A Life Of Silent Cries
The children suffer most.86 total reviews
Comment from Julie Lau
Expertly written, with the ability to convey discomfort and even guilt to the reader. I only wish that enough
sensitive people would absorb such messages and agree to do away with war. Julie Lau
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Expertly written, with the ability to convey discomfort and even guilt to the reader. I only wish that enough
sensitive people would absorb such messages and agree to do away with war. Julie Lau
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
Comment from Moonbeams Musings 55
Another thought provoking, in your face poem. I mean this as a compliment because it is showing the reader that all is not well in the world. An ugly sad reality that a blind eye is turned towards. Thank you for sharing.
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Another thought provoking, in your face poem. I mean this as a compliment because it is showing the reader that all is not well in the world. An ugly sad reality that a blind eye is turned towards. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
Comment from Jane Jane King
Wow!!! what a powerful gripping poem this is. The last line is especially gut wrenching. This gives a very graphic depiction of the horrors of war. Well done
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Wow!!! what a powerful gripping poem this is. The last line is especially gut wrenching. This gives a very graphic depiction of the horrors of war. Well done
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This poem tells about the children suffer most today elsewhere; they are now on the cries of silent cry of sufferings and hungers; well said; ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (DR)
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This poem tells about the children suffer most today elsewhere; they are now on the cries of silent cry of sufferings and hungers; well said; ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (DR)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
Comment from karenina
Thanks for bringing this forward from 2018...
How vivid your portrait, and sad to say it is as prevalent now as then...
Children. Truly the collateral damage of all war, and stuck in the morass of poverty and apathy!
When I was a child I recall my parents saying to be grateful for every meal, for children in Biafra were starving...
Not even the country survived...
When will we learn!?
Karenina
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Thanks for bringing this forward from 2018...
How vivid your portrait, and sad to say it is as prevalent now as then...
Children. Truly the collateral damage of all war, and stuck in the morass of poverty and apathy!
When I was a child I recall my parents saying to be grateful for every meal, for children in Biafra were starving...
Not even the country survived...
When will we learn!?
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Mar-2023
Comment from Lea Tonin1
That is incredibly sad i'm not surprised about it is that it's real and true. Yeah this one breaks my heart and a million pieces.
Very well written extremely well done the whole presentation as is really great. We cannot get beyond such a problem as this without having something tuck at your heart. I feel for the children of ukraine and for all the children suffering from war and the effects of it.
Having said all that it's an excellent poem deservative 6 stars. Thank you for your submission. I hope to see more have a good evening!
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That is incredibly sad i'm not surprised about it is that it's real and true. Yeah this one breaks my heart and a million pieces.
Very well written extremely well done the whole presentation as is really great. We cannot get beyond such a problem as this without having something tuck at your heart. I feel for the children of ukraine and for all the children suffering from war and the effects of it.
Having said all that it's an excellent poem deservative 6 stars. Thank you for your submission. I hope to see more have a good evening!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
Comment from Spitfire
Your description of this child is dreadfully vivid: leather skin, swollen belly, infected pus-filled eyes. The reader wants to know why and the last stanza gives the answer--a war killed his parents. The tossing of coins in a 'rancid' street give a picture of his environment. That action ceases as the boy dies. Well done.
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Your description of this child is dreadfully vivid: leather skin, swollen belly, infected pus-filled eyes. The reader wants to know why and the last stanza gives the answer--a war killed his parents. The tossing of coins in a 'rancid' street give a picture of his environment. That action ceases as the boy dies. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
Comment from Kayliegh
Gosh, this was chilling. You wrote this perfectly, the thing that makes it even more horrific is that some children actually suffer through this. The line of, 'the child joins them now at last, as strangers toss him coins no more,' was the kind of thing that really sends the chills down your spine. Great work!
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Gosh, this was chilling. You wrote this perfectly, the thing that makes it even more horrific is that some children actually suffer through this. The line of, 'the child joins them now at last, as strangers toss him coins no more,' was the kind of thing that really sends the chills down your spine. Great work!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
Comment from nancyjam
You present a tragic picture in this well crafted poem - and, sadly,
a true one.
The imagery is powerful allowing the reader to experience the scene
first hand.
A powerful piece of writing. Thanks for sharing.
Nancy
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You present a tragic picture in this well crafted poem - and, sadly,
a true one.
The imagery is powerful allowing the reader to experience the scene
first hand.
A powerful piece of writing. Thanks for sharing.
Nancy
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Tom,
These quatrains flow together well to help create such a vivid image of this poor homeless boy. The coins tossed on the quick walk by do him no good. He needs some care which most people see and ignore. He should never had do die in such circumstances. It also show the horrors of war and how it effects more than the soldiers.
The rhyme is unforced and I see no errors.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
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Hi Tom,
These quatrains flow together well to help create such a vivid image of this poor homeless boy. The coins tossed on the quick walk by do him no good. He needs some care which most people see and ignore. He should never had do die in such circumstances. It also show the horrors of war and how it effects more than the soldiers.
The rhyme is unforced and I see no errors.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 19-Mar-2023
