Late September
A Romantic Tale. A Haibun14 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
This is a lovely Haibun, for the contest.
Well written, well done, and your verse is a perfect match. As it the beautiful artwork.
Good luck to you with the competition. You should do well, I would think.
Sharon
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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This is a lovely Haibun, for the contest.
Well written, well done, and your verse is a perfect match. As it the beautiful artwork.
Good luck to you with the competition. You should do well, I would think.
Sharon
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much for the good review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is a fantastic romantic poem about memoirs of September and autumn nights, well said, well done, thanks for sharing this with us. Good luck for the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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This is a fantastic romantic poem about memoirs of September and autumn nights, well said, well done, thanks for sharing this with us. Good luck for the contest. Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Badger_29
Very colorful and poignant writing, with great imagery. I love the subtle tones wish you would put into this concerning the environment and New England. Strong emotionally, I think it would be better delivered if you put in just a bit of spacing and a question mark, like this:
Late September brought you into my life along with tendrils of early cold. You easily caught me in the web of your southern charm and held me there until snow deeply covered the New England hills.
How were we to know that our short-lived romance was be interrupted, nay silenced, by sorrow and your family's need of you?
I hear the clock in the square chime the hour, ever onward. My regret remains eternal.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Very colorful and poignant writing, with great imagery. I love the subtle tones wish you would put into this concerning the environment and New England. Strong emotionally, I think it would be better delivered if you put in just a bit of spacing and a question mark, like this:
Late September brought you into my life along with tendrils of early cold. You easily caught me in the web of your southern charm and held me there until snow deeply covered the New England hills.
How were we to know that our short-lived romance was be interrupted, nay silenced, by sorrow and your family's need of you?
I hear the clock in the square chime the hour, ever onward. My regret remains eternal.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Hi. Thanks so much for the wonderful suggestions and comment. The prompt for the Haiburn state it has to be one paragraph then. Haiku. You can continue with the sequence of paragraph, haiku. Etc. I will add the question mark. Thanks a bunch!
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So glad to help, thanks for the warm reply. Happy New Year, Darren
Comment from James H. Oldfield
Really, really good. I'm enjoying these Haibun entries.
'I hear the clock in the square chime the hour, ever onward' is a great line.
Very well done, I like this a lot. Great work.
Take care.
-James
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Really, really good. I'm enjoying these Haibun entries.
'I hear the clock in the square chime the hour, ever onward' is a great line.
Very well done, I like this a lot. Great work.
Take care.
-James
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Comment Written 21-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2018
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Thank you so much for the good review!
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Thank you so much for the good review!
