five format for your entry. Good job expressing your views in such a short piece. Good luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for reviewing, I really appreciate your kind comments and good luck wishes.
Comment from BeasPeas
Bravo, excellent sentiments exactly. There is no accounting for the actions of the mentally ill and that is what has to be the case when someone shoots up a school. Marilyn
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Bravo, excellent sentiments exactly. There is no accounting for the actions of the mentally ill and that is what has to be the case when someone shoots up a school. Marilyn
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Thank you Marilyn for your kind and very honest comments and for reviewing and of course the six stars.
Comment from Fabiha_N
Well-written poem, and a great entry for the contest.
The message you are conveying here reminds of a certain phrase that I always used to hear. It's that guns don't kill people, people kill people.
I agree with what you are saying. Guns are getting out of control in our society today.
Great work :)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Well-written poem, and a great entry for the contest.
The message you are conveying here reminds of a certain phrase that I always used to hear. It's that guns don't kill people, people kill people.
I agree with what you are saying. Guns are getting out of control in our society today.
Great work :)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much for reviewing and for your great comments and your kind encouraging comments.
Comment from nor84
I wanted to give you a heads-up review. the contest rules state that there should be no author notes other than to thank someone for the artwork, and the following looks like an author note:
I chose no picture because the words carry the message.
Also, the announcement says the description line above the title should not enhance the poem. Should be something like "Contest Entry."
Good luck in the contest
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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I wanted to give you a heads-up review. the contest rules state that there should be no author notes other than to thank someone for the artwork, and the following looks like an author note:
I chose no picture because the words carry the message.
Also, the announcement says the description line above the title should not enhance the poem. Should be something like "Contest Entry."
Good luck in the contest
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reviewing and your observational comments and I do see your point and will make those corrections immediately.
Comment from tfawcus
Yes, it is always the holder who is to blame. The one who holds the keys, although insane or out of balance, or on drugs - again. Yet we grant them licences to kill because these days they need their cars to get around. After all, they have the right.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Yes, it is always the holder who is to blame. The one who holds the keys, although insane or out of balance, or on drugs - again. Yet we grant them licences to kill because these days they need their cars to get around. After all, they have the right.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reviewing and for your comments, they are greatly appreciated.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Profound words here and so true and guns in the wrong hands can certainly change lives for good and innocence is lost, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Profound words here and so true and guns in the wrong hands can certainly change lives for good and innocence is lost, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, I appreciate your good luck wishes and your kind comments.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a good entry for the 3 Line Poem -- Guns contest.
Your concise verse about the shooter being responsible makes sense.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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This is a good entry for the 3 Line Poem -- Guns contest.
Your concise verse about the shooter being responsible makes sense.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, I appreciate your good luck wishes and your kind comments
Comment from apky
And the holder had what they hold from a giver
licenced to give for a price.
Like there are sins, and we can avoid them,
by not listening to and following temptations from Satan.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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And the holder had what they hold from a giver
licenced to give for a price.
Like there are sins, and we can avoid them,
by not listening to and following temptations from Satan.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2018
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Thank you for reviewing. I somewhat agree that temptations come from evil, but that doesn't mean everything we are given is evil in nature. If that was the case we would not have computers, we would not have put man on the moon, we would not have modern medicine, we would have been stagnate in the cave man days. People die every day due to illness such as cancer but do we blame the doctors and the medical systems.
