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Comment from Pearl Edwards
A wonderful, thoughtful journey of love and life. Great the way you've entwined this around Haley's Comet
he began his own journey - a journey of why - we still await his answer
loved that. 10 minutes well spent mike.
cheers,
valda
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A wonderful, thoughtful journey of love and life. Great the way you've entwined this around Haley's Comet
he began his own journey - a journey of why - we still await his answer
loved that. 10 minutes well spent mike.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 12-Jan-2018
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written ten minute free verse poem. You proof to be a deep thinker that can come up with great thoughts under pressure of a ten minute time frame.
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A very well-written ten minute free verse poem. You proof to be a deep thinker that can come up with great thoughts under pressure of a ten minute time frame.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a fantastic free writing stream of consciousness verse, Mav. The vivid imagery draws one in through the senses of cool stars, and wishes that a heart makes.
I haven't sat down for a ten minute spell yet of clear mind versing, but a fabulous idea to break open the dams and clear the cobwebs.
Exceptional for sure. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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This is a fantastic free writing stream of consciousness verse, Mav. The vivid imagery draws one in through the senses of cool stars, and wishes that a heart makes.
I haven't sat down for a ten minute spell yet of clear mind versing, but a fabulous idea to break open the dams and clear the cobwebs.
Exceptional for sure. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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I'm pleased you found this worthwhile. I totally enjoyed writing this and I DID write it in ten minutes without a thought in my head prior. Yeah, big surprise there. LOL But, it was very OG Potlatch style and I've missed the rush of those challenges in their original incarnations. I did a second one of these. I thought it would register twice in the club, but it just replaces the first one with the second one. Oh well, I'm having fun. I may do this all year. :)) Thanks a million for the encouragement.
Mav
Comment from damommy
Well done in only ten minutes. Great use of alliteration and imagery.
This was quite a challenge for me. Free verse is not my strong point, if I have one. lol. But I did enjoy doing it.
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Well done in only ten minutes. Great use of alliteration and imagery.
This was quite a challenge for me. Free verse is not my strong point, if I have one. lol. But I did enjoy doing it.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is really amazing and one would hardly dare to think it was done in the time allotted. You use too many poetic tools in this to call out but I have to say that "tears turn to ice in the void of space" moved me tremendously as it reads aloud wonderfully and parallels life in that sometimes even in the most crowded places there is still and emptiness - a space which can harden emotions if one continues to isolate themselves. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
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This is really amazing and one would hardly dare to think it was done in the time allotted. You use too many poetic tools in this to call out but I have to say that "tears turn to ice in the void of space" moved me tremendously as it reads aloud wonderfully and parallels life in that sometimes even in the most crowded places there is still and emptiness - a space which can harden emotions if one continues to isolate themselves. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a riding club challenge Richard seem as well as imagery it flowed well read well no grammar is she so to speak this is a PIX Club challenge with great content of objective as well as objective it lined up perfectly with descriptive measures good luck in the challenge dr. Ricky 1024
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This is a riding club challenge Richard seem as well as imagery it flowed well read well no grammar is she so to speak this is a PIX Club challenge with great content of objective as well as objective it lined up perfectly with descriptive measures good luck in the challenge dr. Ricky 1024
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from dragonpoet
How sad this myth of how Haley's Comet was born. Lonely centuries of searching for a lost love. How the melt from the comet is tears that create the babbling brook in the story.
Keep writing
Joan
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How sad this myth of how Haley's Comet was born. Lonely centuries of searching for a lost love. How the melt from the comet is tears that create the babbling brook in the story.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from c_lucas
The best poems just happen without any guidelines. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
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The best poems just happen without any guidelines. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
Comment from Cal Amborn
Great poem! Very cool to use the Haley comet as a metaphor to love. Maybe I'm not understanding it perfectly (poetry isn't up my alley) but the part about the babbling brook confused me. I didn't understand how this connected to the comet and it's love of Earth.
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Great poem! Very cool to use the Haley comet as a metaphor to love. Maybe I'm not understanding it perfectly (poetry isn't up my alley) but the part about the babbling brook confused me. I didn't understand how this connected to the comet and it's love of Earth.
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Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
Comment from nordicgirl
Well, this sounds just like you, so this must be the way you normally write, I'm guessing. Gee, those tears freezing are the coolest thing, Michael. I'll never see stars the same way again. You at your best. NG
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Well, this sounds just like you, so this must be the way you normally write, I'm guessing. Gee, those tears freezing are the coolest thing, Michael. I'll never see stars the same way again. You at your best. NG
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018