haiku (black squirrel scurries)
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Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
Yeah, you have those furry little creatures figured out. I have watched them and they are masters at robbing the bird feeders. I like this along with the cute accompanying artwork. Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Yeah, you have those furry little creatures figured out. I have watched them and they are masters at robbing the bird feeders. I like this along with the cute accompanying artwork. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Hello Jeffrey!
So pleased you enjoyed! The squirrels were at it again toda!
Thank you for your kind review!
diane
Comment from Boogienights
They love bird seed don't they? I like squirrels even though I've heard them described as rats that can climb trees, I think they are cute. I like your picture that you paired up with your words, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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They love bird seed don't they? I like squirrels even though I've heard them described as rats that can climb trees, I think they are cute. I like your picture that you paired up with your words, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Hello Boogienights!
I love all the furry creatures. They were at it again today!
Thank you for your kind review!
diane
Comment from Fabiha_N
This is a really great poem! I love the way you wrote it.
That happens a lot in our backyard too. We have a birdfeeder, and the squirrels always stop by once in a while!
Great work :)
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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This is a really great poem! I love the way you wrote it.
That happens a lot in our backyard too. We have a birdfeeder, and the squirrels always stop by once in a while!
Great work :)
Comment Written 27-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Hello Fabiha!
So very pleased you enjoyed my poem.
The squirrels enjoyed another banquet today!
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Ah! I am sad for it. Again, emotion ensues. This is very well done in a little short haiku. We want it to go on-help him find sustenance. We want to cheer him on to a big meal. You did well with this and I enjoyed it.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Ah! I am sad for it. Again, emotion ensues. This is very well done in a little short haiku. We want it to go on-help him find sustenance. We want to cheer him on to a big meal. You did well with this and I enjoyed it.
Wendy
Comment Written 27-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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No, Wendy!
No need to be sorry!
My little marauder is very, very well-taken care of...and so are his sisters and brothers!
I swear they were holding a convention on our deck and at our bird feeders all day today! :)
Thank you for your excellent review!
diane
Comment from jenintorre
A great little 5-7-5 poem. It paints a good picture in very few words. I've never seen a black
Squirrel. It looks a bit menacing on the illustration unlike the grey ones
I wish you good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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A great little 5-7-5 poem. It paints a good picture in very few words. I've never seen a black
Squirrel. It looks a bit menacing on the illustration unlike the grey ones
I wish you good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Hello Jen,
No...not menacing...just very chubby!
And the marauder has been at the feeders all day today!
Thank you for your complimentary and positive review!
diane
Comment from F Scott Hafner
Poor hungry squirrel. Nicely covered motion and thought. I don't recall ever seeing a black squirrel- it creates a nice contrast with the other words and thoughts. In hopes of being helpful I would prefer picturing snow covered fences as I get distracted thinking how the little guy was going to navigate fence posts
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Poor hungry squirrel. Nicely covered motion and thought. I don't recall ever seeing a black squirrel- it creates a nice contrast with the other words and thoughts. In hopes of being helpful I would prefer picturing snow covered fences as I get distracted thinking how the little guy was going to navigate fence posts
Comment Written 27-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Hah!
Believe me, Frank, this little cheeky bugger has no problem navigating anything! He really does scurry across the fence rails, dives onto the ground, leaps onto the deck, then its railing, and off he goes to the birdfeeder - two of which are on the deck railing! Today he was joined by at least three of his brothers or sisters! Pretty entertaining!
Thank you for your thoughtful review!
diane
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No such entertainment for me in weatherless Coronado CA V
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Wait!
Frank!
I just now realized what you were saying!
Of course he scurries across the rails. He jumps over the posts!
In the postscript I had written rails, too! Not sure how the posts ended up in the haiku, but I have changed it to "rails."
Thank you for your subtle suggestion! Much appreciated!
diane
Comment from fayesh
Your 5-7-5 haiku paints a clear image of the squirrel and its actions. The accompanying artwork fit your haiku beautifully.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Your 5-7-5 haiku paints a clear image of the squirrel and its actions. The accompanying artwork fit your haiku beautifully.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Hello fayesh!
So pleased you enjoyed!
He...and his buddies...are at it again today!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Spitfire
How awful. All that running for nothing. I can imagine the squirrel's disappointment. Alliteration with squirrel scurries, fence and feeder. Assonance with bird and squirrel. Loved the author notes. What fun to watch.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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How awful. All that running for nothing. I can imagine the squirrel's disappointment. Alliteration with squirrel scurries, fence and feeder. Assonance with bird and squirrel. Loved the author notes. What fun to watch.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Hi Spitfire,
They are "going to town this morning!"
Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from jdrhye
Cute... Nice imagery in few words. Successful haiku! I actually have a plastic Barbie pool I put out for the squirrels to keep them out of my feeders. It's been fun to watch them especially the baby squirrels! They are a bit picky though! In this case they share with the birds. I degrees...good job..brings a smile to my face thinking of your black squirrel!
J
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Cute... Nice imagery in few words. Successful haiku! I actually have a plastic Barbie pool I put out for the squirrels to keep them out of my feeders. It's been fun to watch them especially the baby squirrels! They are a bit picky though! In this case they share with the birds. I degrees...good job..brings a smile to my face thinking of your black squirrel!
J
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Hello J!
Thank you ever so much for your complimentary review! Love the idea of the Barbie pool!
He's at it again...and today he brought his buddies!
diane
Comment from Tim0443
How true to life this is! The color of the squirrel in contrast with the snow is a very strong image. Also strong because he is a thief! Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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How true to life this is! The color of the squirrel in contrast with the snow is a very strong image. Also strong because he is a thief! Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2018
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Hello Tim!
So pleased you enjoyed! He is marauding again today! And he has brought his friend!
Thank you again!
diane
