Tribute on the Gridiron
100-word contest entry10 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is very nicely composed. Your story is interesting, gives a sense of sacrifice, selflessness and honor for Veterans Day. Much luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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This is very nicely composed. Your story is interesting, gives a sense of sacrifice, selflessness and honor for Veterans Day. Much luck in the contest with this fine entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for reading and praising my short-short, Marilyn. I was truly surprised I could tell this story in only 100 words. Usually I struggle to write one less than 500. Rod
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written hundred word flash fiction with a great story that turned out sad. But when we served well we will.always be honored no matter how much the circumstances changed.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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A very well-written hundred word flash fiction with a great story that turned out sad. But when we served well we will.always be honored no matter how much the circumstances changed.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much for sharing "Tribute," Sandra, and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A very good entry into the contest, and a wonderful tribute to our Veterans. I'm so glad you took the time to write this story. It is well-written and touching.
Thanks for the share,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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A very good entry into the contest, and a wonderful tribute to our Veterans. I'm so glad you took the time to write this story. It is well-written and touching.
Thanks for the share,
Rhonda
Comment Written 14-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2017
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And I am so glad you took the time to read "Tribute." Thank you, Rhonda, for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Dean Kuch
We should always remember our Wounded Warriors and give them the respect they so rightfully deserve.
While this particular story may be a work of fiction, scenarios just like the one depicted in your well written short play out on high school and college athletic fields all across the country.
Nice job with this! You got my vote.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
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We should always remember our Wounded Warriors and give them the respect they so rightfully deserve.
While this particular story may be a work of fiction, scenarios just like the one depicted in your well written short play out on high school and college athletic fields all across the country.
Nice job with this! You got my vote.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Dean, for sharing "Tribute." I certainly welcome your kind praise and vote.
Comment from teols2016
A nice tale and a loving tribute to veterans. It's nice when they are honored by their roots. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
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A nice tale and a loving tribute to veterans. It's nice when they are honored by their roots. Well done and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
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Thank you for sharing "Tribute" and your kind praise.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Ths is an excellent tribute. I wish professional football players could act so honorably. It's a disgrace to see ungrateful thugs being paid millions of dollars to play a game.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
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Ths is an excellent tribute. I wish professional football players could act so honorably. It's a disgrace to see ungrateful thugs being paid millions of dollars to play a game.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2017
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Thank you, Thomas, for sharing "Tribute" and your kind praise.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
A good 100 word story.
You've stayed within the guidelines, told a story, and it has a surprise ending.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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A good 100 word story.
You've stayed within the guidelines, told a story, and it has a surprise ending.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you for sharing "Tribute," Sharon. Glad you liked it.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a nice piece and very timely without being too cloying or overly sentimental.
wheelchair can be one word.
Best of luck to you
GMG
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Hi there,
This is a nice piece and very timely without being too cloying or overly sentimental.
wheelchair can be one word.
Best of luck to you
GMG
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you, GMG, for sharing "Tribute." I am very pleased you did not find it too sentimental.
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a 100 or Dash piece based on high school football and a game wonderfully written honoring our veterans the great theme and imagery flowed well read well with no grammar issues and great descriptive measures good luck with this doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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This is a 100 or Dash piece based on high school football and a game wonderfully written honoring our veterans the great theme and imagery flowed well read well with no grammar issues and great descriptive measures good luck with this doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 12-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2017
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Thank you for sharing "Tribute," Ricky, and for your very kind praise.
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a fine 100 word dash story. You lead the reader to imagine one thing about a football player and then you surprise the reader with a twist ending:
"Ready, sir?"
I smiled. "Take me out, Corporal."
I waved jubilantly as he pushed my wheel chair to the center of the field.
The story I gathered from this was that Captain Allen Pierson was a quarterback. He went off to war and got injured to the point that he is now in a wheelchair. He returns to his high school for a game on Veteran's Day where a new group of boys on his old team play to win for him. This is a patriotic, and well crafted story that remind me of the honors that schools give former students who became soldiers. This shows that the team, the school, and the town has a big heart and appreciation of their veterans.
This is a fine entry on Veteran's Day. I wish you much success with your entry.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
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This is a fine 100 word dash story. You lead the reader to imagine one thing about a football player and then you surprise the reader with a twist ending:
"Ready, sir?"
I smiled. "Take me out, Corporal."
I waved jubilantly as he pushed my wheel chair to the center of the field.
The story I gathered from this was that Captain Allen Pierson was a quarterback. He went off to war and got injured to the point that he is now in a wheelchair. He returns to his high school for a game on Veteran's Day where a new group of boys on his old team play to win for him. This is a patriotic, and well crafted story that remind me of the honors that schools give former students who became soldiers. This shows that the team, the school, and the town has a big heart and appreciation of their veterans.
This is a fine entry on Veteran's Day. I wish you much success with your entry.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2017
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Thank you very much, Sis Cat, for your insightful review of "Tribute" and your kind praise of the story.