I and my husband, Robert
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Comment from Sis Cat
A fine love poem of separation by death and of reunion "by a fool moon." The tenderness and honesty of your poem resonated. Your words flow smoothly, although there are a couple of areas in need of refinement:
(It) lasted long, almost forty years.
(Then) God and the angels took you home.
Note correction in parenthesis.
This image as powerful as it made me think of my on dog:
I search the house if I can find you.
Our dog Smokey misses you too.
You end your poem with a promise:
I come to you very soon
by a fool moon, always a good sign.
A wonderful free verse poem. Thank you for sharing. I wish you much success.
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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A fine love poem of separation by death and of reunion "by a fool moon." The tenderness and honesty of your poem resonated. Your words flow smoothly, although there are a couple of areas in need of refinement:
(It) lasted long, almost forty years.
(Then) God and the angels took you home.
Note correction in parenthesis.
This image as powerful as it made me think of my on dog:
I search the house if I can find you.
Our dog Smokey misses you too.
You end your poem with a promise:
I come to you very soon
by a fool moon, always a good sign.
A wonderful free verse poem. Thank you for sharing. I wish you much success.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely and blessed weekend.
