Chasing Home...
4 Line Poem Entry15 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
The imagery in this is wonderful. The scuffed loafers tell a story. It's kind of the return of the prodigal, and he has regrets--maybe for being away from the family. There's a story in these four lines. Great work, and congratulations on your contest entry. Best of writing to you in 2018. judi
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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The imagery in this is wonderful. The scuffed loafers tell a story. It's kind of the return of the prodigal, and he has regrets--maybe for being away from the family. There's a story in these four lines. Great work, and congratulations on your contest entry. Best of writing to you in 2018. judi
Comment Written 26-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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That's so kind. Thank you! I really appreciate it Judi. Miss you! And a SIX! Thank you! Really, that's so cool of you.
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You're very welcome, Gregory, and all the best to you in the New Year. judi
Comment from l.raven
HI Cody, so good to see your name pop up in my pm...I have been off and on the last couple months myself...so very well written my sweet friend...I can see why you won...CONGRATULATIONS...this hall looks like it holds so many secrets...and I bit many a loafer has paced these floors...I love your poem you...and the picture....perfect....love Linda xxoo
it is so good to see you my friend...I hope your family is doing well...I bit that baby is growing up...I hope you and your family Have A Merry Christmas and A Happy New Year...xxoo
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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HI Cody, so good to see your name pop up in my pm...I have been off and on the last couple months myself...so very well written my sweet friend...I can see why you won...CONGRATULATIONS...this hall looks like it holds so many secrets...and I bit many a loafer has paced these floors...I love your poem you...and the picture....perfect....love Linda xxoo
it is so good to see you my friend...I hope your family is doing well...I bit that baby is growing up...I hope you and your family Have A Merry Christmas and A Happy New Year...xxoo
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Hi Linda thank you! I'm so honored you liked it. Yes he's growing up. And we have a two month old now! Miss you!
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OMG...two months...back to the diapers and late nights...CONGRATULATIONS to you and you wife...you must have liked the last one so much...you thought you'd do it again...LOL...sounds wonderful...and you are always so welcome...Miss you too...love xxoo
Comment from MissMerri
This was a wonderful choice, in my opinion, to receive the blue ribbon. Every word is weighted with meaning and nothing here is unnecessary. I'm very impressed. It is not easy to say so much with so few words. I can feel the emotion and see the scene. Truly well done. Glad to see you here! You've been missing awhile. MM
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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This was a wonderful choice, in my opinion, to receive the blue ribbon. Every word is weighted with meaning and nothing here is unnecessary. I'm very impressed. It is not easy to say so much with so few words. I can feel the emotion and see the scene. Truly well done. Glad to see you here! You've been missing awhile. MM
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Thank you! I'm honored. I've missed you guys. Really, thank you, it means a lot. And a SIX! Thank you!
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 25-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Thank you!
Comment from June Sargent
I just posted a poem about Van Gogh's struggle with bipolar depression. It is a devastating disease for all touched by it. This poem summarizes the effects of it on a household. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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I just posted a poem about Van Gogh's struggle with bipolar depression. It is a devastating disease for all touched by it. This poem summarizes the effects of it on a household. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 20-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Thank you so so much!
Comment from Pantygynt
Hi Greg, long time no see. Welcome back for Christmas with a great little four liner that makes every word count with importance of meaning. Each word tells its own pat of the story. Scuffed, heavy, unlit, behind and silent are all more than their simple dictionary meanings. Each one of these adjectives tells part of the back story to this. The nouns too loafers not boots, home means so much to most people and remorse has weighty implications.
This is a great piece of economical poetry. I would love to see it run out the winner.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Hi Greg, long time no see. Welcome back for Christmas with a great little four liner that makes every word count with importance of meaning. Each word tells its own pat of the story. Scuffed, heavy, unlit, behind and silent are all more than their simple dictionary meanings. Each one of these adjectives tells part of the back story to this. The nouns too loafers not boots, home means so much to most people and remorse has weighty implications.
This is a great piece of economical poetry. I would love to see it run out the winner.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Hi! I know, haha I've been busy with the little ones but I wanted to pop back in. And truly thank you for reading into this. You got it. Seriously I'm honored.
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I thought it was brilliantly done. Best of luck with it.
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You are more than welcome
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hello, Gregory Cody. Welcome back!
This is an excellent entry for the 4 line contest. It is a somber write that is very well executed. Great use of personification. I especially like your use of the word "unlit" which can signify the physical home space (no lights on) as well as the emotional space (not happy). Syllable count for each line is spot on.
Best wishes for the contest, as well as a very Merry Christmas to you and yours. ~~ Connie
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Hello, Gregory Cody. Welcome back!
This is an excellent entry for the 4 line contest. It is a somber write that is very well executed. Great use of personification. I especially like your use of the word "unlit" which can signify the physical home space (no lights on) as well as the emotional space (not happy). Syllable count for each line is spot on.
Best wishes for the contest, as well as a very Merry Christmas to you and yours. ~~ Connie
Comment Written 19-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Thank you and have a very MERRY Christmas! Truly. I am honored you welcome me back ;) it's good! I've been busy with the little ones but I miss you guys
Comment from visionary1234
I can hear the whispers ... and see the gold flecks if dust drifting slowly in the air, caught by sunlight! Then your personification of remorse ... all that is left in this place ... continue the resounding whispers. Well done! An eloquent 4 lines where you've made every syllable count!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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I can hear the whispers ... and see the gold flecks if dust drifting slowly in the air, caught by sunlight! Then your personification of remorse ... all that is left in this place ... continue the resounding whispers. Well done! An eloquent 4 lines where you've made every syllable count!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Well thank you! I really appreciate it of course
Comment from Neonewman
Powerful entry you have delivered for this particular writing prompt my friend. Love the artwork you have chosen, gives it an eerie feel which I love.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Powerful entry you have delivered for this particular writing prompt my friend. Love the artwork you have chosen, gives it an eerie feel which I love.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 19-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Thank you so so much! I'm so happy you looked into it ;)
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My pleasure Gregory.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 'Four Line Poetry' writing prompt.
The picture matches your poem perfectly.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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I think this is a good entry for the 'Four Line Poetry' writing prompt.
The picture matches your poem perfectly.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 19-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2017
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Thank you so so much! Truly