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Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Paw Fight"Eclectic style
5 total reviews
Comment from jppoet
This is absolutely glorious, where your artistic text --in sublime rhyme-- is in perfect affinity with the adorable photo. One constructive suggestion:
the red and grey rendition is a bit squinty-difficult to read, especially by
old goats like me. I am bookcasing this feline fresco. Blessings.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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This is absolutely glorious, where your artistic text --in sublime rhyme-- is in perfect affinity with the adorable photo. One constructive suggestion:
the red and grey rendition is a bit squinty-difficult to read, especially by
old goats like me. I am bookcasing this feline fresco. Blessings.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much. I would say it?s an honor to get such a great review. I have changed the red and gray. I hope it?s better.
Which part of Switzerland, French , Italian or German sections ? That?s a beautiful country.
Trisha
Comment from Sherman541
So True to the feline species. They love to play and they are so persnickety, pretentious, prim and proper. Very perfect picture for the paw fight. Truly you captured the cats and there paw fight. Sherman
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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So True to the feline species. They love to play and they are so persnickety, pretentious, prim and proper. Very perfect picture for the paw fight. Truly you captured the cats and there paw fight. Sherman
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Hi Sherman, thanks for a great review.
Happy Monday!
Trisha
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Hello and you are welcome. Happy Monday to you also! :)
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Comment from James H. Oldfield
Love the image :)
Whilst good fun as it stands, I think this could be a really solid poem with just a little tightening of the meter. How about:
The gray cat was washing himself on a whim,
when black cat came prowling and pounced upon him.
A fight that was battled with paws then ensued,
a match-up both welcomed, and never once rued.
They finished their skirmish then both walked away,
remaining firm friends for at least one more day.
It's obviously your poem, and, I stress, is very good as it is, but just a thought.
Very well done, and take care.
-James
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Love the image :)
Whilst good fun as it stands, I think this could be a really solid poem with just a little tightening of the meter. How about:
The gray cat was washing himself on a whim,
when black cat came prowling and pounced upon him.
A fight that was battled with paws then ensued,
a match-up both welcomed, and never once rued.
They finished their skirmish then both walked away,
remaining firm friends for at least one more day.
It's obviously your poem, and, I stress, is very good as it is, but just a thought.
Very well done, and take care.
-James
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Thanks James, I appreciate you suggesting changes. I will honestly probably keep it the way it is.
I do appreciate your time and review.
Trisha.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is an interesting rhyme poem that speaks about nature and character of cats, as cats will be cats, well said, well done; Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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This is an interesting rhyme poem that speaks about nature and character of cats, as cats will be cats, well said, well done; Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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I appreciate your review, you are very loyal. . Thank you from my blessed heart?. I hope your week is wonderful
Trisha
Comment from Carolyn Shelton
Cute video and fun poem.
So glad that they still are friends. :)
The poem is written in a fun, lively way, just like the cats are.
Great job!
I love the part where the cats are standing up on their back legs. Looks like they are playing patty cake. :)
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Cute video and fun poem.
So glad that they still are friends. :)
The poem is written in a fun, lively way, just like the cats are.
Great job!
I love the part where the cats are standing up on their back legs. Looks like they are playing patty cake. :)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2018
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Yes, I would have used that term, but I was unsure of general knowledge of it. I?m happy you liked it, thanks for reviewing