Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Pals"Dawn of Chaos
34 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Pals, seems to happen out on the front porch as the person and the furry friend let all that could happen go ahead and happen in their combined imaginations.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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This poem, Pals, seems to happen out on the front porch as the person and the furry friend let all that could happen go ahead and happen in their combined imaginations.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2022
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Glad aspects prevailing this write were appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your encouraging response and generous rate.
Comment from Patty Palmer
I've read your poem over several times and I'm not sure I'm getting it. How I see it: The two best friends are tired and relaxing on the porch. One is a dog and the other the master. But both love each other. They are family. Lost in the same dream, they both see it from a different light. As the sun sets, so do they.
_Patty
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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I've read your poem over several times and I'm not sure I'm getting it. How I see it: The two best friends are tired and relaxing on the porch. One is a dog and the other the master. But both love each other. They are family. Lost in the same dream, they both see it from a different light. As the sun sets, so do they.
_Patty
Comment Written 05-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Sound like you captured my intents in this read perfectly, thanking you for your generous rate and appreciated views.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I read your poem several times and I don't understand most of it. I suggest you go through it and read it as if you are the reviewer. It may make sense to you but readers may get lost.
I like the presentation and your honesty with the subject. You must love animals. My daughter just lost her cat who was 16 years old. She is devastated..
Good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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I read your poem several times and I don't understand most of it. I suggest you go through it and read it as if you are the reviewer. It may make sense to you but readers may get lost.
I like the presentation and your honesty with the subject. You must love animals. My daughter just lost her cat who was 16 years old. She is devastated..
Good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 04-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Sorry about the cat, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comment prevailing this particular read.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
What a whirling mind you have. I read this four times, trying to inhale the letters and the meaning. However, a dog and an old man in his chair is beautiful and filled my soul with wonder at how you presented such. You did a mind-boggling job with this...
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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What a whirling mind you have. I read this four times, trying to inhale the letters and the meaning. However, a dog and an old man in his chair is beautiful and filled my soul with wonder at how you presented such. You did a mind-boggling job with this...
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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I'm part crazy, conveying nonsense might be my best worth, thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
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LOL - crazy is good, and I ought to know!
Comment from papa55mike
It is interesting the forms that memories can take in a dream then awaken to see the bodies we now have. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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It is interesting the forms that memories can take in a dream then awaken to see the bodies we now have. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Glad aspects in this particular read were found appealing to your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and kind thoughts.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
In our lifetime, w come across people hurrying into existence and many others trying to get out of it. It is strange. We owe everything to life, but in return owes us nothing! Life owes us. I read and reread your poem. Honestly speaking I found it a bit hard to understand as many ideas are strewn all over. But a very novel way of writing. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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In our lifetime, w come across people hurrying into existence and many others trying to get out of it. It is strange. We owe everything to life, but in return owes us nothing! Life owes us. I read and reread your poem. Honestly speaking I found it a bit hard to understand as many ideas are strewn all over. But a very novel way of writing. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 03-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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One out of two perhaps not bad, appreciate the shout, as your generous rate, welcomed always your comments.
Comment from Eve Vasa
Hello, nice to see you at FS today. This is an interesting poem, and I did try to connect with it a couple of times, but I couldn't. At times it seemed like random words strung together and your author notes didn't help. I couldn't and can't understand what you are trying to say ... but I want to, lol.
A purely subjective view, of course, but I have to connect with a work on some level and this is the closest I came to understanding anything in your poem:
Bodies awkwardly set folded to abort turning, in his chair sort of one flat yawn another floor, abducted sleep port in mouths decaying teeth.
Although it is not an attractive image, I did see death in it, and emptiness was the death. I prefer to call death the 'late awakening'. For me it is closer to what is really going on in the death process.
Thank you for posting at FS today and I hope you have a lovely day/night, wherever that may be, and my only suggestion for improvement would be to add author notes, if you don't want to change the poem, to help the reader know what is happening in this work. I know you did leave author notes, but they were as baffling for me as the poem. But nicely done and presented, Eve.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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Hello, nice to see you at FS today. This is an interesting poem, and I did try to connect with it a couple of times, but I couldn't. At times it seemed like random words strung together and your author notes didn't help. I couldn't and can't understand what you are trying to say ... but I want to, lol.
A purely subjective view, of course, but I have to connect with a work on some level and this is the closest I came to understanding anything in your poem:
Bodies awkwardly set folded to abort turning, in his chair sort of one flat yawn another floor, abducted sleep port in mouths decaying teeth.
Although it is not an attractive image, I did see death in it, and emptiness was the death. I prefer to call death the 'late awakening'. For me it is closer to what is really going on in the death process.
Thank you for posting at FS today and I hope you have a lovely day/night, wherever that may be, and my only suggestion for improvement would be to add author notes, if you don't want to change the poem, to help the reader know what is happening in this work. I know you did leave author notes, but they were as baffling for me as the poem. But nicely done and presented, Eve.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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My writes do have their issues, thanking you for your heads up prevailing this particular read, also for your generous rate dispute not being able to connect. I thank you also for your delighting remarks.
Comment from amada
First thing, I think your selection of artwork is melancholic, sweet, and it paints a thousand pictures of warmth, love and companionship. A the same time, I like the sincerity and sweetness of your voice. A pet lover myself, I like what you say in here.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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First thing, I think your selection of artwork is melancholic, sweet, and it paints a thousand pictures of warmth, love and companionship. A the same time, I like the sincerity and sweetness of your voice. A pet lover myself, I like what you say in here.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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I myself never had a pet, endured life on a farm had animals, remembering old timers positioning on porch with close friend. Glad you saw other interests in this write beyond my intent. Thanking you for your generous rate and warming views.
Comment from Jeffrey Ford
I think that you wrote a great and amazing poem! It is very well written and very creative. I like the last verse where you wrote "One's head set swung downward lock seated, lay other arched close near a big chair to dock, snoring friends: man and dog sounded rock." I think snoring friends is so relatable. Someone used to tell me that I used to snore.Great poem!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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I think that you wrote a great and amazing poem! It is very well written and very creative. I like the last verse where you wrote "One's head set swung downward lock seated, lay other arched close near a big chair to dock, snoring friends: man and dog sounded rock." I think snoring friends is so relatable. Someone used to tell me that I used to snore.Great poem!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2020
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I'm glad certain aspects in this particular read were found appealing to your interests, appreciating the pat on the back, believing I'm headed in the right direction. Thanking you for your generous rate and thoughtful remarks
Comment from beizanten
a good an well written opening paragraph. INTERESTING Second paragraph. A good third and fourth paragraph. A better fifth and sixth paragraph. Good seventh and eigth paragraph. Great job, keep it up!
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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a good an well written opening paragraph. INTERESTING Second paragraph. A good third and fourth paragraph. A better fifth and sixth paragraph. Good seventh and eigth paragraph. Great job, keep it up!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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Glad certain aspects of this write were found appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
