Free Verse Collection 2
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Comment from johnwilson
This is the epitome of a free verse poem, complete with rhyme, alliteration and wonderful metaphors. This reminds me of a kaleidoscopic realm, where everything changes upon itself. I love the way you recall friends of your youth, a more innocent time, and, to me, the way these dreams are interspersed with reactions of current events mixed with the past. Wow! Nothing to suggest here. This is publish-worthy!
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This is the epitome of a free verse poem, complete with rhyme, alliteration and wonderful metaphors. This reminds me of a kaleidoscopic realm, where everything changes upon itself. I love the way you recall friends of your youth, a more innocent time, and, to me, the way these dreams are interspersed with reactions of current events mixed with the past. Wow! Nothing to suggest here. This is publish-worthy!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2018
Comment from Writeling
Well, you have so much energy in your work. I admire that. I really like the chop/change of this piece... especially:
'either way our goose is
sautéed crisped and cooked
we've all been rooked'
With best wishes, Writeling
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Well, you have so much energy in your work. I admire that. I really like the chop/change of this piece... especially:
'either way our goose is
sautéed crisped and cooked
we've all been rooked'
With best wishes, Writeling
Comment Written 23-Feb-2018
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Quite a dream travel, from the strawberry daiquiris to those mindless leaping sheep -one more night in lonely' tomb - great phrase, like that. Good work with the verse you brought in 'he didn't have a machine gun' (more innocent times). Your dreams flow freely with alliteration and some rhyming to help them on their way. Nicely done mike, you excel at these,
cheers.
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Quite a dream travel, from the strawberry daiquiris to those mindless leaping sheep -one more night in lonely' tomb - great phrase, like that. Good work with the verse you brought in 'he didn't have a machine gun' (more innocent times). Your dreams flow freely with alliteration and some rhyming to help them on their way. Nicely done mike, you excel at these,
cheers.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2018
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am sure the reviewers are the big winner with these clubs. I get to read wonderful poems. LOL My dreams are never this elaborate. I am glad yours are, so I can read the poem. Great job. I wish I had a six left.
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I am sure the reviewers are the big winner with these clubs. I get to read wonderful poems. LOL My dreams are never this elaborate. I am glad yours are, so I can read the poem. Great job. I wish I had a six left.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
Comment from Rubylou
Hello,
I really enjoyed this free verse. Dreams...From one thought to the next to the next; it is like a pin ball game. That is how I view most dreams.
I like that your piece relays the same feel and how the abruptness and change of subject occurs. Polar bears...her...an assembly...etc. I also like that you go back for the kiss, "it's just a dream..."
Most enjoyable,
Rubylou
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Hello,
I really enjoyed this free verse. Dreams...From one thought to the next to the next; it is like a pin ball game. That is how I view most dreams.
I like that your piece relays the same feel and how the abruptness and change of subject occurs. Polar bears...her...an assembly...etc. I also like that you go back for the kiss, "it's just a dream..."
Most enjoyable,
Rubylou
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
Comment from SunDazeDead
Very nice flow to this piece, I loved reading it! I'm interested in this group, and the free verse for the dream theme. I love to write free verse. No rules, no foul.
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Very nice flow to this piece, I loved reading it! I'm interested in this group, and the free verse for the dream theme. I love to write free verse. No rules, no foul.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
Comment from apky
Your free verse simply fascinated me and was very much like most dreams:
skiping from scene to scne, twirling back on itselft, going off at tangents and reaching all over the place. But the message was clear about our world and our dreams:
either way our goose is
sautéed crisped and cooked
we've all been rooked
The artwork is absolutely fascinating, Michael.
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Your free verse simply fascinated me and was very much like most dreams:
skiping from scene to scne, twirling back on itselft, going off at tangents and reaching all over the place. But the message was clear about our world and our dreams:
either way our goose is
sautéed crisped and cooked
we've all been rooked
The artwork is absolutely fascinating, Michael.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
Comment from Liberty Justice
Hi Michael. I am NOT flirting, just stating facts. You look handsomely in that photo and so much younger. Your poem is very interesting flowing well as you describe your daydreams and nightmares. Your poem brings back and describes your memories of friends of earlier years and trips down memory lane. lol liberty justice
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Hi Michael. I am NOT flirting, just stating facts. You look handsomely in that photo and so much younger. Your poem is very interesting flowing well as you describe your daydreams and nightmares. Your poem brings back and describes your memories of friends of earlier years and trips down memory lane. lol liberty justice
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
Comment from nordicgirl
Nice pic. I know that guy. Hehehe.
Wow we. This is quite a journey here, Michael. We do live in the world, we are part of it, but then we have our own world's that are simple. We survive and hopefully find some love and happiness, some, like you, make a difference. Don't let it go to your head! By the way, I got the whole clam thing, naughty boy. Or, maybe it's me. NG
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Nice pic. I know that guy. Hehehe.
Wow we. This is quite a journey here, Michael. We do live in the world, we are part of it, but then we have our own world's that are simple. We survive and hopefully find some love and happiness, some, like you, make a difference. Don't let it go to your head! By the way, I got the whole clam thing, naughty boy. Or, maybe it's me. NG
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
What a wonderful kaleidoscope of dreamscape reality combined with the grace and cacophony of the waking world. Our dream world is real of course as it creates memories that affect our emotional responses to our "waking" life. I love how you're interspersed violence and bullying into the ephemeral landscape of nightdreams and the blurry line between the two.
But as you have so intelligently concluded opinions vary.
A fine and unique free verse post, Mav.
Love it!
Ange
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What a wonderful kaleidoscope of dreamscape reality combined with the grace and cacophony of the waking world. Our dream world is real of course as it creates memories that affect our emotional responses to our "waking" life. I love how you're interspersed violence and bullying into the ephemeral landscape of nightdreams and the blurry line between the two.
But as you have so intelligently concluded opinions vary.
A fine and unique free verse post, Mav.
Love it!
Ange
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018