Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Good

This is really a poem and the contest was for flash fiction which is prose. The story is well written and could have been a story in a poem as is, or could have been written in prose form. The punctuation needs some work whichever way you go with it. It does need a bit more work. I wish you the best with your writing, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018

if you will read the requisites for the contest, it said any genre - which includes poetry.

reply by dejohnsrld (Debbie) on 27-Feb-2018

Poetry and prose are types of forms, not genres. Genres are based on tone and content


This is a list of genres. I used to not understand the difference either, but we all learn as we write. That is why we are here. I hope this helps you, my friend. I am only trying to be helpful. I didn't have to take time to explain this, but it was only through others doing the same for me that I have grown as a writer. Take care.~Debbie

? Classic ? fiction that has become part of an accepted literary canon, widely taught in schools
? Comics/Graphic novel ? comic magazine or book based on a sequence of pictures (often hand drawn) and few words.
? Crime/detective ? fiction about a crime, how the criminal gets caught, and the repercussions of the crime
? Fable ? legendary, supernatural tale demonstrating a useful truth
? Fairy tale ? story about fairies or other magical creatures
? Fan fiction ? fiction written by a fan of, and featuring characters from, a particular TV series, movie, or book
? Fantasy ? fiction with subplot(s), theme(s), major and minor characters, in which the narrative is presented in verse form (usually free verse)
? Folklore ? the songs, stories, myths, and proverbs of a people or "folk" as handed down by word of mouth
? Historical fiction ? story with fictional characters and events in an historical setting
? Horror ? fiction in which events evoke a feeling of dread and sometimes fear in both the characters and the reader
? Humor ? usually a fiction full of fun, fancy, and excitement, meant to entertain and sometimes cause intended laughter; but can be contained in all genres
? Legend ? story, sometimes of a national or folk hero, that has a basis in fact but also includes imaginative material
? Magical realism ? story where magical or unreal elements play a natural part in an otherwise realistic environment
? Meta fiction (also known as romantic irony in the context of Romantic works of literature) ? uses self-reference to draw attention to itself as a work of art while exposing the "truth" of a story
? Mystery ? fiction dealing with the solution of a crime or the revealing of secrets
? Mythology ? legend or traditional narrative, often based in part on historical events, that reveals human behavior and natural phenomena by its symbolism; often pertaining to the actions of the gods
? Mythopoeia ? fiction in which characters from religious mythology, traditional myths, folklore and/or history are recast into a re-imagined realm created by the author
? Picture book ? picture storybook is a book with very little words and a lot of pictures; picture stories are usually for children
? Realistic fiction ? story that is true to life
? Science fiction ? story based on the impact of actual, imagined, or potential science, often set in the future or on other planets
? Short story ? fiction of great brevity, usually supports no subplots
? Suspense/thriller ? fiction about harm about to befall a person or group and the attempts made to evade the harm
? Tall tale ? humorous story with blatant exaggerations, such as swaggering heroes who do the impossible with nonchalance
? Western ? fiction set in the American Old West frontier and typically in the late eighteenth to late nineteenth century
Common genres: non-fiction
? Biography ? narrative of a person's life; when the author is also the subject, this is an autobiography.
? Essay ? a short literary composition that reflects the author's outlook or point.
? Owner's manual (also Instruction manual, User's guide) ? an instructional book or booklet that is supplied with consumer products such as vehicles, home appliances, firearms, toys and computer peripherals
? Journalism ? reporting on news and current events
? Lab Report ? a report of an experiment
? Memoir ? factual story that focuses on a significant relationship between the writer and a person, place, or object; reads like a short novel
? Narrative nonfiction/personal narrative ? factual information about a significant event presented in a format that tells a story
? Reference book ? such as a dictionary, thesaurus, encyclopedia, almanac, or atlas
? Self-help book ? information with the intention of instructing readers on solving personal problems.
? Speech ? public address or discourse
? Textbook ? authoritative and detailed factual description of a topic.

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018

good grief, you went to a lot of trouble.
thanks for the info.
tried to copy it but it wouldn't let me.
Katharine

reply by dejohnsrld (Debbie) on 27-Feb-2018

I'll PM it to you. You should be able to copy from there. Take care~Debbie

reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018

muchas gracias! :)
Katharine

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

This is a good story for the 'Best Served Cold' writing prompt.
That's quite the revenge. Your story is very well told and clear. Well done.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018

hi, Sharon and thanks for your neat review and good wishes! don't have any sixes left. sorry.
Katharine - pome lover

Comment from Linda Engel

Exceptional

Good One!!! I love stories in a poem. Jack got a whack and deserved more than that.
Very good rhyme and story telling complimented by a cute picture of a bully. Eating the evidence was awesome. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018

thanks and the 6 is much appreciated! I should have used your rhyme!

Comment from Katie Solis

Excellent

Cute. I like your take on revenge served "cold". Your bully was well developed and a terrible person. Well done in the rhyming and making a complete story. Good luck to you.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018

thanks for a great review. tried to nominate you, but FS said I'd used my 6. sorry.
Katharine

reply by Katie Solis on 26-Feb-2018

Thank you, I appreciate it

Comment from Susan Burger

Excellent

This is a good entry for the Best Served Cold flash fiction on revenge. I loved the rhyming approach to your story. The rhymes seemed natural, not forced, and they moved the story a long at a good pace. (But, I have always been a sucker for a story that rhymes! Love to read them aloud to kids.) Good ending with him eating the evidence! The picture you chose is a perfect fit for your story. Good luck in this competition.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018

thanks for the terrific review. tried to nominate you for it, but was told I'd used my 6 for the month. sorry!
Katharine

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

You should win this contest. Your revenge is so sweet. The bully deserved lots worse than he got. I have no suggestions for improvement. You did a great job. Good luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018

thanks, Debbie and welcome to FS.
much appreciated!
Katharine - pome lover

Comment from Marvin Calloway

Excellent

A very short, complete story. Amazing.
A real accomplishment: to write a complete story in so few words.
It had a funny, clever ending.

I guess Jack wanted the bully to meat his maker.
Marv

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2018

ha ha - clever play on words, Mr. Marv.
thanks for the neat review

reply by Marvin Calloway on 26-Feb-2018

You're welcome.

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

It sounds as if Myron Smith may have learnt a lesson from this! It works well in verse, which gives a lighter touch to this macabre subject. I liked the "Mazie is lazy" internal rhyme and the realism of, "She clung to my shoulder, that cat was all claws!"

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018

thank you for your very nice review. I also wrote it in prose, but liked this version better. You're right. It is a macabre subject - the kind of kid who might take it farther.

Comment from Marge Setzer

Excellent

That Myron Smith has problems. What right did he have to barge into someone else's kitchen? Shouldn't he have knocked on the door, at least. Tells more than a little bit about Marvin. He got what he asked for - the same kind of abuse that he handed out, though he earned his demise. I hope the cat is okay. Marge

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018

thanks. this is fiction.

reply by Marge Setzer on 25-Feb-2018

I know this is fiction, but still...it says a lot about those bullies who somehow get away with their "comedy" attempts. Consider continuing this story. Marge

reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018

thank you, Marge. I have a book out, now, about bullying. It's for middle graders, but a fun read for adults, too, as it also has some humor.

Comment from Wetbelly01

Excellent

HaHaHa!... I LIKE IT!... Whooped the bully and ate the weapon!
Brilliant!... What a neat story for the contest...
Didn't see any problems with it...
My compliments!

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2018

thanks! just read your prank post. would've been a good entry!
Katharine - pome lover