Impartial Mother Nature
She loves her offspring equally3 total reviews
Comment from Alec Gould
Very powerful my friend! Who says one must display many words to get their point across? 5-7-5, a very interesting poem. Well done! Have a great week my friend! ~Alec
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2018
Very powerful my friend! Who says one must display many words to get their point across? 5-7-5, a very interesting poem. Well done! Have a great week my friend! ~Alec
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2018
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Thanks, Alec. I hope it was food for thought.
Be happy!
Don (Ogden)
Comment from catch22
Interesting poem about the neutral nature of the universe. I agree wholeheartedly with the sentiment, and I like the use of internal rhyming in the last line. My only real criticism is it sounds a little preachy and accusatory to me, instead of being neutral or objective. There is a strong value judgement made against the reader here. This tone can be off putting.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
Interesting poem about the neutral nature of the universe. I agree wholeheartedly with the sentiment, and I like the use of internal rhyming in the last line. My only real criticism is it sounds a little preachy and accusatory to me, instead of being neutral or objective. There is a strong value judgement made against the reader here. This tone can be off putting.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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Yes. I agree. i was aware of that possible interpretation when I wrote it. As they say, 'the truth hurts.' I know it's a long-shot, but, t's an attempt to cause the reader to consider the labels or preconceptions she/he consciously or unconsciously attaches to other human beings.
Thanks for your well-intentioned heads-up, Catch22!
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the '5-7-5 Poem' writing prompt.
A good message, all too true.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
I think this is a good entry for the '5-7-5 Poem' writing prompt.
A good message, all too true.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 14-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2018
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Thank you, Sharon.