Sworn to secrecy
I listen to his steps on the stairs9 total reviews
Comment from jppoet
Jen, while this subject may not be a favorite of mine, I applaud your achievement in rising to the challenge of a 2 2 2 2 9 9, structure. Blessings, john
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Jen, while this subject may not be a favorite of mine, I applaud your achievement in rising to the challenge of a 2 2 2 2 9 9, structure. Blessings, john
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Many thanks John. Much appreciated.
Comment from emereaux
Very relevant. Precise words, no ambivalence. Your writing has a gravitas and impact. Great entry for this contest. Your illustration as well. Best of luck!
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Very relevant. Precise words, no ambivalence. Your writing has a gravitas and impact. Great entry for this contest. Your illustration as well. Best of luck!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Thanks again for your wonderful words and stars. I truly appreciate it.
Comment from lyenochka
Very well done tyburn. This format is difficult to do because often it sounds a bit stilted because the enforced positions of the adjectives. But this one reads very smoothly!
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Very well done tyburn. This format is difficult to do because often it sounds a bit stilted because the enforced positions of the adjectives. But this one reads very smoothly!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author
Excellent described words of how one feel about been abused and day by day the horrible thought of HATE
Gert
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Hello author
Excellent described words of how one feel about been abused and day by day the horrible thought of HATE
Gert
Comment Written 30-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2018
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Many thanks Gert. Your comments are much appreciated.
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Tyburn Poetry' writing prompt.
Well written and a clear and sad message told.
You don't use your four rhyming words in the last two lines though. You may want to look at it again.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Tyburn Poetry' writing prompt.
Well written and a clear and sad message told.
You don't use your four rhyming words in the last two lines though. You may want to look at it again.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Hi Sharon. Thanks for that . I have changed it. It is the first time I've attempted a Tyburn and hadn't read the rules properly.
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Better, but still not quite right.
Your first four lines need to be single, two syllable words.
Also, your last two lines are missing one syllable each.
You're getting it though.
Sharon
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O.K? I really appreciate your help. Love Jen.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written Tyburn poem you have penned for the prompt. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery. It made me think of someone that was sitting waiting for the abuser to climb up the steps after them. Great job! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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This is a very well written Tyburn poem you have penned for the prompt. You used very good descriptive wording and great imagery. It made me think of someone that was sitting waiting for the abuser to climb up the steps after them. Great job! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Many thanks.
Comment from James H. Oldfield
Very good, and very powerful poetry.
In line two, had you meant 'disused' (no longer used), or 'misused' (used in the wrong way/for the wrong purpose)?
An excellent entry, and all the best in the contest.
Take care.
-James
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Very good, and very powerful poetry.
In line two, had you meant 'disused' (no longer used), or 'misused' (used in the wrong way/for the wrong purpose)?
An excellent entry, and all the best in the contest.
Take care.
-James
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for your help. I'll change it.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks, she being abused, confused, shakes and goes sleepless nights with fear and dread feelings, well said, well done; good luck to you with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
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This speaks, she being abused, confused, shakes and goes sleepless nights with fear and dread feelings, well said, well done; good luck to you with the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks for your comments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a chilling write about domestic abuse and the fear instilled in someone who fears their footsteps and the pain they cause. Many feel trapped by it and it only takes one step to break free, a poignant write and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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This is a chilling write about domestic abuse and the fear instilled in someone who fears their footsteps and the pain they cause. Many feel trapped by it and it only takes one step to break free, a poignant write and I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 29-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2018
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Thanks Dolly. J x