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Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Nightmares"Eclectic style
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Comment from cailinraine8
This presentation really gets one's attention and the words describe well the jumbled mess our minds can create in dream land, especially a scary dream land like this one. Very good work.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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This presentation really gets one's attention and the words describe well the jumbled mess our minds can create in dream land, especially a scary dream land like this one. Very good work.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Welcome to FS,! I see you recently joined. Thank you very much for your kind review
Trisha.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You have a rogue (t) on the 8th line Trisha. A nightmare indeed and we often dream about being unprepared for something important, I enjoyed your nightmare! He he he, love Dolly x
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You have a rogue (t) on the 8th line Trisha. A nightmare indeed and we often dream about being unprepared for something important, I enjoyed your nightmare! He he he, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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That was my biggest nightmare because I was a teacher!
Thanks so much for your review, and help over Barb
Hugs, Trisha
Comment from F. Wehr3
I enjoyed this surreal look at a feverish dream. Nicely done! I found a couple of things for your consideration.
Nightmare nightnare --just a misspelling of nightmare
Miss the train my suitcase breaks open--suggest a semi-colon after train.
Eighteen students all out of controlt --misspelling of control
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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I enjoyed this surreal look at a feverish dream. Nicely done! I found a couple of things for your consideration.
Nightmare nightnare --just a misspelling of nightmare
Miss the train my suitcase breaks open--suggest a semi-colon after train.
Eighteen students all out of controlt --misspelling of control
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Thank you Russell, your review was helpful. I fixed all but the semi colon.
Have a great week,,
Trisha
Comment from jppoet
Yeah, my nightmares are exactly like this too, and also do not spell certain words, as here, nor make any sense, except make me happy to
WAKE UP. How can our sleepy minds fantasize such whacky ideas or sumptuous scenes of places we have never been? Blessings, john
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Yeah, my nightmares are exactly like this too, and also do not spell certain words, as here, nor make any sense, except make me happy to
WAKE UP. How can our sleepy minds fantasize such whacky ideas or sumptuous scenes of places we have never been? Blessings, john
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
John, I?m wishing you many more years of NoT being perfect, like me!
Thank you for your kind review.
Blessings, hug, Trisha
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Trisha;
Great free verse to describe the horrible floating feeling we experience in a nightmare state. We drift from scene to scene and while nothing seems to make any sense, things do seem real.
Well done,
~patty~
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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Hi, Trisha;
Great free verse to describe the horrible floating feeling we experience in a nightmare state. We drift from scene to scene and while nothing seems to make any sense, things do seem real.
Well done,
~patty~
Comment Written 24-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
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I?m glad you liked it. Thank you for your complimentary review
Hugs, Trisha