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Comment from Mitchell Brontė
This was a wonderful Nonet Bill, peddling past pointless pests was a cracking line but my favourite...reinventing what it is to survive...
Great stuff
Mitchell
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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This was a wonderful Nonet Bill, peddling past pointless pests was a cracking line but my favourite...reinventing what it is to survive...
Great stuff
Mitchell
Comment Written 20-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Thank you, Mitchell, for the positive review. Bill
Comment from nomi338
Oh that it were possible for me to chill for a few days and emerge a hunk that all the babes wanted to get next to. Unfortunately I am doomed to be as ugly as I have always been. Worse, as I age I become even less attractive. Expanding waistline and decreasing hairline equals disgusting old fart. Yeah, that's me.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Oh that it were possible for me to chill for a few days and emerge a hunk that all the babes wanted to get next to. Unfortunately I am doomed to be as ugly as I have always been. Worse, as I age I become even less attractive. Expanding waistline and decreasing hairline equals disgusting old fart. Yeah, that's me.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2017
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Did I write this? Sounds like me.
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I fear old buddy that you and I are cut from the same cloth.
Comment from damommy
A great acrostic. Is this also a nonet?
Great descriptions of a caterpillar. I especially like 'rippling like a wave.' That's exactly what they look like, but I would never have thought of that expression.
It reinvents itself so it can live on as a butterfly.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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A great acrostic. Is this also a nonet?
Great descriptions of a caterpillar. I especially like 'rippling like a wave.' That's exactly what they look like, but I would never have thought of that expression.
It reinvents itself so it can live on as a butterfly.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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It's a nonet with a couplet of ten-syllables because the word caterpillar has eleven letters.
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Very good. 8-)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Very good Bill of how you spelled out the word Caterpillar
after you catch it in the casing itself in cocoon
As my daughter does to teach her day care children
places the cocoon in a jar and waits for a beautiful butter fly
Gert
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Very good Bill of how you spelled out the word Caterpillar
after you catch it in the casing itself in cocoon
As my daughter does to teach her day care children
places the cocoon in a jar and waits for a beautiful butter fly
Gert
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Gert, for giving this a look. Bill
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You are so welcome Bill
Gert
Comment from Possummagic
We've gone from skunks to Caterpillars! Now one would thing there's a limited amount that can be said about a caterpillar but they are wrong, and you are about to show us all everything there is to know about Caterpillars. I look forward to it! Well written. PM
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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We've gone from skunks to Caterpillars! Now one would thing there's a limited amount that can be said about a caterpillar but they are wrong, and you are about to show us all everything there is to know about Caterpillars. I look forward to it! Well written. PM
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thanks, PM
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You're welcome.PM
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi Bill. Love the acrostic form of writing. You have captured perfectly the caterpillar! in all her splendor. It should be interesting as to what is coming next. xx deborah
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Hi Bill. Love the acrostic form of writing. You have captured perfectly the caterpillar! in all her splendor. It should be interesting as to what is coming next. xx deborah
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Deborah
Comment from Gloria ....
This is most cool, Bill. I even got my Nintendo face on reading it, and that means I am paying close attention. You captured the caterpillar perfectly and the poem even looks like a cocoon.
Thanks for sharing my friend.
Gloria
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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This is most cool, Bill. I even got my Nintendo face on reading it, and that means I am paying close attention. You captured the caterpillar perfectly and the poem even looks like a cocoon.
Thanks for sharing my friend.
Gloria
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thank you, Gloria, for the neat review. Bill
Comment from Thomas Bowling
VEry good. I'm surprised there isn't a contest for this. When I was a kid my father was concerned about his crops. He offered a penny for each caterpillar I brought him. I found a nest of caterpillars and brought to him. I made out like a bandit.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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VEry good. I'm surprised there isn't a contest for this. When I was a kid my father was concerned about his crops. He offered a penny for each caterpillar I brought him. I found a nest of caterpillars and brought to him. I made out like a bandit.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thanks, Thomas, for the excellent review. No one ever made me that offer or there would a scarcity of butterflies.
Comment from rama devi
How clever to make the nonet an acrostic too! Superb imagery, tone and phonetics read aloud. Loved the C-K sounds counterpointed with the gentler P, S and L sounds--all in abundance and deftly woven in. Superb!
Favorite lines to read aloud--fluid flow...
Rippling like a wave
Peddling past pointless pests
In search of a resting place
Letting nature find fulfillment
Perfect closing note:
All silent inside a woven chamber
Reinventing what it is to survive
Enjoyed this,
Nice presentation too.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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How clever to make the nonet an acrostic too! Superb imagery, tone and phonetics read aloud. Loved the C-K sounds counterpointed with the gentler P, S and L sounds--all in abundance and deftly woven in. Superb!
Favorite lines to read aloud--fluid flow...
Rippling like a wave
Peddling past pointless pests
In search of a resting place
Letting nature find fulfillment
Perfect closing note:
All silent inside a woven chamber
Reinventing what it is to survive
Enjoyed this,
Nice presentation too.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thank you, rd, for the thorough and kind review. Bill
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:-))
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Bill,
This is a great presentation--the picture is perfect, the bold first letter of each line, the alliteration of 'p', & the message.
It is a wonder that something as ugly as this can turn into something beautiful.
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Bill,
This is a great presentation--the picture is perfect, the bold first letter of each line, the alliteration of 'p', & the message.
It is a wonder that something as ugly as this can turn into something beautiful.
Good job & thanks for sharing. Jan
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thank you, Jan, for the kind review. Bill