Comment from brenda faye curtis

Excellent

The story gets cuter and funnier as it goes, Bill. Are you considering forming this into a children's book? If so, I think you'd do well there.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017

Thanks, Brenda

reply by brenda faye curtis on 13-Dec-2017

You're welcome, my friend. Have a blessed holiday!

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

Hi Bill Aardvark World mine was well written rich and seem as well as imagery it flowed well read well with no grammar issues adjective content was in place objects account increase the adjective content descriptive measures aligned perfectly thanks for this talk to Ricky 1024

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2017

Thanks, Ricky, for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from apky

Excellent

Uh-oh. The plot thickens, I think is what this is called.
So dear Aadvark is actually already a true-blue Plutonian.
I wonder why all these revelations started up, come to think of it.
I feel a little out of my depths here.
Let me read once again...

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017

When you figure it out, let me know.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thank you for your synopsis of the previous scene. I admired your creative impulse to continue to have your characters speak in their dialects. The idea of lions being "likely candidates" is intriguing as well. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017

Thanks, Joan.

Comment from pbomar1115

Exceptional

Although the crew has an important mission with a time limit, they appear to be composed about it. The joke with each other as if they have everything under control.


Phillip

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Dec-2017

They seem to trust me. Mistake?

reply by pbomar1115 on 12-Dec-2017

No. Not a mistake. Just a review. Everyone has a perspective, but no one sees what you see.

Phillip

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

When Aardvark speaks, why am I immediately reminded of the ferret of Budweiser commercial fame, Bill?
As for Commander Bear, I can barely understand what he's trying to say.
Regardless of that, the USS Moreau's plan to get the group to Planet 9 seems to have a bit of trouble getting underway.
I ain't lyin' when I say this. I'm sure they'll get the bugs worked out real soon.
Good stuff as usual.
Very...unique...

~Dean

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017

The problem with dialects is that sometime there's no good way to get the reader to hear the word that is intended. I should probably abandon Commandee Bear's Russian accent. I can't resist Aardvark though, with that big tongue.

reply by Dean Kuch on 11-Dec-2017

Yes, it's tough and often creates a unique dilemma, Bill.
What I have been able to decipher is funny as hell, LOL.
Keep 'em comin'.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hahahaha, Bill, I love it. You are really very good at making up all those different words. At times I have difficulty following, but I read it again, and then I get it. Very clever. All the best. Ulla:))

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017

Thanks, Ulla

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Yikes and gadzooks. We have been invaded by the veritable enemy. Worse yet, the buggers is smiling, that can not be good. I fully expect all hell to break loose at any moment now. You are becoming expert at springing unexpected surprises, which I guess is the very nature of surprises, being unexpected.

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017

I guess that calls for a shocker ending.

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

Another good one. Still funny.
Love the metal Aardvark picture.
Thank you for sharing this funny tales with us. Looking forward to more.
Sharon

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017

Thanks, Sharon, for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Bill,

I got a good laugh from this script. The dialect, alone, is just hilarious. You are so good at dialects and imitations. Are you a hidden stand up comedian?

I look forward to the next scene.

Thank you for sharing. Have a great week.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2017

Thanks, PF. Here's some stand up:
My wife can't cook. At my house we don't hear 'Come and get it!' It's 'Try and eat it!'
We pray AFTER we eat.
------Rodney Dangerfield

reply by Poetic Friend on 11-Dec-2017

lol. Okay, so you are a comedian?