The Importance of Iambic Pentameter
A double sonnet - forward and reverse15 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Dovey,
It's still don't see you in the D's. That little ~ puts you in limbo.
So how's Alaska these days? I've been watching tales of the "The Alaskan Triangle"... UFOs and such.
But getting to your poem, fantastic job with this! Pantygynt must be smiling, ear to ear.
I have no trouble with iambic. It's the pentameter that gives me a headache. It should be called iambic Shakespeare. But you didn't miss a beat.
My favorite lines,
"with pen and tongue at war my thoughts enrage;
lamenting that my tongue has two left feet."
That's pretty special. Awesome.
Thanks for sharing.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
  |
Hi Dovey,
It's still don't see you in the D's. That little ~ puts you in limbo.
So how's Alaska these days? I've been watching tales of the "The Alaskan Triangle"... UFOs and such.
But getting to your poem, fantastic job with this! Pantygynt must be smiling, ear to ear.
I have no trouble with iambic. It's the pentameter that gives me a headache. It should be called iambic Shakespeare. But you didn't miss a beat.
My favorite lines,
"with pen and tongue at war my thoughts enrage;
lamenting that my tongue has two left feet."
That's pretty special. Awesome.
Thanks for sharing.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
-
Hi Kimbob,
I am honored that you have reached so far back in my portfolio to find this piece. Thank you for the glowing review and 6th shiny star. We are still getting some snow showers here in Alaska. I hope true spring finds us soon! lol
Kim
Comment from Unspoken94
What an incredible challenge! And yet, you rose to the challenge.
I can't imagine life without Shakepeare. I very much appreciated your
notes and I wish you well in the challenge. Do you get to compare
notes? -Bill
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
 |
What an incredible challenge! And yet, you rose to the challenge.
I can't imagine life without Shakepeare. I very much appreciated your
notes and I wish you well in the challenge. Do you get to compare
notes? -Bill
Comment Written 17-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
-
Hi Bill!
I truly do struggle with iambic meter but I am working on it. Thank you for the wonderful comments.
Kim
Comment from robyn corum
Kim,
This is just marvelous! I think Jim will be so pleased!! HAHAHA! It's funny, but it's almost unfair that the ones who do the BEST in this challenge are the ones who need his class the LEAST! I wish you the very best of luck in the contest!!
Favorite lines: (which was hard, because it was allll so good!) *smile
I dream of putting poetry to page
with grace of ballerinas, thus complete --
with pen and tongue at war my thoughts enrage;
lamenting that my tongue has two left feet.
Thank you!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
|
Kim,
This is just marvelous! I think Jim will be so pleased!! HAHAHA! It's funny, but it's almost unfair that the ones who do the BEST in this challenge are the ones who need his class the LEAST! I wish you the very best of luck in the contest!!
Favorite lines: (which was hard, because it was allll so good!) *smile
I dream of putting poetry to page
with grace of ballerinas, thus complete --
with pen and tongue at war my thoughts enrage;
lamenting that my tongue has two left feet.
Thank you!
Comment Written 17-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
-
Hi Robyn:
If you only knew how I struggle with iambic meter! lol I have to write each line with a dictionary - and I fear that it really just can't be taught to me! lol Why? Because I can always make the meter sound fine in my head, even if others can't see it! lol The struggle is real, as they say lol
Thanks for the fantastic review!
Kim
Comment from Gloria ....
Kim, I think this absolutely fabulous. Your content great, metre terrific writes excellente, so in my humble opinion, this is a winner.
Great job and fun double sonnet. Shakespeare would be proud.
Gloria
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
|
Kim, I think this absolutely fabulous. Your content great, metre terrific writes excellente, so in my humble opinion, this is a winner.
Great job and fun double sonnet. Shakespeare would be proud.
Gloria
Comment Written 16-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
-
Hi Gloria!
This is such high praise coming from you. I'm honored by your response. I really have struggled with iambic metre. Thank you for the wonderful comments!
Kim
Comment from Pantygynt
Thank you for joining in the fun with this iambic bleat. I don't think I have seen Willy stood on his head like this before. It has given me all sorts of ideas.
Oh yes and your iambs here were perfect as far as I can see.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
|
Thank you for joining in the fun with this iambic bleat. I don't think I have seen Willy stood on his head like this before. It has given me all sorts of ideas.
Oh yes and your iambs here were perfect as far as I can see.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
-
Hi Jim!
So, who won the contest? lol Did I miss the announcement? I had a lot of fun with this challenge and I'm really happy that you enjoyed my double sonnet. I appreciated the challenge and value your opinion.
Thanks!
Kim
Comment from CD Richards
This is really good stuff, Kim. I think you've got the hang of this iambic pentameter after all! The been / pen rhyme at the end is a slight stretch, but I've seen looser, and the rest of the rhyme scheme is perfect. So, once you are a long-serving member of this "Meter Beaters' Club", we will officially be able to call you a meter maid. You'll have to dust off that bikini though (you might need to google that).
Well done,
Craig
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
|
This is really good stuff, Kim. I think you've got the hang of this iambic pentameter after all! The been / pen rhyme at the end is a slight stretch, but I've seen looser, and the rest of the rhyme scheme is perfect. So, once you are a long-serving member of this "Meter Beaters' Club", we will officially be able to call you a meter maid. You'll have to dust off that bikini though (you might need to google that).
Well done,
Craig
Comment Written 16-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
-
Hi Craig -
Of course, been and pen are a perfect rhyme here lol You know that I had to use the dictionary on every line of this piece lol so I truly appreciate the high praise that you've given on the meter. Meter maids never wore bikinis here lol Do I need a scooter, too?
*Hugs*
Kim
Comment from honeytree
I loved the layout and the
boots and the words very much.
We all have our own way of writing
and writing poetry and many other things.
I liked the iambic pentameter part
and the way how the words have been written.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
|
I loved the layout and the
boots and the words very much.
We all have our own way of writing
and writing poetry and many other things.
I liked the iambic pentameter part
and the way how the words have been written.
Honey tree
Comment Written 16-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2017
-
Hi Annie!
Thank you for the gift of this exceptional rating and review. I always value your comments.
Kim
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem in advocacy for iambic meter. We are all apprentices in the art of poetry, and Shakespeare seems to be the master we all like to follow.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
|
A very well-written poem in advocacy for iambic meter. We are all apprentices in the art of poetry, and Shakespeare seems to be the master we all like to follow.
Comment Written 16-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
-
Hi Sandra -
I never thought I would write one to support iambic pentameter lol
Thanks for the lovely comments.
Kim
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the nature and importance of iambic pentameter in poetry and to the poets and how the poet experiences influence and inspiration in making rhythmic poems; I liked.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
|
This speaks the nature and importance of iambic pentameter in poetry and to the poets and how the poet experiences influence and inspiration in making rhythmic poems; I liked.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
-
Thank you so much for the kind review.
Kim
Comment from alf collier
Bravo... for the sentiment and the verse!!! What indeed would we revere? You have crunched the bones.. a fist in a velvet glove, my friend!!
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
|
Bravo... for the sentiment and the verse!!! What indeed would we revere? You have crunched the bones.. a fist in a velvet glove, my friend!!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2017
-
Hi Alf...
You say that like it is a good thing... I hope lol. Thanks for the fun review.
Kim
-
It is, my friend!! Hard hitting truth! LOL