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Comment from Brigitte Elko
This is a very well written piece. This reader had to read it more than once to " get it". Once I became enlightened to the hidden innuendos, I love it. There is nothing to change. You have my vote.
brigitte
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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This is a very well written piece. This reader had to read it more than once to " get it". Once I became enlightened to the hidden innuendos, I love it. There is nothing to change. You have my vote.
brigitte
Comment Written 06-Oct-2017
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2017
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Hi, Brigitte
I sooooo appreciate you taking the time to read in depth and give this a chance, not many will. I suppose I take a risk writing something a bit out of the ordinary, but it's well worth it when someone like you DOES understand fully. Thanks so very much. mike
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My pleasure and good luck. My vote is yours.
brigitte
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I'm assuming this is a series of metaphors where the man talks about what he did on the earth in the guise of 'MAN'. The cockroaches take over the earth which has been so neglected and is now a rubbish tip. But they learn just like we did and it's where we're at, history repeating itself. Anywhere near? Giddy :))
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I'm assuming this is a series of metaphors where the man talks about what he did on the earth in the guise of 'MAN'. The cockroaches take over the earth which has been so neglected and is now a rubbish tip. But they learn just like we did and it's where we're at, history repeating itself. Anywhere near? Giddy :))
Comment Written 28-Sep-2017
Comment from Bill Schott
This is some strange art here, my friend. This would definitely find an audience, if for nothing more than the cockroach cartoon, or the phrase "So I pushed the button and ate the last of the mutton." Groovy doin's.
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This is some strange art here, my friend. This would definitely find an audience, if for nothing more than the cockroach cartoon, or the phrase "So I pushed the button and ate the last of the mutton." Groovy doin's.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2017
Comment from apky
You did a great job with both the visuals and by your spare descriptions. It gives the reader just enough of the details to keep their interest.
I also liked how you undercut the pathos, bringing humans to the forefront.
Well done, Michael.
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You did a great job with both the visuals and by your spare descriptions. It gives the reader just enough of the details to keep their interest.
I also liked how you undercut the pathos, bringing humans to the forefront.
Well done, Michael.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2017
Comment from Pantygynt
A strange play indeed that seems to owe much to the absurdist style of Eugene Ionesco with more than a touch of Kael and Josef Capek's "The insect Play" in its final scene.
The gradual enclosure of the speaker by the the white boards is a device straight out of the absurdist school, which relies heavily on the involvement of inanimate stage props almost as members of the cast. c.f. "Chairs" and "Amedee or How to Get Rid of It".
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A strange play indeed that seems to owe much to the absurdist style of Eugene Ionesco with more than a touch of Kael and Josef Capek's "The insect Play" in its final scene.
The gradual enclosure of the speaker by the the white boards is a device straight out of the absurdist school, which relies heavily on the involvement of inanimate stage props almost as members of the cast. c.f. "Chairs" and "Amedee or How to Get Rid of It".
Comment Written 27-Sep-2017
Comment from giraffmang
Very nice, Michael.
Good use of visuals but keeping the description to a bare minimum and not giving too much detail, just enough to allow things to transpire.
The cockroaches at the end are a great touch. It undercuts the pathos which might be engendered from the monologue and underscores the 'importance' of man.
and wanderin' the highways and byways' - you don't need the last apostrophe unless you ant to use it as a quote mark and in that case you need a corresponding one, probably before highways.
Nice
G
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Very nice, Michael.
Good use of visuals but keeping the description to a bare minimum and not giving too much detail, just enough to allow things to transpire.
The cockroaches at the end are a great touch. It undercuts the pathos which might be engendered from the monologue and underscores the 'importance' of man.
and wanderin' the highways and byways' - you don't need the last apostrophe unless you ant to use it as a quote mark and in that case you need a corresponding one, probably before highways.
Nice
G
Comment Written 27-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2017
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Hey, Gman
Thanks a trillion. You got this 100 percent. Thanks God someone did. LOL
Oh, I'll remove the apostrophe then, wasn't sure. Now that I look at it, I don't know why I added it. :))
Thanks again. mike
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written script with one man act. From pants on fire to a world of cockroaches. One of the rare insects that will probably survive the world after the human destroyed the world.
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A very well-written script with one man act. From pants on fire to a world of cockroaches. One of the rare insects that will probably survive the world after the human destroyed the world.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2017
Comment from DR DIP
topless firemen
Interesting that you put this inn the category of commentary and philosophy I would have thought more satire lol
As I said before i really enjoy your writes you are the thinking poets' poet. thanks for sharing
I love the irony of cockroaches Go forth and multiply"..they are definitely the best at it. When all of mankind is wiped out by the nuclear holocaust that is imminent the cockroach will be the one who survives.
dip
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topless firemen
Interesting that you put this inn the category of commentary and philosophy I would have thought more satire lol
As I said before i really enjoy your writes you are the thinking poets' poet. thanks for sharing
I love the irony of cockroaches Go forth and multiply"..they are definitely the best at it. When all of mankind is wiped out by the nuclear holocaust that is imminent the cockroach will be the one who survives.
dip
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my!!! At the beginning I thought of a special my husband is watching on the Vietnam war, by Ken Burns. Then your subject changed and took me off guard. Great job.
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Oh my!!! At the beginning I thought of a special my husband is watching on the Vietnam war, by Ken Burns. Then your subject changed and took me off guard. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
This is what I dig about you. Do THIS! To hell with what people think. Like you say, no one gets you anyway. Your goal should be to entertain ME anyway. Hehe. Not sure if I totally get this, but it is fun to read and think about. Would love to see it. NG
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This is what I dig about you. Do THIS! To hell with what people think. Like you say, no one gets you anyway. Your goal should be to entertain ME anyway. Hehe. Not sure if I totally get this, but it is fun to read and think about. Would love to see it. NG
Comment Written 26-Sep-2017