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Comment from Pearl Edwards
I admit I see what I don't have - quite an admittance for 'Loverboy', in love with love. To me this is a sentimental journey of love and hope and emotions. Hope I'm someone near right. Enjoyed this one,
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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I admit I see what I don't have - quite an admittance for 'Loverboy', in love with love. To me this is a sentimental journey of love and hope and emotions. Hope I'm someone near right. Enjoyed this one,
cheers
valda
Comment Written 24-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2017
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YES! You are exactly right. Thank you. I'm hard to get most of the time because I just write. LOL Thanks a million. mike
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Michael;
A very poignant and thought-provoking piece. Is this a bit biographical? One can be searching for love, and appearing like they haven't a care in the world. So, I can relate to the words. I marvel at the free verse, because you make it look so easy,
~patty~
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Hi, Michael;
A very poignant and thought-provoking piece. Is this a bit biographical? One can be searching for love, and appearing like they haven't a care in the world. So, I can relate to the words. I marvel at the free verse, because you make it look so easy,
~patty~
Comment Written 22-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2017
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Thanks, Patty
It's biographical to a degree. Time isn't always now or then though. :))
Think of free verse as formal poetry where gremlins came in and scattered it around to suit themselves or A GREMLIN. ;)) mike
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LOL
Comment from rama devi
Truly marvelous free verse poem, my friend. I lvoe the striking closing note (pu intended).
Outstanding imagery, voicing, tone and tenor.
Superb originality.
Superb sculpting of cadences via formatting.
Superb flow.
Superb presentation!
Favorite bits:
am I truly a martyr
a lover
who requires
not
is there love
without
return
AND
why not a flutter
in my chest
where the pounding
is anvil dull
like shoes forged
for an old horse
No nits. It flows fine without punctuation. However, personally, I would opt to use question marks (no other punctuation) where appropriate.
The emotional overtones are exceptional!
Loved this. Wish I had six.
Love,
rd
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017
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Truly marvelous free verse poem, my friend. I lvoe the striking closing note (pu intended).
Outstanding imagery, voicing, tone and tenor.
Superb originality.
Superb sculpting of cadences via formatting.
Superb flow.
Superb presentation!
Favorite bits:
am I truly a martyr
a lover
who requires
not
is there love
without
return
AND
why not a flutter
in my chest
where the pounding
is anvil dull
like shoes forged
for an old horse
No nits. It flows fine without punctuation. However, personally, I would opt to use question marks (no other punctuation) where appropriate.
The emotional overtones are exceptional!
Loved this. Wish I had six.
Love,
rd
Comment Written 21-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2017
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As always, your approval is worth a million sixes. I guess I'm afraid it looks odd with question marks but no other punctuation. But I did add them as you suggested and actually it doesn't look strange at all really. I think it's just weirdness on my part. LOL
Thanks so much. I always think about spacing and punctuation now thanks to you. :)) mike
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Hee hee - thanks for trying them out. To me, it looks odd to have a question without them! LOL glad you liked the idea. I's so pleased with how your finesse in sculpting phrasing has evolved, my friend.
Best, rd