Sneaky Simon
Alliterative Poetry4 total reviews
Comment from mmonaghan777
This should be everyone's speech practice everyday. What a poem. What research had to have been to follow Sneaky Simon and his sheep stealing. I will be reading it a few more times.
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This should be everyone's speech practice everyday. What a poem. What research had to have been to follow Sneaky Simon and his sheep stealing. I will be reading it a few more times.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Haha. Oh, that sneaky Simon!! :)
It's difficult to have a poem make sense when all of the letters begin the same, but yours totally did make sense, and it made me laugh. Love the repetition in "saw some shepherds sleep, sleep, sleep." The picture is priceless and is the perfect complement to your poem.
I suspect that your poem will fare very well in this contest. It's the best that I've read so far. Best wishes for the contest with this very fine entry. ~~ Connie
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Haha. Oh, that sneaky Simon!! :)
It's difficult to have a poem make sense when all of the letters begin the same, but yours totally did make sense, and it made me laugh. Love the repetition in "saw some shepherds sleep, sleep, sleep." The picture is priceless and is the perfect complement to your poem.
I suspect that your poem will fare very well in this contest. It's the best that I've read so far. Best wishes for the contest with this very fine entry. ~~ Connie
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
thank you for sharing your Letter poem using the letter, 's.' You have a great deal of alliteration (as you should,) and your words flow well. You managed to make the piece make sense as well as fit the poetic form. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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thank you for sharing your Letter poem using the letter, 's.' You have a great deal of alliteration (as you should,) and your words flow well. You managed to make the piece make sense as well as fit the poetic form. Good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2017
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Thank you for the excellent review and your good wishes, Patty.
Comment from tfawcus
You've created quite a tongue-twister here! I can't help rather liking sneaky Simon, stealing away on his Suzuki with his spoils! Just a couple of possible edits.
"snoozers - boozers (snoozer-boozers)"
"secretly sells sweep (sheep?)"
"Sneaky Simon sneakung (sneaking) still"
I think my favorite line - one that I'm still trying to get my tongue around - is: "Slacker shepherds sang swan songs"!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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You've created quite a tongue-twister here! I can't help rather liking sneaky Simon, stealing away on his Suzuki with his spoils! Just a couple of possible edits.
"snoozers - boozers (snoozer-boozers)"
"secretly sells sweep (sheep?)"
"Sneaky Simon sneakung (sneaking) still"
I think my favorite line - one that I'm still trying to get my tongue around - is: "Slacker shepherds sang swan songs"!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2017
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You must have a bloodhound nose, or an eagle eye.
Nary a glitch will pass you by.
Thanks once again, Tony
I have made most of your suggest5ed corrections.
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