Lighthouse watch
abab poetry12 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a really nice poem and image to accompany. I think we're all fascinated with lighthouses. One small typo here: "To (too ?) late for calm and gentle tide" Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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This is a really nice poem and image to accompany. I think we're all fascinated with lighthouses. One small typo here: "To (too ?) late for calm and gentle tide" Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thank you, Marilyn :-) Carolyn
Comment from patcelaw
If you meant this to be a contest entry it does not show as a contest entry. Contact Tom at support and he can make it into a contest entry for you. Patricia
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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If you meant this to be a contest entry it does not show as a contest entry. Contact Tom at support and he can make it into a contest entry for you. Patricia
Comment Written 07-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Hi Patricia, yes I did intend it to be a contest entry, but did not get back in to speak to Tom. thank you anyway for noticing.
I appreciate your keen eye. :-) Carolyn
Comment from l.raven
HI Carolyn, I think our muses went together on a vacation...LOL...there are other things in our lives that keep our minds tied up...I know mine has been...sigh...I love your light house poem...they do watch over the waters...and the men living and dead in them...very well written my sweet friend...I love your poem...and love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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HI Carolyn, I think our muses went together on a vacation...LOL...there are other things in our lives that keep our minds tied up...I know mine has been...sigh...I love your light house poem...they do watch over the waters...and the men living and dead in them...very well written my sweet friend...I love your poem...and love your picture...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thank you sweet Linda,
We have had a horrendously busy year. Too much sickness and many deaths in
a very short period of time. I love to write and be on the site, however, it seems it
just isn't happening at this time in life. It is always so good to see you and know
you are doing well.
Love, Carolyn
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I know how you feel...I always find myself going out of state to help someone...sigh...but that's ok...it's just to see you when I can...your always so welcome...love xxoo
Comment from MizKat
Hi notes and more,
The picture you used is very nice.
What you wrote to go with it is too.
You are wonderful at writing poetry.
I will always enjoy reading your work.
Kat
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Hi notes and more,
The picture you used is very nice.
What you wrote to go with it is too.
You are wonderful at writing poetry.
I will always enjoy reading your work.
Kat
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Bless your heart, Kat
It is good to see you and wish I had more time to be on
FS. I pray for you and that you will have better health. Are
you still in pain?. I hope not.
I appreciate all the encouraging words.
Love, Carolyn
Comment from country ranch writer
Those light houses come in handy on storm ridden nights getting the men and woman home safely at night. The lighthouse never tires of being the guardian of light oh so bright.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Those light houses come in handy on storm ridden nights getting the men and woman home safely at night. The lighthouse never tires of being the guardian of light oh so bright.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thank you, what a nice commentary!
:-) Carolyn
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Comment from royowen
This is as good as any Dear Carolyn, how Jesus is the lighthouse guiding to the safety of Canaan's shore, or Job's struggle to survive, as a metaphor? Plenty of goads to write, sometimes it's simply not reading and writing that does it, you've got a great gift for writing, stir it up girl! One of Larry's sermons? Anyway it's so good to hear from you dear Carolyn, we are all fine, although I lost a close friend to cancer a couple of weeks ago, but he's happy, it's only we that are bereft. Well done, Caroline, good luck, blessings, Roy
Suggestion : lechrorous instead of perilous! Typo Ore? The dead, for?
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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This is as good as any Dear Carolyn, how Jesus is the lighthouse guiding to the safety of Canaan's shore, or Job's struggle to survive, as a metaphor? Plenty of goads to write, sometimes it's simply not reading and writing that does it, you've got a great gift for writing, stir it up girl! One of Larry's sermons? Anyway it's so good to hear from you dear Carolyn, we are all fine, although I lost a close friend to cancer a couple of weeks ago, but he's happy, it's only we that are bereft. Well done, Caroline, good luck, blessings, Roy
Suggestion : lechrorous instead of perilous! Typo Ore? The dead, for?
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thank you so much Roy,
We are still in the midst of family illness and death. Therefore, I am
not able to visit the site as much as I would like. So many with cancer !!!
