Tragic ending
Her life36 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, JanPerry
= Congrats on the win! Well deserved. This is an excellent encapsulation of Joan D'arc's sacrifice for God and country.
= Certainly inhumane judgment and persecution in those days.
Cheers, J
*** Happy Holidays ***
(*.*) A Smile Is Just A Smile Turned Upside-down (*.*)
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Hi, JanPerry
= Congrats on the win! Well deserved. This is an excellent encapsulation of Joan D'arc's sacrifice for God and country.
= Certainly inhumane judgment and persecution in those days.
Cheers, J
*** Happy Holidays ***
(*.*) A Smile Is Just A Smile Turned Upside-down (*.*)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Thanks so much for your frown turned upside down.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Very interesting story of meeting Joan through your dreams. A much better way of meeting her than having her pop out of the past to visit you in person, I think. *smile* That would be more than a little bit scary, I think. ha!
A small note:
1.) before it's too late, my Joan(,)" I cry out, leaving no doubt
Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Very interesting story of meeting Joan through your dreams. A much better way of meeting her than having her pop out of the past to visit you in person, I think. *smile* That would be more than a little bit scary, I think. ha!
A small note:
1.) before it's too late, my Joan(,)" I cry out, leaving no doubt
Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Thanks Robyn
Comment from Mistydawn
This is a very interesting, well-written, educational story about Joan of Arch. I too agree she was a hero, a brave leader. For her to do all she did in that day and age took a lot of courage. To hold on her faith through the end shows her devotion to god. Great entry, good luck on your contest.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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This is a very interesting, well-written, educational story about Joan of Arch. I too agree she was a hero, a brave leader. For her to do all she did in that day and age took a lot of courage. To hold on her faith through the end shows her devotion to god. Great entry, good luck on your contest.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2017
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Thank you so much.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
You did a good job with this piece, getting in a lot about Joan and the times.
The dark ages during 1400 to 1500 in France- using the term 'dark ages' from a historical point of view would be inaccurate as they ended between years 800-1000, but that's semantics here.
The pithy board of directors sentenced her to death by burning - I'm not sure pithy is the best choice of words here (meaning having substance and point). Petty may be a better choice.
as she is being lead to the stage - led in this instance.
The hypocrisy of the Middle Ages - here you use middle ages where before you use dark ages. I get you didn't capitalise dark ages early on but the reference is still there. You could change it to dark times perhaps?
have all lead her to a place of extreme - in this instance it should be led.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Hi there,
You did a good job with this piece, getting in a lot about Joan and the times.
The dark ages during 1400 to 1500 in France- using the term 'dark ages' from a historical point of view would be inaccurate as they ended between years 800-1000, but that's semantics here.
The pithy board of directors sentenced her to death by burning - I'm not sure pithy is the best choice of words here (meaning having substance and point). Petty may be a better choice.
as she is being lead to the stage - led in this instance.
The hypocrisy of the Middle Ages - here you use middle ages where before you use dark ages. I get you didn't capitalise dark ages early on but the reference is still there. You could change it to dark times perhaps?
have all lead her to a place of extreme - in this instance it should be led.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank for your help. I'll fix it.
Comment from jenintorre
O.M.G. I am truly traumatized after reading your entry for the Joan D'arc contest.
Thank goodness we don't live in such barbaric times. I wish you luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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O.M.G. I am truly traumatized after reading your entry for the Joan D'arc contest.
Thank goodness we don't live in such barbaric times. I wish you luck in the competition.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank you
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A very informative prose writing on Joan D'arc. You have made her seem very personal and understandable as a heroine.
Your description of her pain and torture was very realistic, as well as her deliverance to a better place.
Thank you for the time and effort you put into this writing,
and good luck in contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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A very informative prose writing on Joan D'arc. You have made her seem very personal and understandable as a heroine.
Your description of her pain and torture was very realistic, as well as her deliverance to a better place.
Thank you for the time and effort you put into this writing,
and good luck in contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thanks Rhonda
Comment from zekeziemann
A wonderful history lesson explained with an understanding of the times. I can think of no corrections or suggestions. Good luck in the contest. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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A wonderful history lesson explained with an understanding of the times. I can think of no corrections or suggestions. Good luck in the contest. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2017
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Thank you
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
The church was a cruel and hellish place in those days. There was no Christianity there. Their love of torture ranked among the top of all the worst monsters before and since. The church has a lot to answer for and one day they will. Excellent contest entry. Good luck! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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The church was a cruel and hellish place in those days. There was no Christianity there. Their love of torture ranked among the top of all the worst monsters before and since. The church has a lot to answer for and one day they will. Excellent contest entry. Good luck! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 17-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2017
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Yes I'm shocked by the level of cruelty. But there was a high death rate from diseases as well back then.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good overview of Joan's story. It certainly was a horrific time when she lived. The Dark Ages were filled with harsh control by one church, which allowed no "heresy" as it saw even unproven rumors. We're dealing with fanatical Islam now, but at least people are more knowledgeable in general and not as superstitious. Except for those Muslims who have been raised with NO knowledge of anything but the Koran.
Religion should be a help to people, giving them strength and hope. But it seems like too often religion turns evil, the opposite of what it ought to be.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2017
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Good overview of Joan's story. It certainly was a horrific time when she lived. The Dark Ages were filled with harsh control by one church, which allowed no "heresy" as it saw even unproven rumors. We're dealing with fanatical Islam now, but at least people are more knowledgeable in general and not as superstitious. Except for those Muslims who have been raised with NO knowledge of anything but the Koran.
Religion should be a help to people, giving them strength and hope. But it seems like too often religion turns evil, the opposite of what it ought to be.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2017
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It seems to bring out evil as opposed to saint like behavior. Perhaps the severe restrictions religions uphold are the cause for concern.
Comment from Liberty Justice
WOW you were in a 1st place tie with someone else, but now this thumbs up launched you into 1st place by yourself. Hope you maintain 1st place lead. Your story is amazingly detailed of horrible terrors and evil doings of people in high authority. You paint vivid pictures of barbaric sick demon-like people in this era. Makes me angry. After contest tell me who you are. Hope you win. Again, this thumbs up launched you into 1st place by yourself. Check me out, also. lol liberty justice
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2017
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WOW you were in a 1st place tie with someone else, but now this thumbs up launched you into 1st place by yourself. Hope you maintain 1st place lead. Your story is amazingly detailed of horrible terrors and evil doings of people in high authority. You paint vivid pictures of barbaric sick demon-like people in this era. Makes me angry. After contest tell me who you are. Hope you win. Again, this thumbs up launched you into 1st place by yourself. Check me out, also. lol liberty justice
Comment Written 16-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2017
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Thanks for pushing me up. I just read the other two winners and they are top marks as well.
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Yes, you are in first place (by yourself) and the other two competitors are in 2nd place. Good luck! YOU ARE AN AWESOME WRITER. Ever tried publishing your works in newspapers or magazines that pay money? lol liberty justice
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Oh no. I'm a women's limber, it came natural to me.
Did you know six million women died in Europe due to being called witches? Omg! Talk about myogenic men. Ouch!
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Sorry. Using my Android. Women's liberation. M
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WOW What a sick country! I wonder why women were considered witches a lot more than men were. Well this world is still sick, but not as sick huh? lol liberty justice
