The West
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The West"One man's journey west.
27 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I like the way you educate us on wagon trains, and about the Oregon Trail. We've all heard about it, but not in detail. You made it interesting, and worked it into your story about Sarah and her family heading west.
Sounds a bit scary with your description of the way life would be like along the trail. Hmmm, rather dirty. I guess people made sacrifices, though.
Again, great story,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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I like the way you educate us on wagon trains, and about the Oregon Trail. We've all heard about it, but not in detail. You made it interesting, and worked it into your story about Sarah and her family heading west.
Sounds a bit scary with your description of the way life would be like along the trail. Hmmm, rather dirty. I guess people made sacrifices, though.
Again, great story,
Rhonda
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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It was not an easy journey.
Comment from Asem.inspirations
Hello there, Thomas: This feels like a new introduction into the story. I must have skipped iver this somehow because I was already at the point where Sarah and her new friend decided to be together. Anyway, this is a good part also, very detailed and well writte. I'll back track to see if I missed anything.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Hello there, Thomas: This feels like a new introduction into the story. I must have skipped iver this somehow because I was already at the point where Sarah and her new friend decided to be together. Anyway, this is a good part also, very detailed and well writte. I'll back track to see if I missed anything.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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You're reading out of order. Robyn Corum Always reads that way.
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Okay I will have to go back then.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Good descriptions from the wagon master of what they will have to endure on the trip ahead and also of the sounds of the wagon wheels and the crickets. You really put that noise into the readers head.
Enjoyed the opening two chapters Thomas.
cheers
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Good descriptions from the wagon master of what they will have to endure on the trip ahead and also of the sounds of the wagon wheels and the crickets. You really put that noise into the readers head.
Enjoyed the opening two chapters Thomas.
cheers
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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I can still hear them squeaking.
Comment from write hand blue
Good descriptions that put you at the scene of the story. The reader can easily imagine the hardships of the wagon train trailing all the way to Oregon.
Great atmosphere as we learn about the squeaking wheels. Sounds as if they need a liberal greasing with lard. LOL.
I think I will read more of this tale.
~Mel~
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2018
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Good descriptions that put you at the scene of the story. The reader can easily imagine the hardships of the wagon train trailing all the way to Oregon.
Great atmosphere as we learn about the squeaking wheels. Sounds as if they need a liberal greasing with lard. LOL.
I think I will read more of this tale.
~Mel~
Comment Written 05-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2018
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I hope you stay with it. Things are about to heat up.
Comment from robyn corum
Thomas,
Welll....it's started. You're really doing it. You'ere actually going to begin torturing these good people to no end for a very long time. You should be ashamed of yourself. But somehow, I have a feeling you're probably feeling something different - like pride, or something odd like that. Oh...my. You odd duck.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
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Thomas,
Welll....it's started. You're really doing it. You'ere actually going to begin torturing these good people to no end for a very long time. You should be ashamed of yourself. But somehow, I have a feeling you're probably feeling something different - like pride, or something odd like that. Oh...my. You odd duck.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
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That's right. Sit back and take it. You know you want it. Are we still talking about the novel?
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Sarah is so impatient but what a great character! She needs the stable hand of her father. I don't think any of them have a real concept of the journey or how long it will actually take. Super writing Thomas. xx deborah
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
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Sarah is so impatient but what a great character! She needs the stable hand of her father. I don't think any of them have a real concept of the journey or how long it will actually take. Super writing Thomas. xx deborah
Comment Written 04-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
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Thanks. You're right. It's going to require more than they know.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
A great cultural fiction read, it's rich ingredients, the beginning is catchy, there is a good flow of thoughts with steady plot development, realistic dialogues and vociferous taletelling, good referral, wishful ending. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
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A great cultural fiction read, it's rich ingredients, the beginning is catchy, there is a good flow of thoughts with steady plot development, realistic dialogues and vociferous taletelling, good referral, wishful ending. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
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Thanks for the comments.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Thomas
Excellent continuation. Enjoyed the read. Out of sixes. The research was spot on.
Liked the analogy regarding the salamander, toad muskrat and jackass. I never realized that some trains never saw native Americans --- I would thought just the opposite.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
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Good morning, Thomas
Excellent continuation. Enjoyed the read. Out of sixes. The research was spot on.
Liked the analogy regarding the salamander, toad muskrat and jackass. I never realized that some trains never saw native Americans --- I would thought just the opposite.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 04-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2018
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Maybe they will be lucky, but Sarah wants to see the Indians for herself.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Ten miles a day, Thomas. Woo Hoo! I could be in the next town west of me in 2 days or in the next one east of me in 1 day.
I like your use of descriptions with the wagon wheels, the crickets, & Herb Jenkins. I guess he was the 'squeaky wheel that got the grease, right"
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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Ten miles a day, Thomas. Woo Hoo! I could be in the next town west of me in 2 days or in the next one east of me in 1 day.
I like your use of descriptions with the wagon wheels, the crickets, & Herb Jenkins. I guess he was the 'squeaky wheel that got the grease, right"
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 03-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment.
Comment from Brigitte Elko
Reading this was a guided ride and an informative pilot to wagon train travel. It was enjoyable to read and the characters plausible. This reader is anxious to find out what the " Perils of Sarah" will be. Thank you for sharing, not a flaw to be found in the writing.
Blessings,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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Reading this was a guided ride and an informative pilot to wagon train travel. It was enjoyable to read and the characters plausible. This reader is anxious to find out what the " Perils of Sarah" will be. Thank you for sharing, not a flaw to be found in the writing.
Blessings,
Brigitte
Comment Written 03-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2018
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Sarah's trials are coming. Thanks for reading.
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My pleasure.
Brigitte
