Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Marv. Continuous dialogue is very good. Russ thinks Abby is drunk but she seems to be playacting to impress him with her improv in order to get a screen test. Well done.
Marilyn

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2017

Thank you, Marilyn, for staying with me and reviewing this chapter. It's clear to me that you know exactly what is going on.
Thanks for the five stars.
Marv

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

hi, Marv - very funny dialogue - am learning more about your sense of humor. You got the "drunk" words just right -effective and humorous.
I wonder if, instead of adding "this is a romantic comedy" at the end, if up at the top, you would say, A chapter in Loophole, a romantic comedy. Oh, and you left something out in your "background" sentence.
This is cute. I hope you will keep the sequences going so we don't forget what went before. Hope you're on a roll!
pome lover

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2017

Thanks for your very nice review.
I'd like to try your suggestion. Do you mean at the beginning of the chapter? Where is ?background? sentence?
I'll try posting this story more frequently. Thanks for the compliments.
Marv

reply by pome lover on 04-Oct-2017

yep - at the beginning of each post, when, at the top, you have Chapter whatever of the book, Loophole - or don't even say "book", I'd say, Chapter 47 of Loophole, a romantic comedy.

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

OH, my goodness, Marv!
This is a fantastic, funny conversation. You managed to get it sounding all natural and realistic. He seems to have the patience of Job with this drunk secretary. I liked the way she forgot what her original question was and got all befuddled--as drunks do.
Nicole

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017

I'm so glad you chose to review this chapter.
Everything you said is music to my ears.
Abby is studying to be an actress, currently concentrating on Improv. She was trying it out on Russ.
A few chapters ago, Russ displayed the patience of Job with his friend, Liz. She passed out from drinking, leaving Russ to do the gentlemanly thing.
Thanks for your encouragement and the 5 stars.
Marv

Comment from emptypage

Excellent

Love the twist. Good story. I was sure they were stoned, not drunk, but, in any case, it's a good, funny story.

You wrote, "improve, so you would give me a screen test."--I think you mean "improv."

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017

Thanks for your review.
Glad you loved the twist. Thanks for the compliments. I appreciate the 5 stars.
I'm glad you caught my spelling error.
Marv

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

This is the first time i am reading this .It made me smile a lot .

i liked the question she asked .Was she really inebriated or she was trying to prove that she can act?

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017

Thanks for reviewing.
Abby was acting drunk. Just trying to prove she can act.
I'm happy that you smiled a lot.
In a previous chapter, she fooled Russ over the phone by acting a couple of different ways. One would think he would be used to it by now but he fell for her act again.
I'm glad you liked the question.
Marv

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hey Marv;
a wonderful job with the drunken dialogue. I almost gave you a 'nit' for the first slip of the tongue, but then I realized what you were doing.

I enjoyed the story line, and I'm so sad she got so drunk.

Well done, my friend,

~patty~

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017

Thank you, Patty, for reviewing this chapter. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the compliment on the drunken dialogue. It was fun writing that.
This gal didn't get drunk. She was acting, trying to entice Russ to get her a screen test.
In an earlier chapter, Liz does get drunk and Russ has to get her lifeless body back to her apartment.
Marv