Miss you
Why did you have to leave me.15 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
There were a lot of good contenders in this contest, but I remember this one. Very poignant words that were beautifully illustrated with the artwork. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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There were a lot of good contenders in this contest, but I remember this one. Very poignant words that were beautifully illustrated with the artwork. Keep writing.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2018
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Tha k you so much5 for your kind words
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Mystery Writer. It's a little sad really that the kids left in the breakup are the ones who suffer. Your poetry expresses this quite clearly. Well done and Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Hi Mystery Writer. It's a little sad really that the kids left in the breakup are the ones who suffer. Your poetry expresses this quite clearly. Well done and Good luck. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Many thanks
Comment from Joy Graham
Dear Mystery Poet,
This little 1-6-1 contest entry sure touches my heart. My own dad has been gone for four years. The expression in the little girls face says it all for me. I miss my dad too.
Your syllables are all well-placed and your message resonates with me.
Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Dear Mystery Poet,
This little 1-6-1 contest entry sure touches my heart. My own dad has been gone for four years. The expression in the little girls face says it all for me. I miss my dad too.
Your syllables are all well-placed and your message resonates with me.
Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Thank you Joy. Much appreciated.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 1-6-1 Poem writing prompt.
A good message, sad, stated in so few words.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 1-6-1 Poem writing prompt.
A good message, sad, stated in so few words.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Many thanks Sharon. Much appreciated
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 1-6-1 poem about the sad little girl who misses her dad so very bad. In a few words a whole life story is told with great impact on the little girl's emotions.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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A very well-written 1-6-1 poem about the sad little girl who misses her dad so very bad. In a few words a whole life story is told with great impact on the little girl's emotions.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Many thanks.
Comment from HarryT
This is an excellent entry that expresses deep emotion in just a few words. Smooth flow and pace. It surly plays on one's emotion. Well chosen picture.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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This is an excellent entry that expresses deep emotion in just a few words. Smooth flow and pace. It surly plays on one's emotion. Well chosen picture.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Many thanks.
Comment from dragonpoet
This little girl looks so pensively sad. Her expression and these rhyming lines show the emotions of a child on the divorce and probably the death of a father.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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This little girl looks so pensively sad. Her expression and these rhyming lines show the emotions of a child on the divorce and probably the death of a father.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Many thanks.
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Don't mention it.
dragonpoet
Comment from Dean Kuch
Nice entry for the 1-6-1 Poetry contest, Anonymous Poet.
There are many here who don't care too much for rhyming in these shorter poetic forms.
I, however, feel that if it's done properly it doesn't detract from the poem in the slightest.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Nice entry for the 1-6-1 Poetry contest, Anonymous Poet.
There are many here who don't care too much for rhyming in these shorter poetic forms.
I, however, feel that if it's done properly it doesn't detract from the poem in the slightest.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Many thanks Dean. I appreciate your comments. I love rhyming.
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Me too, and you're welcome.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Good morning, Jen: I love theses kind of very brief poem, yet this one a 1-6-1, well chosen, strong words, sharing emotion that most of us could relate with. The photo is also very effective and I could look into this child eyes. Her eyes are saying just what your words do. This post is very nicely done.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Good morning, Jen: I love theses kind of very brief poem, yet this one a 1-6-1, well chosen, strong words, sharing emotion that most of us could relate with. The photo is also very effective and I could look into this child eyes. Her eyes are saying just what your words do. This post is very nicely done.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Thanks so much. I really appreciate your comments. Lovejen. X
Comment from zanya
Wow ..such deep sadness conveyed here through the medium and limitations of the 1-6-1 format ..leaving ample room for the reader to exercise his/her imagination as to the whys and wherefores of the absent dad ..powerful visual ..
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Wow ..such deep sadness conveyed here through the medium and limitations of the 1-6-1 format ..leaving ample room for the reader to exercise his/her imagination as to the whys and wherefores of the absent dad ..powerful visual ..
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Thanks Zaanya. Your kindcom e ts and super stars mean a lot to me.
