Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This is a nice Senryu poem, pains affect howsoever one is indifferent to pains, man and his emotion well said and well done; Keep writing. DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018

Thanks for reading zanya

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written 5-7-5 senyru you have penned for the prompt. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the picture! Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018

Thanks for reading and criitique zanya

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

This is a Senryu rich in Theme and imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly fine.
Dr Ricky 1024.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018

Thanks for an interesting critique zanya