Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

LOL! Hi Bill. Your script is hilarious. Dialogue is priceless. Lots of humor and written well in this cute garden story about the caterpillars. Great job. Marilyn

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2017

Thank you, Marilyn.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

haha sounds like 'real' people Bill.

I enjoyed your story. I do believe people act this way to compensate for what life hands them--the oversharing to mask shyness etc. You did a great job developing the personalities of these characters in such a short space. It read well & flowed well too. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Sep-2017

Thank you very much, Jan. Bill

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lol! If caterpillars could really talk, I'd imagine they would sound just like that. But even with the obvious lack of memory, the two have distinctly different personalities, one amiable and the other more sinister as you get to know her. Well done!
One typo:
" Who was you boyfriend?" ( your)

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017

Thanks for the catch.

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Murder in the garden patch? Oh, my.

This is hilarious, and Tom is a scream. I've known people like him. Maybe I've been him. lol

Not only did Caterpill's boyfriend cheat on her, but with an inch worm. Oh, the shame!

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017

Thanks, da, for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hahahahaha, Bill, your usual funny self. I like this Tom character. And I don't blame him for backing off. Just one nit: Who was you boyfriend? = Who was your boyfriend. All best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017

Thanks, Ulla, for the excellent review and the help. Bill

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

I find Tom annoying. All the more so because I know some people or have met some people just like him. They seem to overstate just about everything they say. I pray that I am never found guilty of doing likewise.

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017

Tom is just Tom. What can I say?

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Another cracker Bill, love the dialogue and your humour which I love more and more..................................My name is Tom...ha ha
Look forward to the next instalment
Mitchell

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017

Thanks, Mitchell. Glad this got a grin going.

Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)

Exceptional

You are f@@@ing hilarious. Seriously I have not laughed so much in a long time. You have a comedic talent which exceeds all others on this site. It is truly amazing and I am still laughing...AN INCH WORM....you make the whole thing sound so convincing and real, your imagination is wild. I think you may be a genius! Well done for making me laugh until I nearly cried! Kindest regards Meia xx

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017

Wow! Tanks, Meia, for the sensational review. I'm so pleased you liked this. I need to nominate you as a reviewer for making my day.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is really a cute conversation about the caterpillars. Tom was really an aggressive caterpillar that wanted friends. You used very good and cute dialogue and wording. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 25-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2017

Thanks, Teri.

reply by Teri7 on 25-Sep-2017

you are so welcome!