Free Verse Collection 2
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Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Wow ... an amazing write! What a great exercise to do ... to listen to music and then write where it takes you. Well, it must have been some really great music that you listened to, as this poem is terrific and so eloquently written.
There are loves that we never forget, and thoughts of them are hard to let go of. Love your ending, "but you can't be erased" ... a very strong ending! I can see why this piece has been nominated for Poem of the Month. It's exceptional. ~~ Connie
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Wow ... an amazing write! What a great exercise to do ... to listen to music and then write where it takes you. Well, it must have been some really great music that you listened to, as this poem is terrific and so eloquently written.
There are loves that we never forget, and thoughts of them are hard to let go of. Love your ending, "but you can't be erased" ... a very strong ending! I can see why this piece has been nominated for Poem of the Month. It's exceptional. ~~ Connie
Comment Written 03-Feb-2018
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This music has led you to a quite different place mike. I think I know where the music changed - I follow my heartbeat - it pounds restlessly - that sounds like the second song to me. A gorgeous free verse, the sounds, the descriptions are wonderful. Loved it
cheers,
valda
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This music has led you to a quite different place mike. I think I know where the music changed - I follow my heartbeat - it pounds restlessly - that sounds like the second song to me. A gorgeous free verse, the sounds, the descriptions are wonderful. Loved it
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 02-Feb-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
This is the first entry of what I expect will be many into your excellent free verse club challenge, this sounds like.
Your opening stanza sets the tone and location eliciting the flow of the emotion of ease, with some tension. The ideal arc within which to create.
This is a journey through the external and internal universe. The last two lines state clearly the overall insight, the name in the sand can be washed away with the next arriving wave, but not the person.
This is superb, and I can't wait to write one too.
Love this!
Ange
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This is the first entry of what I expect will be many into your excellent free verse club challenge, this sounds like.
Your opening stanza sets the tone and location eliciting the flow of the emotion of ease, with some tension. The ideal arc within which to create.
This is a journey through the external and internal universe. The last two lines state clearly the overall insight, the name in the sand can be washed away with the next arriving wave, but not the person.
This is superb, and I can't wait to write one too.
Love this!
Ange
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
Comment from nordicgirl
Oh, Michael, this is so captivating. I listened to all the music and it added so much to the feel of this. It's just wonderful, every word. Please write more. NG
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Oh, Michael, this is so captivating. I listened to all the music and it added so much to the feel of this. It's just wonderful, every word. Please write more. NG
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
Comment from rama devi
Wow! This is breathtaking, dear M. Stunning intensity in tone and emotional overtone. Outstanding imagery - metaphorical medleys that synchronize well. The flow is fluid. The voicing is polished and precise (each word weighed well) and there are many stand out aha lines that can have multiple avenues and facets of interpretation.
Great use of indents to sculpt cadence and dramatic pause. Impressive - all lines! These are my favorite:
I lift my arms
but they are not
delicate
blue is everywhere
the sky's illusion
the ocean's unopened cover
I knock
And your opening stanza totally drew me in. Bravo
Warmly, rd
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Wow! This is breathtaking, dear M. Stunning intensity in tone and emotional overtone. Outstanding imagery - metaphorical medleys that synchronize well. The flow is fluid. The voicing is polished and precise (each word weighed well) and there are many stand out aha lines that can have multiple avenues and facets of interpretation.
Great use of indents to sculpt cadence and dramatic pause. Impressive - all lines! These are my favorite:
I lift my arms
but they are not
delicate
blue is everywhere
the sky's illusion
the ocean's unopened cover
I knock
And your opening stanza totally drew me in. Bravo
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Trying to let someone go can be hard and almost impossible. Memories will always remain and you'll always think of what could have been. I think many will be able to relate to this. Great job
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Trying to let someone go can be hard and almost impossible. Memories will always remain and you'll always think of what could have been. I think many will be able to relate to this. Great job
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Michael;
Thank you for sharing your impressions of the music. Your thoughts moved with the sounds you heard, and you were able to capture one coherent thought to draw a lovely picture for us to glimpse a piece of your thoughts,
~patty~
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Hi, Michael;
Thank you for sharing your impressions of the music. Your thoughts moved with the sounds you heard, and you were able to capture one coherent thought to draw a lovely picture for us to glimpse a piece of your thoughts,
~patty~
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
Comment from Debbie Pope
Powerful, beautiful stuff here. You set the bar high for those of us aspiring poets. Your image of a bird's shadow on a cloud is one of my favorite lines that I have read. And I like "the din of life...suffocating." And "phantom wings whisking stars." Just lovely but oh so sad. Life, I guess.
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Powerful, beautiful stuff here. You set the bar high for those of us aspiring poets. Your image of a bird's shadow on a cloud is one of my favorite lines that I have read. And I like "the din of life...suffocating." And "phantom wings whisking stars." Just lovely but oh so sad. Life, I guess.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
Comment from Teri7
Mike, This is a very nice poem you have penned to go along with the challenge. You used very good descriptive words and lovely art work. I would love to join this challenge, but I can't hear the music right now. My speakers are messed up! Oh well, maybe next challenge! Blessings, Teri
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Mike, This is a very nice poem you have penned to go along with the challenge. You used very good descriptive words and lovely art work. I would love to join this challenge, but I can't hear the music right now. My speakers are messed up! Oh well, maybe next challenge! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 28-Jan-2018
Comment from angel123
Thank you for sharing your well-written poem and combing music with your own unique poetry. Your poem flows well and I enjoyed reading it. Your words are profound, as only an accomplished poet can express them. Best wishes!
Angel123
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Thank you for sharing your well-written poem and combing music with your own unique poetry. Your poem flows well and I enjoyed reading it. Your words are profound, as only an accomplished poet can express them. Best wishes!
Angel123
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2018