Ghosts
Dedicated to all soldiers messed up from all wars. Isalud!63 total reviews
Comment from Nina Sexton
There is not one vet who would feel you did not honor their brave and broken souls. Your talent shines naturally and is evident because you make the reader feel as you pull them in each and every time. Such great work!
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There is not one vet who would feel you did not honor their brave and broken souls. Your talent shines naturally and is evident because you make the reader feel as you pull them in each and every time. Such great work!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
Comment from JT traveller
You've certainly seen a lot in your life. I thank you for your service. It could not have been easy. A high-brow read that has layer upon layer of deeper meaning. Thank you. Another wonderful share. Jacqueline.
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You've certainly seen a lot in your life. I thank you for your service. It could not have been easy. A high-brow read that has layer upon layer of deeper meaning. Thank you. Another wonderful share. Jacqueline.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
Comment from Poppycat
Oh my gosh this brought me to tears. If I could give this 10 stars, I would. So beautiful. The metaphors you used made so much sense and the rhyme scheme for the flow of the poem well.Great job!
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Oh my gosh this brought me to tears. If I could give this 10 stars, I would. So beautiful. The metaphors you used made so much sense and the rhyme scheme for the flow of the poem well.Great job!
Comment Written 27-Jul-2023
Comment from Lola G
This piece was very moving for me as my dad and husband are veterans and I am a gold-star sister. My brother died in Viet Nam. This poem was beautiful in the awful descriptions of the images that our beloved service men and women come home with. I was surprised how the last two stanzas repeated from the beginning read differently to me somehow. I am not familiar with writing or reading poetry, but this poem is still speaking to me. It will stay with me for a long time. For that I am grateful for reading it. The only slight suggestion was in the line "shell stripped of gears" I would replace with the word "cog". That's what I think of sending people off to war...gears and cogs. My apologies if "shell" is a reference to a gun shell or other inside term.
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This piece was very moving for me as my dad and husband are veterans and I am a gold-star sister. My brother died in Viet Nam. This poem was beautiful in the awful descriptions of the images that our beloved service men and women come home with. I was surprised how the last two stanzas repeated from the beginning read differently to me somehow. I am not familiar with writing or reading poetry, but this poem is still speaking to me. It will stay with me for a long time. For that I am grateful for reading it. The only slight suggestion was in the line "shell stripped of gears" I would replace with the word "cog". That's what I think of sending people off to war...gears and cogs. My apologies if "shell" is a reference to a gun shell or other inside term.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A brilliant poem about the aftereffects of war, my friend. I'm of the generation where the Viet Nam war was a reality that haunted us all. While I was reading your poem, I was thinking of a dear friend of mine who had been the only person to survive an ambush from his platoon. The stories he'd tell and the feelings he had sound so very like your poem. I'm sure what you wrote will be a comfort to those who would like to be able to articulate what you have.
Take care,
Rhonda
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A brilliant poem about the aftereffects of war, my friend. I'm of the generation where the Viet Nam war was a reality that haunted us all. While I was reading your poem, I was thinking of a dear friend of mine who had been the only person to survive an ambush from his platoon. The stories he'd tell and the feelings he had sound so very like your poem. I'm sure what you wrote will be a comfort to those who would like to be able to articulate what you have.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
Comment from royowen
Mere boys went to those fields of futility, and some came back a broken backed men, wondering why the went their, I believe they were duped by misshapen expectations of two country's trying to reshape a culture, but failed as we inevitably will, beautifully written blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2023
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Mere boys went to those fields of futility, and some came back a broken backed men, wondering why the went their, I believe they were duped by misshapen expectations of two country's trying to reshape a culture, but failed as we inevitably will, beautifully written blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2023
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"...of two country's trying to reshape a culture, but failed..." Insight, is a gift of knowledge meeting 'courage' to stray away from predetermined mind warp. Great review poet. easy
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Well done
Comment from Wendy G
This is a quite incredible poem, with a powerful theme and meaningful words. I can't even select a favourite bit, the whole poem moves me, each stanza developing your thoughts well. PTSD is now understood a little better, but for all who served in Viet Nam that understanding, for the most part has come too late. We had the same situation with our soldiers returning from Viet Nam, and other war zones. The damage done is irreparable.
Wendy
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This is a quite incredible poem, with a powerful theme and meaningful words. I can't even select a favourite bit, the whole poem moves me, each stanza developing your thoughts well. PTSD is now understood a little better, but for all who served in Viet Nam that understanding, for the most part has come too late. We had the same situation with our soldiers returning from Viet Nam, and other war zones. The damage done is irreparable.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
Comment from kiwisteveh
It's hard to overstate the long term impact of that deadly war on the populations of all the countries who fought there. Your beautifully written poem highlights the psychological effect or PTSD which many returned veterans suffer from including those here in NZ.
I pondered the logic behind your placement of the two couplets, but couldn't work it out. Apart from that, nothing to quibble about here. You do a great job of evoking the nightmarish qualities of the war and their haunting effect on the survivors.
Steve
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It's hard to overstate the long term impact of that deadly war on the populations of all the countries who fought there. Your beautifully written poem highlights the psychological effect or PTSD which many returned veterans suffer from including those here in NZ.
I pondered the logic behind your placement of the two couplets, but couldn't work it out. Apart from that, nothing to quibble about here. You do a great job of evoking the nightmarish qualities of the war and their haunting effect on the survivors.
Steve
Comment Written 26-Jul-2023
Comment from Aussie
A man at war with his demons; PTSD has caught him up, and he will never be the same man that left his family to go to war. War gives nothing and takes everything away from soldiers fighting in foreign lands. Well done. K xx
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A man at war with his demons; PTSD has caught him up, and he will never be the same man that left his family to go to war. War gives nothing and takes everything away from soldiers fighting in foreign lands. Well done. K xx
Comment Written 25-Jul-2023
Comment from Kaiku
I never served but had a brother who was a 'Nam' vet. Never spoke much of his experiences, and tragic they were. I am sure the ghosts that haunt him today are similar to those tour write of.
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I never served but had a brother who was a 'Nam' vet. Never spoke much of his experiences, and tragic they were. I am sure the ghosts that haunt him today are similar to those tour write of.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2023
