Blackout
Tragedy only requires a split second.7 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your emotional poem and its dramatic title plus presentation. You made the reader experience the horror of the scene, and your final line is memorable with its image of the "perforated seam of sobriety". Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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I admired your emotional poem and its dramatic title plus presentation. You made the reader experience the horror of the scene, and your final line is memorable with its image of the "perforated seam of sobriety". Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 08-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2017
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Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's often said for a reason. "Never drink and drive."
Nothing good ever comes from it. Sure, you might get away with it once, twice, or even a hundred times. But eventually, it's going to catch up with you. And when it does, it's not going to be good.
Good entry for the Emotions Poetry contest, Anonymous Poet.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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It's often said for a reason. "Never drink and drive."
Nothing good ever comes from it. Sure, you might get away with it once, twice, or even a hundred times. But eventually, it's going to catch up with you. And when it does, it's not going to be good.
Good entry for the Emotions Poetry contest, Anonymous Poet.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Thanks for reviewing.
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Anytime...
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
A good -but horrible--entry for the contest. The scene you paint is tragic and sad.
One q: should 'confusion' has that 's'? Suggest either:
--> confusion paints. (Or)
--> confusions paint
Thank you!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Dear Mystery Writer,
A good -but horrible--entry for the contest. The scene you paint is tragic and sad.
One q: should 'confusion' has that 's'? Suggest either:
--> confusion paints. (Or)
--> confusions paint
Thank you!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Thanks for the keen eye. I missed that.
Comment from Liberty Justice
WOW OK, I've lost, so no need for me to enter! "Seeping urine" you describe horrible accident might have been induced by alcohol. Crimson colored blood is vividly told verses that flow down the page with tragedy and horror. Good luck in contest. You got my thumbs up. truly, liberty justice
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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WOW OK, I've lost, so no need for me to enter! "Seeping urine" you describe horrible accident might have been induced by alcohol. Crimson colored blood is vividly told verses that flow down the page with tragedy and horror. Good luck in contest. You got my thumbs up. truly, liberty justice
Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Thanks for the awesome review.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. We enjoy life in many ways, sometimes we endulge too much and when we go home in a state of too much. We may blackout forca moment and meet the end of our lives in a second.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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A very well-written poem. We enjoy life in many ways, sometimes we endulge too much and when we go home in a state of too much. We may blackout forca moment and meet the end of our lives in a second.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Rasmine
Hello,
Thank you, for selecting my artwork. I'm honored.
Your poem is full of images and emotions. I wish you luck in the contest -- I hope you do well. Hope it doesn't have meaning close to your life.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Hello,
Thank you, for selecting my artwork. I'm honored.
Your poem is full of images and emotions. I wish you luck in the contest -- I hope you do well. Hope it doesn't have meaning close to your life.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Thank you for use of your art. 30. Year member of AA, so I am well aware of these tragedys.
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Yeah. My mother died of alcoholism. My brother had lost his license due to drunk driving. No tragedies, but I hear you.
Comment from Cybertron1986
This certainly accomplished everything that an emotional piece was set to accomplish. Me, as the reader, became immensely attached with the multitude of vivid imagery pertaining to both fear and pain. For example, the use of "soaked with urine" was powerful, and supplemented the ending of "sobriety" appropriately. Well done
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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This certainly accomplished everything that an emotional piece was set to accomplish. Me, as the reader, became immensely attached with the multitude of vivid imagery pertaining to both fear and pain. For example, the use of "soaked with urine" was powerful, and supplemented the ending of "sobriety" appropriately. Well done
Comment Written 25-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2017
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Thank you for the great review.
