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Viewing comments for Chapter 225 "Aardvark World 10"Animal poetry and short stories
23 total reviews
Comment from Sis Cat
Ha, Bill! This is a fine, ingenious story about how the animals on earth came to be. Your fable of talking, time traveling and space traveling animals reminded me of Orwell's Animal Farm, only lighter and funnier.
My favorite character was Bear because I did not know what he was saying half of the time but I intuited by context:
Bear: Eh woll bay gooink ass woll.
Ha! Your story made me wake up and smile. It provided delight, like a Saturday morning cartoon or a Kipling "Just So Story" of the twenty-first century.
Thank you for sharing your finely wrought characters, plot, and dialogue. They entertained me.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Ha, Bill! This is a fine, ingenious story about how the animals on earth came to be. Your fable of talking, time traveling and space traveling animals reminded me of Orwell's Animal Farm, only lighter and funnier.
My favorite character was Bear because I did not know what he was saying half of the time but I intuited by context:
Bear: Eh woll bay gooink ass woll.
Ha! Your story made me wake up and smile. It provided delight, like a Saturday morning cartoon or a Kipling "Just So Story" of the twenty-first century.
Thank you for sharing your finely wrought characters, plot, and dialogue. They entertained me.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Wow! This is some review and I am, of course, delighted that you were entertained.
Comment from brenda faye curtis
Interesting. I'm guessing the memory wipe was to aid in acclimation to the new life. Not as amusing as previous scenes, but it makes sense to end it this way.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Interesting. I'm guessing the memory wipe was to aid in acclimation to the new life. Not as amusing as previous scenes, but it makes sense to end it this way.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Brenda
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You're welcome.
Comment from apky
These characters of yours just wrap me around their little fingers, each one in their own peculiar way. Rhey're all so well delineated in the kind of dialogue I find irresisbtble.
There's also this humanness in them - their goals and dreams, they actions and reactions, how they interract.
What not to love? A definite six.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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These characters of yours just wrap me around their little fingers, each one in their own peculiar way. Rhey're all so well delineated in the kind of dialogue I find irresisbtble.
There's also this humanness in them - their goals and dreams, they actions and reactions, how they interract.
What not to love? A definite six.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2017
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Oh my! This was a terrific review and totally unexpected. Thank you for the kind words.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Bill
Wow - what a great piece of science fiction. I am at a loss when it comes to making up new and different worlds; I have a tough enough time understanding this one!
Great job. Thank you for sharing - I didn't see any nits or SPAG,
~patty~
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Hi, Bill
Wow - what a great piece of science fiction. I am at a loss when it comes to making up new and different worlds; I have a tough enough time understanding this one!
Great job. Thank you for sharing - I didn't see any nits or SPAG,
~patty~
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Patty
Comment from Ogden
A very interestIng and confusing read. Especially that bear. He seems to have a speech impediment. Now, the Plutonian speaks very understandable English. Maybe she or her compatriots have spent some time on Earth?
I'm a latecomer to this saga. It appears to be an unusual take on an action space thriller, with a very interesting cast of characters.
I think you have put some of them in a dicey situation to end the scene.
DOn (Ogden)
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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A very interestIng and confusing read. Especially that bear. He seems to have a speech impediment. Now, the Plutonian speaks very understandable English. Maybe she or her compatriots have spent some time on Earth?
I'm a latecomer to this saga. It appears to be an unusual take on an action space thriller, with a very interesting cast of characters.
I think you have put some of them in a dicey situation to end the scene.
DOn (Ogden)
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Ogden. The Plutonian spent four scenes slurring and lisping.
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! Well, that was a very creative ending! I'm still not sure about the meaning of "skizzle" but I like saying it. Boy, that Plutonian had me fooled, as he kept salivating at the thought of eating bugs earlier...
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Lol! Well, that was a very creative ending! I'm still not sure about the meaning of "skizzle" but I like saying it. Boy, that Plutonian had me fooled, as he kept salivating at the thought of eating bugs earlier...
Comment Written 29-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Helen
Comment from MSJVClarke
That was quite a scene. It ending as one might expect and it was quite an imagination but I was able to envision your characters as you described them. Well done!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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That was quite a scene. It ending as one might expect and it was quite an imagination but I was able to envision your characters as you described them. Well done!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Thanks, MS
Comment from pbomar1115
Bill, you have no problem presenting the problem. But, I had a little problem with keeping up with the characters and their real identity. If you introduce your characters slower, like two at a time, giving the reader time to know them, the story would come off much better for the reader. I think its a great story.
Phillip
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Bill, you have no problem presenting the problem. But, I had a little problem with keeping up with the characters and their real identity. If you introduce your characters slower, like two at a time, giving the reader time to know them, the story would come off much better for the reader. I think its a great story.
Phillip
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Thanks for giving this a look, Phillip. I agree with your point.
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You're welcome, Bill.
Phillip
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Bill,
What imagination you have about the the future just to think that human DNA will change again from life in the water are you saying (without) minus any human attributes.
Gert
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Hello Bill,
What imagination you have about the the future just to think that human DNA will change again from life in the water are you saying (without) minus any human attributes.
Gert
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Gert
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You are welcome Bill
Gert
Comment from c_lucas
An unusual story line that tested you creative talents. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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An unusual story line that tested you creative talents. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2017
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Thanks, Charlie