I'm sad to hear of your friend. We used to send floral arrangements, now we
send memorials (dollars) to Children's homes (orphanages etc) We feel
that can feed and house in their name and be put to better use than flowers
that fade and die.
I think of you and Elaine often, please take care.
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Me too Carolyn, Gracie Ann has posted a few, but no communication as yet. Yes, Elaine and I have lost several to cancer in recent times, not the least, my dear brother last year. Blessings and Love to you and Larry, thinking of you.Roy and Elaine.
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Me too Carolyn, Gracie Ann has posted a few, but no communication as yet. Yes, Elaine and I have lost several to cancer in recent times, not the least, my dear brother last year. Blessings and Love to you and Larry, thinking of you.Roy and Elaine.
Comment from rspoet
Hello noteandmore,
This poem would have made a fine entry into the ABAB contest
as it is very nicely rhymed
It has that old feel to it that makes words like "doth" appropriate.
A few simple suggestions:
Brightly shines it's beam of light
The rocks and reefs are treacherous
Captains peering through the night
Fighting waters[,] oh[,] so perilous [one or two commas]
Hail, now the light the fog doth hide
For ere landlubbers go to bed
To late for calm and gentle tide [Too]
The lighthouse watches ore the dead [o'er]
Excellent picture and presentation
Well done
RS
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Hello noteandmore,
This poem would have made a fine entry into the ABAB contest
as it is very nicely rhymed
It has that old feel to it that makes words like "doth" appropriate.
A few simple suggestions:
Brightly shines it's beam of light
The rocks and reefs are treacherous
Captains peering through the night
Fighting waters[,] oh[,] so perilous [one or two commas]
Hail, now the light the fog doth hide
For ere landlubbers go to bed
To late for calm and gentle tide [Too]
The lighthouse watches ore the dead [o'er]
Excellent picture and presentation
Well done
RS
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thank you, and I appreciate your fine edit.
I corrected the 'too' :-)
Glad you enjoyed it.
Carolyn
Comment from Heather Knight
Lovely poem, but it doesn't say you're taking part in the contest at the bottom of the page. Maybe something has gone wrong. It's happened to me before.
I love lighthouses, they're so romantic. Or at least they used to be before computers.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Lovely poem, but it doesn't say you're taking part in the contest at the bottom of the page. Maybe something has gone wrong. It's happened to me before.
I love lighthouses, they're so romantic. Or at least they used to be before computers.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Yes, something definitely did happen. I entered the contest according
to reserve and enter ??? But it's ok. The feed back has been good and that
is rewarding. Thank you so much for your own encouragement..
:-) Carolyn
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written ABAB poem. The lighthouse seems to be the inspiration for this beautiful poem. When everyone else goes to sleep the Lighthouse operator starts his watch.
Typos:
To(too) late for calm and gentle tide
The lighthouse watches ore(o'er) the dead
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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A very well-written ABAB poem. The lighthouse seems to be the inspiration for this beautiful poem. When everyone else goes to sleep the Lighthouse operator starts his watch.
Typos:
To(too) late for calm and gentle tide
The lighthouse watches ore(o'er) the dead
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Hi there and thank you so much for the edits and wonderful feed back.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Carolyn
= Nice to see you pop up.
= We've been hitting/missing each other of late.
= I love, love lighthouses. Always wanted to refurbish one and live in it.
= Of course, I'd have to win the lottery. LOL
= Well written and presented.
Cheers, J (*<*)
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Hi, Carolyn
= Nice to see you pop up.
= We've been hitting/missing each other of late.
= I love, love lighthouses. Always wanted to refurbish one and live in it.
= Of course, I'd have to win the lottery. LOL
= Well written and presented.
Cheers, J (*<*)
Comment Written 05-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2017
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Thank you, and hello back to you Jax.
That's funny about the lottery, we always say,
you have to 'play to win'. LOL
Take care of yourself, I have very little time
on FS but am always glad to see you.
Love, Carolyn