empty beer bottles
For now we see through a glass, darkly.80 total reviews
Comment from Gladys2013
I feel like this poem can take on two perspectives. One of a night of enjoyment to where toast can be made or one of an alcoholics defeat approaching. I think that's talent to write such a poem. Great read. Thank you!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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I feel like this poem can take on two perspectives. One of a night of enjoyment to where toast can be made or one of an alcoholics defeat approaching. I think that's talent to write such a poem. Great read. Thank you!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you, Gladys2013, for your generous review and perspective. When I saw empty beer bottles in the kitchen window of a nearby condo, I reported what I saw and imagined how the sunlight through them may appear. The last line states that there will be more drinking that night which may cause the collection on the window sill to grow by morning. Thanks again.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Nice how you paint picture of empty beer bottles. Seem these symbolize night of drinking and fun. Bottles just reminder how much fun people really had. WELL WRITTEN. libertt justice
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Nice how you paint picture of empty beer bottles. Seem these symbolize night of drinking and fun. Bottles just reminder how much fun people really had. WELL WRITTEN. libertt justice
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you, Liberty Justice, for your cheerful review. The sight of empty beer bottles in the kitchen window of a nearby condo captivated my imagination and inspired my poem. Thanks.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting Tanka poem you have penned for the contest about the empty beer bottles. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work. Best wishes in the contest Teri
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This is a very interesting Tanka poem you have penned for the contest about the empty beer bottles. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work. Best wishes in the contest Teri
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you, Teri, for your review and contest best wishes. I went on a walk Saturday when I saw empty beer bottles in the kitchen window of a nearby condo. They captivated my imagination and I began to write and sketch on the spot because I thought it would be intrusive of me to photograph in someone's window. I continued writing and revising on my walk. When it became apparent that I had a poem, it was too late after sunset to change my mind and photograph the bottles. So I found a complimentary image on FanArtReview by Sierra Treasures. Thank you once again.
Comment from Eternal Muse
I love this! You managed to do a lot with these 5 lines and deliver a unique, visuals filled Tanka. Absolutely love the image that goes with it.
I wish you luck with this entry.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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I love this! You managed to do a lot with these 5 lines and deliver a unique, visuals filled Tanka. Absolutely love the image that goes with it.
I wish you luck with this entry.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you, Yelena, for your review and wishing me luck in the contest. I went on a walk Saturday when I saw empty beer bottles in the kitchen window of a nearby condo. They captivated my imagination and I began to write and sketch on the spot because I thought it would be intrusive of me to photograph in someone's window. I continued writing and revising on my walk. When it became apparent that I had a poem, it was too late after sunset to change my mind and photograph the bottles. So I found a complimentary image on FanArtReview by Sierra Treasures. Thank you once again.
Comment from c_lucas
Beer bottles are definitely collectible, especially the older ones made with lead. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Beer bottles are definitely collectible, especially the older ones made with lead. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you, C_lucas, for your cheerful and encouraging review. I have an old bottle of Jim Crow Whiskey that belonged to my grandfather.
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You're welcome, SC. Charlie
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, this is really very clever wordplay - "amber rays of grain" - it makes the whole scene come to life, as well as casts an air of disapproval. I'm not quite sure if that's what you meant to do, but that's what I take away, and I love it. (Not that I am against all drinking at all, just that overindulgence in anything isn't healthy.)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Wow, this is really very clever wordplay - "amber rays of grain" - it makes the whole scene come to life, as well as casts an air of disapproval. I'm not quite sure if that's what you meant to do, but that's what I take away, and I love it. (Not that I am against all drinking at all, just that overindulgence in anything isn't healthy.)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you, Dawn, for your review and perspective of my poem. I went on a walk Saturday when I saw empty beer bottles in the kitchen window of a nearby condo. They captivated my imagination and I began to write on the spot. Once again, thanks.
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Always a pleasure, Andre.
Comment from Rebekah Lew
Hi, I liked your poem and the way you've published it. I don't see the connection between the New Testament quote and your poem. Good luck in the poetry competition, and thanks for sharing your writing, Rebekah Lew.
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reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Hi, I liked your poem and the way you've published it. I don't see the connection between the New Testament quote and your poem. Good luck in the poetry competition, and thanks for sharing your writing, Rebekah Lew.
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you, Rebekah, for your review and for wishing me luck in the competition. One sees through brown or green glass beer bottles darkly, and the homeowner displayed empties in a kitchen window as if they were religious relics, so I thought of that quote.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a striking poem by this talented writer, expressed in stylish and fluid articulation - lyric and smooth free verse - well constructed, smooth in movement and fully compliant with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest...
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In my opinion, a striking poem by this talented writer, expressed in stylish and fluid articulation - lyric and smooth free verse - well constructed, smooth in movement and fully compliant with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Thank you, evesayshi, for your complimentary review and for wishing me the best of luck in the competition.
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You're welcome indeed, Andre, my pleasure...Eve
Comment from MaryAnnie
The artwork accompanying this Tanka poem is so strong that it distracts me just a little bit...and makes me want to adjust the poem fit the picture. Standing alone - each are great!
Going back to these beer bottles: I like how you make them a little too sexy to throw away, wearing their afternoon and evening charms - glints and amber rays as you may describe them. They are minding their own business. Someone says they are garbage, but I'm happy someone noticed them when the light hit them just right.
Thanks for this opportunity to reflect ---literally. Literally!
MaryAnnie
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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The artwork accompanying this Tanka poem is so strong that it distracts me just a little bit...and makes me want to adjust the poem fit the picture. Standing alone - each are great!
Going back to these beer bottles: I like how you make them a little too sexy to throw away, wearing their afternoon and evening charms - glints and amber rays as you may describe them. They are minding their own business. Someone says they are garbage, but I'm happy someone noticed them when the light hit them just right.
Thanks for this opportunity to reflect ---literally. Literally!
MaryAnnie
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Yes, MaryAnnie, I am glad I noticed those beer bottles, too. I had passed them in a second floor kitchen window hundreds of times without noticing them until Saturday on my walk when I turned off my audio book and turned on Jonny Greenwood's "Phantom Threads" soundtrack. Now I noticed everything in my surrounding, and the bottles so captivated my imagination that I wrote and sketched on the spot so as not to intrude on the homeowners by photographing through their window.
I continued to write and revise during my four-and-a-half mile long walk. Once I realized I had a poem, I wanted to change my mind and rush back to photograph the bottles so I would have a picture for my post, but the sun was setting. By the time I passed them on the way back home, night had fallen. I am grateful that Sierra Treasures had a photograph I could use of bottles in a window.
Thank you for your reflective, six star review and the last six star review for my poem before the promotion expired. I appreciate all of the love and support that reviewers such as you have given my poem.
Comment from chcbeck
A great tanka poem, with great visual impact. The picture reminds me of my window after a party. A poem that makes an impact on many I'm sure. Thanks for sharing, .
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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A great tanka poem, with great visual impact. The picture reminds me of my window after a party. A poem that makes an impact on many I'm sure. Thanks for sharing, .
Comment Written 23-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2018
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Yes, chcbeck, my poem made an impact on many. Some recalled "decorating" their windows with beer bottles to catch the light, while others shared their challenges with alcoholism. Thank you for your review.
