People Are Responsible
Three Line Poem12 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Congratulations on winning the contest. The hysteria about guns--should we, shouldn't we--will continue. Strong feeling on both sides and common sense and compromise are needed by both. I question why signs are put up at schools (or anywhere else) touting kids are unprotected. Gun-free zones attract unstable people and shouldn't be advertised. Marilyn
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Congratulations on winning the contest. The hysteria about guns--should we, shouldn't we--will continue. Strong feeling on both sides and common sense and compromise are needed by both. I question why signs are put up at schools (or anywhere else) touting kids are unprotected. Gun-free zones attract unstable people and shouldn't be advertised. Marilyn
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
This three-line poem on guns, People are Responsible, follows the rules, uses a 5-7-7 format, and uses Samantha Bee's own video clip to emphasis, especially in the latest school atrocity, that guns in the wrong hands c@n destroy or be useless.
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This three-line poem on guns, People are Responsible, follows the rules, uses a 5-7-7 format, and uses Samantha Bee's own video clip to emphasis, especially in the latest school atrocity, that guns in the wrong hands c@n destroy or be useless.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Yes all of these things are true. I wonder if the responsibility of proper weapon instruction was the child's responsibility as well? Nope maybe not. You will get people to be thinking with this one! good luck.
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Yes all of these things are true. I wonder if the responsibility of proper weapon instruction was the child's responsibility as well? Nope maybe not. You will get people to be thinking with this one! good luck.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Three Line Poem-- Guns contest.
You've done well to put the message across that guns don't protect us.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Three Line Poem-- Guns contest.
You've done well to put the message across that guns don't protect us.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The work reminisces a scenario of fierce blame trading between two contending camps.
The work highlights an authority figure calling on a person he or she derogatorily refers to as the "Crying White Mom" to a seemingly pertinent truth that, Guns Did Not Kill Their Children. The work equally highlights the dialectical negation of the authority figure as replying that, They Didn't Save Them Either.
Deductively, the crying white mom should not have cried because their children were not killed by guns. And neither should the authority figures shy away from their responsibility of protecting lives and property.
The work no doubt constitute a significant commentary on the dwindling premium of alertness exercised by security agents in the face of rising security challenges.
Excellent work! Keep the flag flying!
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The work reminisces a scenario of fierce blame trading between two contending camps.
The work highlights an authority figure calling on a person he or she derogatorily refers to as the "Crying White Mom" to a seemingly pertinent truth that, Guns Did Not Kill Their Children. The work equally highlights the dialectical negation of the authority figure as replying that, They Didn't Save Them Either.
Deductively, the crying white mom should not have cried because their children were not killed by guns. And neither should the authority figures shy away from their responsibility of protecting lives and property.
The work no doubt constitute a significant commentary on the dwindling premium of alertness exercised by security agents in the face of rising security challenges.
Excellent work! Keep the flag flying!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
Comment from Susan Burger
This is a very moving piece with the pictures you have included. Although, I understand your message: Guns don't kill people do, It may have been a bit harsh since we don't know what this mother is saying. I would guess she is slamming the NRA, and blaming them for these horrific deaths. I can only imagine a mother's grief when you send your child to school like every other day, but they die at the hands of another mentally ill student. This is a tragic problem that we need to get under control. I personally do think we need stronger background checks. It may help to keep people suffering from mental illness from obtaining a gun -legally. We know if they are determined they can probably obtain one illegally. After 23 years in education, I think what is needed most of all, is more stringent care taken in our schools. We need to be reporting those children who exhibit any type of suspicious behavior. I have spent the past 16 years working with students with emotional issues. Those kids who tend to get swept under the rug, because teachers are overwhelmed trying not only teach, but meet the requirements of state mandates.
Sorry I didn't mean to make this review so long. I think you have created a very important Three Line Poem for this contest. Yours is the first entry I have read so I have no idea where my vote will go- but good job, not only showing your point of view, but showing the faces of some of the innocent children who have lost their lives at the hands of another child who desperately needed our help.
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This is a very moving piece with the pictures you have included. Although, I understand your message: Guns don't kill people do, It may have been a bit harsh since we don't know what this mother is saying. I would guess she is slamming the NRA, and blaming them for these horrific deaths. I can only imagine a mother's grief when you send your child to school like every other day, but they die at the hands of another mentally ill student. This is a tragic problem that we need to get under control. I personally do think we need stronger background checks. It may help to keep people suffering from mental illness from obtaining a gun -legally. We know if they are determined they can probably obtain one illegally. After 23 years in education, I think what is needed most of all, is more stringent care taken in our schools. We need to be reporting those children who exhibit any type of suspicious behavior. I have spent the past 16 years working with students with emotional issues. Those kids who tend to get swept under the rug, because teachers are overwhelmed trying not only teach, but meet the requirements of state mandates.
Sorry I didn't mean to make this review so long. I think you have created a very important Three Line Poem for this contest. Yours is the first entry I have read so I have no idea where my vote will go- but good job, not only showing your point of view, but showing the faces of some of the innocent children who have lost their lives at the hands of another child who desperately needed our help.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
Comment from Parashakti
Your short writing is a touching piece that ignited a debate in my brain. You have used just a few words to expose your ideas about this delicate topic in our society. And you are right because what is a gun without a hand to active it?
Good job.
Shakti
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Your short writing is a touching piece that ignited a debate in my brain. You have used just a few words to expose your ideas about this delicate topic in our society. And you are right because what is a gun without a hand to active it?
Good job.
Shakti
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Wow! Very intriguing way and mystical way I'm writing about guns and the background and the wording at pure mystery to it. I'm not sure of what the content means, but it has such a boldness to it grabbed my attention as well. Anf when you said, Hey White women, I wasn't sure what that was about but it's just the uniqueness and the individualism of it that grabbed my attention so whatever the meeting is about the guns and the white woman and guns didn't kill them and they did not save them either, I love it anyway
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Wow! Very intriguing way and mystical way I'm writing about guns and the background and the wording at pure mystery to it. I'm not sure of what the content means, but it has such a boldness to it grabbed my attention as well. Anf when you said, Hey White women, I wasn't sure what that was about but it's just the uniqueness and the individualism of it that grabbed my attention so whatever the meeting is about the guns and the white woman and guns didn't kill them and they did not save them either, I love it anyway
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a poignant write and if you give an angry person the means to vent their anger then the results will be devastating, but if they have no tools they may just get angry with themselves, a wise and resonating write, love Dolly x
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This is a poignant write and if you give an angry person the means to vent their anger then the results will be devastating, but if they have no tools they may just get angry with themselves, a wise and resonating write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Mar-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, great job with your three line poem about guns. I don't think I've ever heard such a logical fallacy as conflating guns as not killing people, people do. Using the same logic you could also say opiods don't kill people, people kill people. Yah whatever.
Great job with this and I wish you the best in the contest.
Gloria
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Ha, great job with your three line poem about guns. I don't think I've ever heard such a logical fallacy as conflating guns as not killing people, people do. Using the same logic you could also say opiods don't kill people, people kill people. Yah whatever.
Great job with this and I wish you the best in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Mar-2018
