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Comment from brenda faye curtis
The poem is cute, like a candy ad from a child's point of view. Only a child would consider that a tasty treat. I wonder, since you found that image on Google, if there's a company that actually makes those?
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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The poem is cute, like a candy ad from a child's point of view. Only a child would consider that a tasty treat. I wonder, since you found that image on Google, if there's a company that actually makes those?
Comment Written 14-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
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This is a real candy
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Yuck! :(
Comment from nomi338
Bill, I had no idea of just how sick you really are. I think I'll pass on these obviously tasty snacks and rather wait until the day I actually have to eat one of these things to survive. Until that day comes, (Groan) I will eschew the partaking of all such ... (urp)
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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Bill, I had no idea of just how sick you really are. I think I'll pass on these obviously tasty snacks and rather wait until the day I actually have to eat one of these things to survive. Until that day comes, (Groan) I will eschew the partaking of all such ... (urp)
Comment Written 13-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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Thanks, nomi, for reviewing. Take two; they?re small.
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Uh, no. I do not think so.
Comment from judiverse
Are they chocolate coated? I think I'll pass. Amusing poem, and the artwork is "appetizing." Your syllable count is a precise 5-7-5. The last line makes a clever conclusion. Yummy tweet woachez makes it sound like Tweety Bird was doing a commercial. Amusing work! judi
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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Are they chocolate coated? I think I'll pass. Amusing poem, and the artwork is "appetizing." Your syllable count is a precise 5-7-5. The last line makes a clever conclusion. Yummy tweet woachez makes it sound like Tweety Bird was doing a commercial. Amusing work! judi
Comment Written 13-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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Thanks, Judi. I?m afraid I?m tanking early on cockroaches. I will try to finish.
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You're welcome. I suspect cockroach interest wouldn't last as long as the creatures live. judi
Comment from damommy
I think I'll pass. Gummy Bears are bad enough. They pulled a filling loose once. I'd have to go to the dentist and tell him a Gummy Roach did it again.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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I think I'll pass. Gummy Bears are bad enough. They pulled a filling loose once. I'd have to go to the dentist and tell him a Gummy Roach did it again.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Perhaps the real thing, with a touch of mustard or honey?
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Eeeeeeeew! You try it first, and let me know how it tastes.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting and colorful 5-7-5 poem about those yummy cockroaches. You used very cute wording and very good imagery. I can't understand people wanting to eat them. To each his own! Oh well! Cute job my friend! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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This is a very interesting and colorful 5-7-5 poem about those yummy cockroaches. You used very cute wording and very good imagery. I can't understand people wanting to eat them. To each his own! Oh well! Cute job my friend! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 12-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2018
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Thanks. Teri