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Comment from johnwilson
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Indeed! You showed me how it's done--this poem gave me the shivers. Hearing from the whales POV was unique and gave me a new prospective. It's been so long since I read the book in high school! My favorite part, other than the entire piece, is
"Who is this Ahab, this so-called and would-be captain? Master of floating sticks and
fluttering linens" (Ha Ha--them is fighting words!) I'm so lucky to be among such talented poets. I look forward to learning from this club!

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2017

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
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I haven't read the book, Moby Dick, but it's very recognisable from your poem and the illustration. The look in that whale's eye always scares the living daylights out of me. Giddy

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2017

Comment from frierajac
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'Leviathan' was the sea monster defeated by Yahweh in the Old Testament. I imagine
that I would have thought in the subliminal stream of consciousness that I perceive
in your poem, when I read it awhile ago living on the beach in Oregon.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2017

Comment from Leineco
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Love it!. . . .a fair and balanced pairing! Let's face it, for far
too long we have heard only one side of the story...never
considering the perceptions and biases of the antagonist!!! :-)

I was totally taken by the phrasing:

Who is this Ahab
this so-called and would-be
captain

master
of floating sticks
and fluttering linens?


as contrast to the preceding "behemoth". I also enjoyed
the conflict between "serenity of the deep" and the seemingly
inherent "leaning to violence" thread that runs through this.

Well done M :-)




 Comment Written 29-Nov-2017

Comment from Gloria ....
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The awesome artwork definitely captures the scary intensity of fishing back in the olden days. My word, one swish of the tail and they'd be sent into the middle of next week.

Excellent idea to BE Moby Dick, rather than the Captain of the Pequod. Whoa and this fantastic free verse is filled with power and pique. Yes, how tedious it must be to have men in floating sticks and fluttering linens, (a most unique way to illustrate sails) come to disturb the vast serenity of the ocean.

This is terrific, Mav. I've been thinking about my poem too, but then you know it takes me a long time to finally settle on something. Many thanks for writing this excellent flagship.

Superb!

Ange

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2017

Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Once again, I am impressed with your writing. Your talent is brightly shining through. I had to read it three times so I could fully get all the enjoyment from it. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2017

Comment from LIJ Red
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Call me Fishmail. I always kinda rooted for the whale. And the harpoon bouncing off the Bird Of Prey was Kirks high moment. A free verse replay of Melville, who never got too prolix for me. Excellent.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2017

Comment from Nichola
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Outstanding. I really like this one a lot! This makes me want to read Moby Dick again! What a good idea this is, to reference literature in a poetic piece. My favorite line is "fear does not find quarter." Your words are concise and strong. They attack the mind thoughtfully.

Nichola

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2017

Comment from catch22
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Hi Mikey, I like this poem a lot. Moby Dick used to be a favorite story of mine from when I was a girl. I like that you embody the natural forces of the world in the POV of the whale as it addresses a modern-day Prometheus (Ahab). I thought the language was well suited to the gravity and style of Melville's writing. Excellent poem.

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2017

Comment from BOO ghost
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This is a whale of an idea and tale, and I like the theme big time. guess mammals have big brains. Exceptional looking presentation. Like your sea-blue tone that is fitting for a mariner's tale. Time to batten down the hatches and get to reading. o'er the grand waters
I'm known and have shown
kindness and regard
for my fellows
and neighbors. Yep, like a battering ram. I do not waver
to put fluke or spout
to any aid
and offer harm not
where harm is not due. Pay back them whalers for killing whales. See if they like it when the prey becomes the predator. is all good when they harpoon Shamoo.

indeed, though I am
a behemoth.Repeating words... like the word behemoth. Describes Moby Dick well. This is a seafarer's tale. Nice blend of imaginative words. A masterpiece in BOO's dimwitted mind. BOO-tastic! You get six harpoons for your efforts!

 Comment Written 28-Nov-2017