The Big D
Divorce is so very painful.25 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
My sister went through similar...it's hard to grit your teeth and witness :-(
I hope your son hangs on to the good memories and jettisons the rest!
Nice rhyming and meter :-)
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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My sister went through similar...it's hard to grit your teeth and witness :-(
I hope your son hangs on to the good memories and jettisons the rest!
Nice rhyming and meter :-)
Comment Written 13-Feb-2018
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Comment from sandy montgomery
Divorce is painful. It is rending of part of yourself. Not easy to go through. Great poem with good flow. Natural rhyme and good rhythm. Thank you for sharing your work.
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Divorce is painful. It is rending of part of yourself. Not easy to go through. Great poem with good flow. Natural rhyme and good rhythm. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2017
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Comment from Oatmeal
QUOIKY,
The theme was well thought out. The flow was smooth. Your arrangement looks very nice. You did a wonderful job with the challenge that was presented to you.
I am sorry for your son. I am on my fourth and last husband. This one is a keeper.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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QUOIKY,
The theme was well thought out. The flow was smooth. Your arrangement looks very nice. You did a wonderful job with the challenge that was presented to you.
I am sorry for your son. I am on my fourth and last husband. This one is a keeper.
There was no SPAG, no typos, no room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
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Comment from zanya
The pain of divorce and the 'split', 'break',- call it what we will that it brings shatters our lives however much celebrities may like to tell us otherwise !!!!! Repetition of 'remember' reminds us that the bliss of togetherness is no more
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The pain of divorce and the 'split', 'break',- call it what we will that it brings shatters our lives however much celebrities may like to tell us otherwise !!!!! Repetition of 'remember' reminds us that the bliss of togetherness is no more
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
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Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Quoiky
I really enjoyed your entry for the "Love Hurts" contest. The repetition was quite effective... "Remember?"
Sometimes love does hurt. I'm almost 67, but my heart was battered badly when I was in Grade 9 many moons ago. I have never forgotten it. I won't go into the whole story, but I'll just tell you this part... it was at a school dance. The girl of my dreams, Susan, started walking across the dance floor ...Lady's Tag, it was. My heart started pounding in my chest... she was going to ask me to dance with her! But instead, she asked my buddy sitting next to me. She asked Ricky. She might as well have driven a sword into my chest, for that is what it felt like. We had been boyfriend & girlfriend from October to Easter, but something went wrong. Sometimes love really hurts. It affected me my whole life. Talk about memories.
This poem hit home.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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Hi Quoiky
I really enjoyed your entry for the "Love Hurts" contest. The repetition was quite effective... "Remember?"
Sometimes love does hurt. I'm almost 67, but my heart was battered badly when I was in Grade 9 many moons ago. I have never forgotten it. I won't go into the whole story, but I'll just tell you this part... it was at a school dance. The girl of my dreams, Susan, started walking across the dance floor ...Lady's Tag, it was. My heart started pounding in my chest... she was going to ask me to dance with her! But instead, she asked my buddy sitting next to me. She asked Ricky. She might as well have driven a sword into my chest, for that is what it felt like. We had been boyfriend & girlfriend from October to Easter, but something went wrong. Sometimes love really hurts. It affected me my whole life. Talk about memories.
This poem hit home.
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
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Comment from godlucifer
stars of love,stars of pain. the pain of a star is the love of a star. when pain is painful we think of the star which is love. we cherish love like we cherish a star and we separate ourselves from pain and the star. your poem was a good rhyming and the meaning was well express. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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stars of love,stars of pain. the pain of a star is the love of a star. when pain is painful we think of the star which is love. we cherish love like we cherish a star and we separate ourselves from pain and the star. your poem was a good rhyming and the meaning was well express. thanks for the read. "your so vein" means mood or humor.
your so vein
godlucifer
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
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Comment from oliver818
This is a very good poem for the love hurts competition. It has everything in it. It flows well and has great rhythm. Thanks for sharing and sharing have a really great day
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This is a very good poem for the love hurts competition. It has everything in it. It flows well and has great rhythm. Thanks for sharing and sharing have a really great day
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Remember how the days flew by
We'd think of tomorrow, you and I
But, tomorrow would vanish no answer to 'why'
Remember? ' I certainly feel his pain I have often said the pain of losing outweighs the joy of love, at least for me. This was a wonderful poem well done kind regards Meia x
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Remember how the days flew by
We'd think of tomorrow, you and I
But, tomorrow would vanish no answer to 'why'
Remember? ' I certainly feel his pain I have often said the pain of losing outweighs the joy of love, at least for me. This was a wonderful poem well done kind regards Meia x
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks how harsh, hard, deplorable and painful is divorce, an instant change or fall in shape of relation leaves nothing but memories which are mostly sweet; I liked.
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This speaks how harsh, hard, deplorable and painful is divorce, an instant change or fall in shape of relation leaves nothing but memories which are mostly sweet; I liked.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2017
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Comment from JennaG
This piece is very touching and emotional. I'm sorry to read that your son went through this. It's heartbreaking when love falls apart. I think you've captured that feeling so well in your poem. It's very well written. Thank you for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2018
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This piece is very touching and emotional. I'm sorry to read that your son went through this. It's heartbreaking when love falls apart. I think you've captured that feeling so well in your poem. It's very well written. Thank you for sharing. :)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2017
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