The West
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Lucky"One man's journey west.
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Comment from Writingfundimension
Well, it seems Lucky's name jinxed him good. Should never have started bragging. I love this line:
'then marry yourself a cowboy. Between him and the fleas you'll never be lonely.'
I was also surprised to learn that the cattle herders were paid by the actual number of animals at their destination. But, of course, that makes sense.
Well done!
Bev
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Well, it seems Lucky's name jinxed him good. Should never have started bragging. I love this line:
'then marry yourself a cowboy. Between him and the fleas you'll never be lonely.'
I was also surprised to learn that the cattle herders were paid by the actual number of animals at their destination. But, of course, that makes sense.
Well done!
Bev
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Thanks for the review.
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You're very welcome. :)
Comment from frierajac
This reminds me of some of the TV westerns of my childhood, when I lived near places where some were filmed. And I wondered if you had heard of one named,
'Sugarfoot" which was very like your rendition here?
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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This reminds me of some of the TV westerns of my childhood, when I lived near places where some were filmed. And I wondered if you had heard of one named,
'Sugarfoot" which was very like your rendition here?
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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I remember easy lopin', saddle ropin' Sugarfoot.
Your writing reminds me of the older Westerns.
As a tribute and not a copy
Western writers of yesteryear and the dime noels
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
An interesting chapter where we see the reality of being a cowboy on a cattle drive. It's certainly not what they make it seem in the movies. All of those glorify the activity and make people want to jump on a horse and take off after them.
I live on a farm, have been injured by a bull, and know better.
Thanks for sharing your chapter,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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An interesting chapter where we see the reality of being a cowboy on a cattle drive. It's certainly not what they make it seem in the movies. All of those glorify the activity and make people want to jump on a horse and take off after them.
I live on a farm, have been injured by a bull, and know better.
Thanks for sharing your chapter,
Rhonda
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Tex Ritter didn't have a clue.
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Very true!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Thomas,
Poor old Lucky, but hey, this crap happens. The west was a tough old place in many more ways than one.
Another fine chapter.
G
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Hi Thomas,
Poor old Lucky, but hey, this crap happens. The west was a tough old place in many more ways than one.
Another fine chapter.
G
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Thanks for reading, G-man.
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Thanks for reading, G-man.
Comment from judiverse
Are you still telling this from the narrator's point of view? If the story is about Lucky, you might bring him in by name earlier in the story. You really give a great description of how tough being a cowboy was. I can understand the importance of the cook. The cowboys must have worked up quite an appetite trying to keep the herd together. My mother said the same thing about eating a peck of dirt. This would have been quite an awakening for young Lucky. Full of hopes of joining the Wild West show, Lucky was crushed against the car's railing. So much loss of life in those times. judi
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Are you still telling this from the narrator's point of view? If the story is about Lucky, you might bring him in by name earlier in the story. You really give a great description of how tough being a cowboy was. I can understand the importance of the cook. The cowboys must have worked up quite an appetite trying to keep the herd together. My mother said the same thing about eating a peck of dirt. This would have been quite an awakening for young Lucky. Full of hopes of joining the Wild West show, Lucky was crushed against the car's railing. So much loss of life in those times. judi
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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I have a reason for not naming the traveler yet.
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You're very welcome. I don't know why you're not naming the Traveler, but it's not what I was concerned about. Maybe you need to have something at the beginning of this chapter that this is what you found out Lucky, and mention him. judi
Comment from mbroyles2
I guess sometimes you can push your luck too far.
Lucky might have been wiser to steer (pun intended) clear of the herd.
I like this tale, it takes me back to my youth when all my father would watch on T.V. was the news and westerns.
That is until the Waltons and Little House on the Prairie started.
Excellent writing!
Michael
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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I guess sometimes you can push your luck too far.
Lucky might have been wiser to steer (pun intended) clear of the herd.
I like this tale, it takes me back to my youth when all my father would watch on T.V. was the news and westerns.
That is until the Waltons and Little House on the Prairie started.
Excellent writing!
Michael
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Thanks for your continued reading.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
The cattle drive. Those must have been some unique experiences. Seems "Lucky" is smart enough to know how to make some money in the Wild West Show. As far as he is concerned, the others can follow a bunch of smelly cattle up the trail. Will continue to follow this story.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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The cattle drive. Those must have been some unique experiences. Seems "Lucky" is smart enough to know how to make some money in the Wild West Show. As far as he is concerned, the others can follow a bunch of smelly cattle up the trail. Will continue to follow this story.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Between him and the fleas you'll never be lonely - good chuckle line that one. A sad note to end on with Lucky Wilson seeming to be not so lucky after all. Great chapter, I enjoyed it, well written and holds the readers interest,
cheers.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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Between him and the fleas you'll never be lonely - good chuckle line that one. A sad note to end on with Lucky Wilson seeming to be not so lucky after all. Great chapter, I enjoyed it, well written and holds the readers interest,
cheers.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2018
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I guess his luck ran out.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Thomas
Please continue about your seventeen year old cowboy learning how it is to be a good at being a cowboy Smiles to the part where Lucky got his name
Gert
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thomas
Please continue about your seventeen year old cowboy learning how it is to be a good at being a cowboy Smiles to the part where Lucky got his name
Gert
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thanks for continuing with this story.
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you are welcome Tom
Gert
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again, a good addition to your previous posts. I enjoyed reading.
then marry yourself a cowboy. Between him and the fleas you'll never be lonely. (LOL)
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Once again, a good addition to your previous posts. I enjoyed reading.
then marry yourself a cowboy. Between him and the fleas you'll never be lonely. (LOL)
Comment Written 07-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2018
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Thanks. I'm glad you liked it.
