FAMILY TIES.
Viewing comments for Chapter 88 "Why! Why! D.W I.?""ALL IN THE FAMILY."
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Comment from mvbrooks
I think the ending is bitter AND sweet. I get the poetic justice. I also get the sense of senseless-loss for those who knew the careless driver. The poem captures the loss well and the agony of those who rack up multiple DWIs and skip through the loopholes.
Excellent poem to evoke thoughts and discussion.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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I think the ending is bitter AND sweet. I get the poetic justice. I also get the sense of senseless-loss for those who knew the careless driver. The poem captures the loss well and the agony of those who rack up multiple DWIs and skip through the loopholes.
Excellent poem to evoke thoughts and discussion.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello mvbrooks: I thank you gratefully for using your time for viewing my poem. When I was a member of the emergency room staff at our hospital, a close-friend co-worker said to me, "Rhonnie, I like how you write. Why don't you write about the ghastly things we encounter here in E.R.?" Believe me, mvbrooks, this poem barely scratches the surface of what we experienced. People like you, in your thoughtful reviews, have inspired me to share more. So...that's what I'm going to do. I appreciate your, consideration, in your, "feeling me." in caring, and sharing. Be watching for my return. I'll be back. rhonnie69.
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I will keep watching....keep writing, your friends are right.
Comment from Dan Diego
This flows so well from word to word, stanza to stanza. For me, it read like something spoken. But that did not deter me from enjoying the written poem. Of course, the subtext is all over this piece - don't drink and drive. Your rhymes were sobering, I saw instances of alliteration with perfectly placed breaks and a flow that just rolled off the tongue. I must have been hard to write about the death of a child, but if that's what it takes to fix this problem, tell the truth. I really enjoyed your poem.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This flows so well from word to word, stanza to stanza. For me, it read like something spoken. But that did not deter me from enjoying the written poem. Of course, the subtext is all over this piece - don't drink and drive. Your rhymes were sobering, I saw instances of alliteration with perfectly placed breaks and a flow that just rolled off the tongue. I must have been hard to write about the death of a child, but if that's what it takes to fix this problem, tell the truth. I really enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hello Dan Diego: I am thankful and pleased that you viewed my poem, and have given me such an encouraging review.
This poem was, "SPOKEN," from my whole being. And what I, "WROTE," I felt it with all my heart. As a former staff member in a hospital emergency room, In our E.R. I've seen many incredible things, regarding people to people, hearts to hearts,
in, "A matter of life, or death situation. The cry, "TRIAGE!" was always followed by an exclamation point! When some one cried that word we all got busy, and down to business on the double. I intend to write more about this phenomena. Be watching for me. I'll be back. Again: thank you for your review. rhonnie69.